Chilled & Red
A Wife's Guile11 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"Sometimes I fancy I'll kiss the wife
Till I see she's armed with a knife" hahaha
Thank you for participating in the Finding Your Muse event.
Great entry with a wonderful example of
Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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"Sometimes I fancy I'll kiss the wife
Till I see she's armed with a knife" hahaha
Thank you for participating in the Finding Your Muse event.
Great entry with a wonderful example of
Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
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Gypsy, your reviews are always appreciated. I'm not sure I'd agree with your choice of word, beautiful. This was, if I remember in a moment of intoxication.
Comment from Sanku
I loved it .The lines ending in 'chilled and red' adds a special zing to your poem .I like the wife and her approach! She keeps it chilled and red.A very addition to the club theme.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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I loved it .The lines ending in 'chilled and red' adds a special zing to your poem .I like the wife and her approach! She keeps it chilled and red.A very addition to the club theme.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. Delighted to know you accepted it in the manner it was meant.
Comment from kahpot
A frisky write, I think we would all like to don a mask to escape our downfalls, at some time or other, alcohol is a wonderful shield, though not infallible, like words are bound to fumble, a wonderful read****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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A frisky write, I think we would all like to don a mask to escape our downfalls, at some time or other, alcohol is a wonderful shield, though not infallible, like words are bound to fumble, a wonderful read****kahpot
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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A wonderful read, wow. Are you on the same medication as me? Seriously, thank you for such a fantastic review. Comments such as this keep me writing.
Comment from teafor2
Bob, a satirical coup is rendered by this end rhyming poetical post...Mono-
rhymes for each stanza with a flexible refrain...A very humorous bit of levity logically sequenced with a subtle, but not too surprising of an ending, especially, after a good number of "red" libations. Well done. teafor2
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Bob, a satirical coup is rendered by this end rhyming poetical post...Mono-
rhymes for each stanza with a flexible refrain...A very humorous bit of levity logically sequenced with a subtle, but not too surprising of an ending, especially, after a good number of "red" libations. Well done. teafor2
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I drink it for medical reasons alone. It helps me sleep. Sometimes I need a little more, but never more than ten. That's when the bottle runs out.
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Ok.
Comment from Esther Brown
Ahhh...chilled and red. Funny. Reminds me of a Frank Zappa song...
I am deaf, we were riding the Harley. Gary had Zappa blasting. He has crazy lyrics. Finally I got his attention when we were at a stop light. "Gary why is he singing about white pony elephants?"...it is white port and lemon juice. Chilled red sounds great...but I want to try a white pony. Esther
Esther
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Ahhh...chilled and red. Funny. Reminds me of a Frank Zappa song...
I am deaf, we were riding the Harley. Gary had Zappa blasting. He has crazy lyrics. Finally I got his attention when we were at a stop light. "Gary why is he singing about white pony elephants?"...it is white port and lemon juice. Chilled red sounds great...but I want to try a white pony. Esther
Esther
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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When we were kids we used to have a white pony. He was a young colt who provided a nasty kick. He also mastered the two B's, buck and biting. Apart from that he was a beautiful little colt. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your taking time to look at my work.
Comment from Begin Again
Maybe just a tad too much of that "chilled & red" that sends you to those places you really shouldn't go. Very creative and a fun read. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Maybe just a tad too much of that "chilled & red" that sends you to those places you really shouldn't go. Very creative and a fun read. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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A tad too much, truly if you're still standing, you're still in need of sustenance, and sometimes that sustenance needs to be liquified. You notice I make no comment on the positive comments. We writer's are such a sensitive. Seriously, thank you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
First, this is a very clever piece that should be well accepted. I'd give it a six but have no more stars. I like it.
And then, I don't know why the need to express how I would have written some lines differently, but here I go again ...like I'd eliminate 'up to'in line two which would have the syllable count match the first line.
Line one, verse 2 - 'I'll see' to seeing. Line 4 Finding solace in a port chilled and red. Verse 3 -line 4 I find 'that's" superfluous and unnecessary, as well as 'its' in verse 4, line 4.
Still, poetic license is ours alone, and variety is the spice of life, which, in conclusion, is me saying, "Keep quiet, Sir Thomas. Bob is a published author. "
Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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First, this is a very clever piece that should be well accepted. I'd give it a six but have no more stars. I like it.
And then, I don't know why the need to express how I would have written some lines differently, but here I go again ...like I'd eliminate 'up to'in line two which would have the syllable count match the first line.
Line one, verse 2 - 'I'll see' to seeing. Line 4 Finding solace in a port chilled and red. Verse 3 -line 4 I find 'that's" superfluous and unnecessary, as well as 'its' in verse 4, line 4.
Still, poetic license is ours alone, and variety is the spice of life, which, in conclusion, is me saying, "Keep quiet, Sir Thomas. Bob is a published author. "
Well done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Sir Thomas, as a knighted published author your advice is always valued, not as much however as a seven-year-old bottle of Hardy Brothers red, chilled of course. They tell me it's cheaper to buy in dozens. Just an idea. six each.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I don't think you're crazy, Bob! This is good old fun and humour. I love that repetitive reference to the glass of port and your rhyme pattern is a delight to read (Any chance tonight, Deary? - superb!). A great entry! Keep them coming! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I don't think you're crazy, Bob! This is good old fun and humour. I love that repetitive reference to the glass of port and your rhyme pattern is a delight to read (Any chance tonight, Deary? - superb!). A great entry! Keep them coming! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Debbie, my fellow imbiber of that delightful red juice of the grape. What a lovely reply. And while I endorse your assessment on the grape I'm not so sure on your understanding of crazy.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, you are an asset to this site Bob, you're the master of the tongue in cheek, and this reveals how good you are with these slightly self deprecating gems, well done mate, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Heh heh, you are an asset to this site Bob, you're the master of the tongue in cheek, and this reveals how good you are with these slightly self deprecating gems, well done mate, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I've often been awarded this award's cousin, the foot in mouth award. In fact, I still have teeth marks on my feet from those incidents. Thanks again, Mr. Owens for awarding me the prestigious TIC award.
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Heh heh funny Bob,
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your wife has obviously read this post and had a good laugh Bob, you made me smile too with your inventive post about downing a glass of port chilled and red, and here's me thinking it should served at room temperature! This us a fun post, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Your wife has obviously read this post and had a good laugh Bob, you made me smile too with your inventive post about downing a glass of port chilled and red, and here's me thinking it should served at room temperature! This us a fun post, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Your right, it should be, but as my wife says, I never do anything right.
