To my Peers
An entry for the club challenge9 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a very powerful Zip form poem. Clear message and meaning in two distinct lines. The picture added gives a solid punch in the gut to the reader and adds to the understanding of the poem. Very nicely done!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This is a very powerful Zip form poem. Clear message and meaning in two distinct lines. The picture added gives a solid punch in the gut to the reader and adds to the understanding of the poem. Very nicely done!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
A meaningful zip haiku (new to me) and your words contain a lot of truth. Why we persist in polluting our planetI dn't understand. The next generation depends on a clean environment for their survival. Well said. A fine reponse to the prompt.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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A meaningful zip haiku (new to me) and your words contain a lot of truth. Why we persist in polluting our planetI dn't understand. The next generation depends on a clean environment for their survival. Well said. A fine reponse to the prompt.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Wendy, for your very understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I never heard a zip haiku, it's interesting.
I would not place dashes in the middle of the line and I don't hear the internal rhymes, but I'm not an expert with this form.
I trust I will survive --
if you succeed in clearing my path
Nice poem.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I never heard a zip haiku, it's interesting.
I would not place dashes in the middle of the line and I don't hear the internal rhymes, but I'm not an expert with this form.
I trust I will survive --
if you succeed in clearing my path
Nice poem.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy, I thought that the rules for this prompt asked for the break in each line though I'm not sure, no rhymes were required as far as I know, never mind I had fun trying, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
You make a powerful point here. If life on this planet is to survive - we need to work together to save it. You did well in responding to the club challenge. Much food for thought.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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You make a powerful point here. If life on this planet is to survive - we need to work together to save it. You did well in responding to the club challenge. Much food for thought.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was well done. You say a lot with just the two lines. "I trust ~ I will survive" conveys a sense of faith which is great. The second line, "if you succeed ~ in clearing my path," shows us that help is needed. I thought with just those two lines you said so much. Great job!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I thought this was well done. You say a lot with just the two lines. "I trust ~ I will survive" conveys a sense of faith which is great. The second line, "if you succeed ~ in clearing my path," shows us that help is needed. I thought with just those two lines you said so much. Great job!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, for your very understanding comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh interesting little zip - deep and thought-provoking with a good message well said.
thank you for participating in the zip event and sharing your poem!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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ooh interesting little zip - deep and thought-provoking with a good message well said.
thank you for participating in the zip event and sharing your poem!
shelley :)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, shelly, I enjoyed this challenge, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written poem for the club challenge, and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia .
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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This is a very well written poem for the club challenge, and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia .
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
That is quite a photograph with all that debris on the beach, I wonder where this photograph was taken? Your words are powerful and I loved the message within, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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That is quite a photograph with all that debris on the beach, I wonder where this photograph was taken? Your words are powerful and I loved the message within, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Dolly, I think i Cambodia, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from royowen
When we were serving in Cambodia, we saw a lot of people who were living around a rubbishy, from which they earned a living, I played my guitar and sung with the kids, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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When we were serving in Cambodia, we saw a lot of people who were living around a rubbishy, from which they earned a living, I played my guitar and sung with the kids, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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I can relate, I play golf in Thailand every year, wish I could do more
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Lucky you
