Graveyard
Land after the fires13 total reviews
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Wow, what a way to depict natural disaster.
Cryptic yet understandable
continue on this writing path, its an adventure in exploring and deciphering.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Wow, what a way to depict natural disaster.
Cryptic yet understandable
continue on this writing path, its an adventure in exploring and deciphering.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for this fine braiding and for your review I'm happy to receive always thanks again hope your evening's great!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A dramatically descriptive free form poem Lea, about the graveyard left after destructive fires have swept through.
Thunderous revenge for injustice- that sounds like mother nature's narrative to humans. Great writing and good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
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A dramatically descriptive free form poem Lea, about the graveyard left after destructive fires have swept through.
Thunderous revenge for injustice- that sounds like mother nature's narrative to humans. Great writing and good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from kahpot
Wow! I love the way you have described the destruction caused by man's ignorance, it is as though the trees and rivers (nature) is fighting back, giving us a warning, so very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Wow! I love the way you have described the destruction caused by man's ignorance, it is as though the trees and rivers (nature) is fighting back, giving us a warning, so very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You chose very strong descripting words for this contest entry. I could feel the power brought to the words. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
I hope this entry tells us you're back and writing again.
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You chose very strong descripting words for this contest entry. I could feel the power brought to the words. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and good luck with the contest.
I hope this entry tells us you're back and writing again.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
It is good to see you back in action, which leads me to hope some things in your life have stabilized.
This poem is rich in descriptive language that helps us visualize an earthly death as fire produces an ashen graveyard. Best wishes in the contest.
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It is good to see you back in action, which leads me to hope some things in your life have stabilized.
This poem is rich in descriptive language that helps us visualize an earthly death as fire produces an ashen graveyard. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem about a fire-swept land includes interesting personification like: skeletal arms crying in the bend
The photo points out that it is the limbs of trees that may look skeletal. This poem reminds me of the time that Yellowstone National Park in Wyoming had an awful wildfire, I think back around 1988. I did not even want to go look at it until 10 years later, when the trees had grown back but were still only about four or five feet tall. I think your first and third stanzas are the strongest. The second stanza seems to need a little punctuation, maybe like this:
Earth's bed running from chalky roots deathly release
The mountain's wash takes life remaining
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This poem about a fire-swept land includes interesting personification like: skeletal arms crying in the bend
The photo points out that it is the limbs of trees that may look skeletal. This poem reminds me of the time that Yellowstone National Park in Wyoming had an awful wildfire, I think back around 1988. I did not even want to go look at it until 10 years later, when the trees had grown back but were still only about four or five feet tall. I think your first and third stanzas are the strongest. The second stanza seems to need a little punctuation, maybe like this:
Earth's bed running from chalky roots deathly release
The mountain's wash takes life remaining
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, what a delight to have you back, Lea! Only very recently I was thinking about you again. Hopefully, you've settled in well and adorned your new abode with all your wonderful art. This is such a poignant and perceptive free verse. Your beloved trees, so stark and shrinking from their former magnificence, fill us with horror as we acknowledge our negligence and responsibility. Your last line, so clever, as you refer to the paper (sourced from the trees) dying. Personification, alliteration and your poetic mastery bring this subject to vivid, painful life. It's a true wasteland, a graveyard (spiritually as well as factually). Well done and good luck, Lea! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Wow, what a delight to have you back, Lea! Only very recently I was thinking about you again. Hopefully, you've settled in well and adorned your new abode with all your wonderful art. This is such a poignant and perceptive free verse. Your beloved trees, so stark and shrinking from their former magnificence, fill us with horror as we acknowledge our negligence and responsibility. Your last line, so clever, as you refer to the paper (sourced from the trees) dying. Personification, alliteration and your poetic mastery bring this subject to vivid, painful life. It's a true wasteland, a graveyard (spiritually as well as factually). Well done and good luck, Lea! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you Debbie for your wonderful reviews I appreciate it so much thanks again for hanging in there with me too I've been away a while and it's nice to know I have you all thank you again!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
She's BAAAAAA-AAAAAAAACK!! And better than ever, pulling at our heartstrings and bringing to life entities that seem desolate and unworth a glance.
Outrageously excellent job!! So happy to have your talent back on the page!! xoxox
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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She's BAAAAAA-AAAAAAAACK!! And better than ever, pulling at our heartstrings and bringing to life entities that seem desolate and unworth a glance.
Outrageously excellent job!! So happy to have your talent back on the page!! xoxox
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you again my darling very much appreciate it!
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Always my pleasure!! xoxo
Comment from Jim Wile
Welcome back, Lea! I've missed your presence here, but I understand the reason for it and hope everything is going well in your new home. I'm hoping you will also continue with your wonderful story in the Ghost trilogy. I have so missed that!
I enjoyed this free verse in which you've provided stark imagery of a once-thriving forest that is now in decline after the fires. Such a shame, but nature often has a way of prevailing in the end. A very vivid and beautifully worded poem. - Jim
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Welcome back, Lea! I've missed your presence here, but I understand the reason for it and hope everything is going well in your new home. I'm hoping you will also continue with your wonderful story in the Ghost trilogy. I have so missed that!
I enjoyed this free verse in which you've provided stark imagery of a once-thriving forest that is now in decline after the fires. Such a shame, but nature often has a way of prevailing in the end. A very vivid and beautifully worded poem. - Jim
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you Jim for reading and providing one for your wonderful reviews again! Thank you too if your kind messages checking up on me I very much appreciate it I have been so very busy with my home but I've now since return to unload some of these words piling up behind my eyes. Thanks again Jim I look forward to reading yours too and I'm glad you liked this!
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So glad to hear from you, Lea. I'm sure it was a very busy time for you, and I hope everything is going well now in your new home, and some of your prior drama can be left behind.
If you would really like to resume reading What We See, we're only at the halfway point in the story right now. I could easily fill you in on what you've missed. Just say the word, and I can send you a brief recap of what's happened in the story since you last reviewed it.
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I would absolutely love to thank you very much!
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I will send this via email.
Comment from BethShelby
Beatuifully written but sad to read the demise of the landscape. It is wonderful free verse. You are a gifted poet. It is good to see you posting something because we've missing you lately.
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Beatuifully written but sad to read the demise of the landscape. It is wonderful free verse. You are a gifted poet. It is good to see you posting something because we've missing you lately.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
