Aging
5-5-5 poem7 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Don't tell me about it! What a great image, so well reflected by your excellent, rhyming and very relatable 5-5-5. The only suggestion I'd make
is to tighten up the text on the last line. This has to be a strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Don't tell me about it! What a great image, so well reflected by your excellent, rhyming and very relatable 5-5-5. The only suggestion I'd make
is to tighten up the text on the last line. This has to be a strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is exactly how a person feels when you are aging. You say pain, pain, go away never come back I say! It's part of getting old and your poem is true to the poetic words.
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This is exactly how a person feels when you are aging. You say pain, pain, go away never come back I say! It's part of getting old and your poem is true to the poetic words.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
Comment from Saki the Artist
Hehe very clever. I like that you made it anytime even though it looks like the prompt didn't require it.
I don't know if it was intentional but I liked the assonance in "Aging" as kind of an internal rhyme.
I'm wondering where you got the artwork from. Please don't forget to credit the creator (especially if it's yourself)!
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Hehe very clever. I like that you made it anytime even though it looks like the prompt didn't require it.
I don't know if it was intentional but I liked the assonance in "Aging" as kind of an internal rhyme.
I'm wondering where you got the artwork from. Please don't forget to credit the creator (especially if it's yourself)!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
It is true. After 18 it's pretty much all downhill. Nothing, physically, gets better with time. Thankfully, we do have the opportunity to get smarter! Great poem for the entry. Best of luck! Julie.
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It is true. After 18 it's pretty much all downhill. Nothing, physically, gets better with time. Thankfully, we do have the opportunity to get smarter! Great poem for the entry. Best of luck! Julie.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent 5-5-5 writing entry prompt. You really paint a picture we can all visualize and understand. Getting older is not for sissys. The artwork is perfect for the poem. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
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An excellent 5-5-5 writing entry prompt. You really paint a picture we can all visualize and understand. Getting older is not for sissys. The artwork is perfect for the poem. Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
Comment from jessizero
You got the syllable count right, and I loved your rhymes. Growing old is no fun, that's for sure. Your picture helped to capture the feel of the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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You got the syllable count right, and I loved your rhymes. Growing old is no fun, that's for sure. Your picture helped to capture the feel of the poem. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
Comment from gramalot8
Oh, I definitely can relate to this poem. I'm in my 75th year and relate to every syllable you've written! Lol
And the aging photo is perfect. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Oh, I definitely can relate to this poem. I'm in my 75th year and relate to every syllable you've written! Lol
And the aging photo is perfect. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I'm not quite to the senior citizen stage yet but sometimes have days that I feel like it.