Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I'm not sure love is a good thing in this contest entry. I never thought of love as having clipped someone's wings. Thank you for sharing this entry with us. The flow is excellent. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024

Thank you:)

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

A lovely entry for the Love Poem Poetry contest. I liked the comparison of confessing love to someone as having your wings clipped. I really liked the last three lines. Good luck.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024

Thank you Marilyn:))

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I thin we become vulnerable when we reveal our love for someone as they may expect things from us that we don't want to give in the name of love, some people cross the line and take advantage of us, a poignant write, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024

Thank you Dolly:)

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

aww this was sad... love not returned...
nice imagery of clipping the wings

only suggestion i can make is to maybe break up the stanzas a bit? just a thought ;)

thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024

Thank you Shelly:) I will look at that:)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the metaphor of clipped wings, and also the tar which suggests the tar is difficult to shake, seeing that's a road sealant, this us beautifully written my friend, excellent language, well done, good luck, blessings
Roy

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024

Thank you so much Roy:)

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

sounds as if someone yearned for a forbidden love and when it finally was hers, she discovered it wasn't what it appeared to be from afar. Well done.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024

Thank you Carol:))