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About her beautiful eyes5 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge. You use good imagery words and emotion. Many readers will relate to this. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge. You use good imagery words and emotion. Many readers will relate to this. Thank you for sharing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the feedback Alex
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You're welcome!
Comment from RJ Heritage
Short and very dranatic words. I am not quite sure. Is this in anaphoric style?
It is well written and your color choice fits the mood very well.
Good luck in the contest.
RJ
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Short and very dranatic words. I am not quite sure. Is this in anaphoric style?
It is well written and your color choice fits the mood very well.
Good luck in the contest.
RJ
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Hey RJ, it?s not anaphoric. Didn?t follow any particular style. I just put down words that felt right.. hehe.
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Okay, great.
Comment from jessizero
Your repetition of the line "Her eyes tell tales" was very effective. Your words were painful and beautiful at once. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Your repetition of the line "Her eyes tell tales" was very effective. Your words were painful and beautiful at once. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you Jess I appreciate it:)
Comment from jim vecchio
I enjoyed this brief poem very much. Just wondering: Should the final line be "Her eyes TELL tales?" As you've used that phrase twice, it may add more cohesion and a present tense point of view, of someone witnessing her eyes NOW telling tales of the past.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed this brief poem very much. Just wondering: Should the final line be "Her eyes TELL tales?" As you've used that phrase twice, it may add more cohesion and a present tense point of view, of someone witnessing her eyes NOW telling tales of the past.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Hey Jim,
It?s supposed to be tell tales. I didn?t read it carefully and copy pasted the unedited version. Dang it.
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I've done that so many times! But, then, I'm known as the King of Typos!
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Omg, lol I?m the queen of bad spelling haha. Imagine if we wrote a book together. I doubt anyone would be able to read it. lol
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That's okay. I'm used to no one reading my writing. You could tell by my standing in most contests!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Our eyes often give away what we are thinking or what we are looking at and how we feel, a fun post for the contest, I enjoyed your musings here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Our eyes often give away what we are thinking or what we are looking at and how we feel, a fun post for the contest, I enjoyed your musings here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Thank you Dolly:) I appreciate you reading my stuff:)
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Your are most welcome x
