Spring Haiku
Watching the birds from my kitchen window5 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
Absolutely lovely, very hard to write a lot about a form which is so succinct. I love the imagery of spring nest building. My only suggestion would be to make the text larger to make it stand out more and easier to read.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Absolutely lovely, very hard to write a lot about a form which is so succinct. I love the imagery of spring nest building. My only suggestion would be to make the text larger to make it stand out more and easier to read.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your suggestion, Mark. I?m not sure how to do that. I?d appreciate it, if you could tell me how. I also haven?t figured out how to add relevant artwork, so my poems have stood alone without pictoral support.
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Thanks for your suggestion, Mark. I?m not sure how to do that. I?d appreciate it, if you could tell me how. I also haven?t figured out how to add relevant artwork, so my poems have stood alone without pictoral support.
Comment from Terry Reilly
I liked this a lot. But aren't there six syllables in the first line? I saw a magpie yesterday carrying a piece of dead vegetation which must have been twelve inches long. God bless him.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I liked this a lot. But aren't there six syllables in the first line? I saw a magpie yesterday carrying a piece of dead vegetation which must have been twelve inches long. God bless him.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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So glad you liked it. You must be reading the word towards as two syllables. I intended it to sound like one: twards. Thanks for sharing about the magpie.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest meets the criteria for syllables. A lovely view of Spring from a kitchen window. Very enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest meets the criteria for syllables. A lovely view of Spring from a kitchen window. Very enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Marilyn! I love watching the birds and the view from my window is a perfect place from which to watch them.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love watching birds nesting and flying with bits of twigs and debris to build their nests, your poem brought the birds artistic prowess to life here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I love watching birds nesting and flying with bits of twigs and debris to build their nests, your poem brought the birds artistic prowess to life here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Dolly. I've missed hearing from you. x
Comment from Mintybee
I liked your observational poem. A bird building a nest is a sure sign spring is returning. The words you chose conveyed your meaning clearly. However, your syllable count is off. Your first line has 6 syllables in it. Other than that, a decent poem.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I liked your observational poem. A bird building a nest is a sure sign spring is returning. The words you chose conveyed your meaning clearly. However, your syllable count is off. Your first line has 6 syllables in it. Other than that, a decent poem.
Mintybee
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Hi, Minty Bee. You may have counted towards as two syllables. I counted it as one.