Floret
1/6/1 poem6 total reviews
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was a very cute poem. Your syllable count was good. I liked that you made it rhyme. The artwork went well with your piece. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This was a very cute poem. Your syllable count was good. I liked that you made it rhyme. The artwork went well with your piece. Best of luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely! So often the 3rd line fails in these 1-6-1 but this one holds it own! Bees and flowers are a delight we long to see and 'whee' expresses the bee's sentiments as well as ours. A strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Lovely! So often the 3rd line fails in these 1-6-1 but this one holds it own! Bees and flowers are a delight we long to see and 'whee' expresses the bee's sentiments as well as ours. A strong contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Great review -yes rhyming can be challenging in the small format poem. zanya
Comment from Daylily
This is a delightful entry in the 1-6-1 contest and, getting to read it just a short while after I woke up this morning, it has helped start my day with a beautiful experience. :-) Note: I overslept a bit as I usually get up around seven a.m. I was working a jigsaw puzzle late last night and had to force myself to stop. They are very relaxing for me and I love working them nearly as much as I love writing. Smiles, Lily
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is a delightful entry in the 1-6-1 contest and, getting to read it just a short while after I woke up this morning, it has helped start my day with a beautiful experience. :-) Note: I overslept a bit as I usually get up around seven a.m. I was working a jigsaw puzzle late last night and had to force myself to stop. They are very relaxing for me and I love working them nearly as much as I love writing. Smiles, Lily
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Great review- yes jigsaw puzzles especially the big ones can be absorbing. zanya
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Soon they will be out and about sipping and collecting nectar.
These hard working critters are important for our survival and they are dying.
We should be focused on taking care of our home planet, our fauna and flora.
NB: You need to read the requirements..
All lines must rhyme.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Ciao!
Soon they will be out and about sipping and collecting nectar.
These hard working critters are important for our survival and they are dying.
We should be focused on taking care of our home planet, our fauna and flora.
NB: You need to read the requirements..
All lines must rhyme.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reading- yes forget rhyming first time around- yes our bees are precious.zanya
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a good first attempt at a 1-6-1 poem. The syllable count is perfect. However, each of the three lines are supposed to rhyme. Here is the example given in the contest rules.
Breath
Stolen by crystal meth
Death
I would love to read it after you make your corrections. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is a good first attempt at a 1-6-1 poem. The syllable count is perfect. However, each of the three lines are supposed to rhyme. Here is the example given in the contest rules.
Breath
Stolen by crystal meth
Death
I would love to read it after you make your corrections. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Yes thanks for sharing and reminder! Much appreciated. zanya
Comment from fm wright
You might want to reconsider your wording as the contest rules stipulate that all three lines must rhyme. Otherwise it is a wonderful entry for the contest. You may still have time to change it.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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You might want to reconsider your wording as the contest rules stipulate that all three lines must rhyme. Otherwise it is a wonderful entry for the contest. You may still have time to change it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Yes indeed I forgot the rhyme first time around! Thanks for sharing zanya
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You're welcome.