The Bequest
Frenemies meet4 total reviews
Comment from DonKip
Clever and brilliant. I thoroughly enjoyed reading and following to the end. The revelation of character intent provided great twists in the story.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Clever and brilliant. I thoroughly enjoyed reading and following to the end. The revelation of character intent provided great twists in the story.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for the encouraging words, Don!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and couldn't help but smile. This lady was great. I enjoyed how she took the taker. LOL Good luck with the contest.
If you harm me in any way you won't get away with it." (a comma is needed after 'way')
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and couldn't help but smile. This lady was great. I enjoyed how she took the taker. LOL Good luck with the contest.
If you harm me in any way you won't get away with it." (a comma is needed after 'way')
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Helpful review! Thanks, Barbara.
Comment from jessizero
This was a great story told in just dialogue for the contest. You told it well and painted a picture without setting the scene with descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This was a great story told in just dialogue for the contest. You told it well and painted a picture without setting the scene with descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the encouraging words!
Comment from lancellot
It is an unbelievable story. I couldn't help thinking, just hire an escort or a hooker. How easy could that be. But, as it went on towards the end, it became even more unbelievable as the woman turned the tables on his with skill, cunning, and intelligence. And to cap it off, the man liked her even more. Total win win for women.
Now having said all that. I think you have a sure fire winner here. There is no way the secret women voters will not put this in the winner's circle.
A winning writer must know his or her audience and judges. And you've shown you know FanStory's judges. Good work.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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It is an unbelievable story. I couldn't help thinking, just hire an escort or a hooker. How easy could that be. But, as it went on towards the end, it became even more unbelievable as the woman turned the tables on his with skill, cunning, and intelligence. And to cap it off, the man liked her even more. Total win win for women.
Now having said all that. I think you have a sure fire winner here. There is no way the secret women voters will not put this in the winner's circle.
A winning writer must know his or her audience and judges. And you've shown you know FanStory's judges. Good work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Such a kind review makes a writer's day! Thank you so much.