Canterbury
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Arrival"a classic tale, retold
29 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The description here is palpable. You have certainly brought the scene to life. Much enoyed, especially having never read the Canterbury Tales. kay
suggested edits:
I had heard tale of a pilgrimage > I had heard a tale of a pilgrimage
and I needed to be careful to not reveal my true purpose. > and I would need to be careful not to reveal my true purpose.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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The description here is palpable. You have certainly brought the scene to life. Much enoyed, especially having never read the Canterbury Tales. kay
suggested edits:
I had heard tale of a pilgrimage > I had heard a tale of a pilgrimage
and I needed to be careful to not reveal my true purpose. > and I would need to be careful not to reveal my true purpose.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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The syntax is a little off here but it's 14th century so I'm gonna let those ones go as the author's voice. lol Much appreciated. G
Comment from Begin Again
Marvelous! I love your descriptive way of writing and the dose of humor as well. I enjoyed the beginning of this story and shall move on to the next.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Marvelous! I love your descriptive way of writing and the dose of humor as well. I enjoyed the beginning of this story and shall move on to the next.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, carol. this is a big undertaking and probably not the best first project back after a long break but there you go! lol Much appreciated. G
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So we both are "newbies" on the return. In January, I came back after a long time. Maybe we can help each other out and offer encouragement. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
I have not read the Canterbury Tales, so I shall be visiting for the first time! This was a very well-written introduction to your story, rich with period appropriate description.
Julie
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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I have not read the Canterbury Tales, so I shall be visiting for the first time! This was a very well-written introduction to your story, rich with period appropriate description.
Julie
Comment Written 17-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for the positive review for this short piece. All the best. G
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Gareth!
And what a delightful classic tale it is to be revisited! I am looking forward to reading your next chapter. But in the meantime, know that I adore the work of Geoffrey Chaucer - so much so that even when I was a junior in my undergraduate college, I took an English course entitled simply, "Chaucer," and it was taught in Middle English! Oh my stars! Mind you, that was before the Internet or google.com! How I loved it all! I could have used "Copious amounts of mead, ale, and wine," but settled for black coffee many nights as I struggled with understanding Middle English!
Much appreciation!
Fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Hello, Gareth!
And what a delightful classic tale it is to be revisited! I am looking forward to reading your next chapter. But in the meantime, know that I adore the work of Geoffrey Chaucer - so much so that even when I was a junior in my undergraduate college, I took an English course entitled simply, "Chaucer," and it was taught in Middle English! Oh my stars! Mind you, that was before the Internet or google.com! How I loved it all! I could have used "Copious amounts of mead, ale, and wine," but settled for black coffee many nights as I struggled with understanding Middle English!
Much appreciation!
Fondly,
diane
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Yep. I studied some of it it in school . Pardoner's tale I think. No internet etc for me either. lol Much appreciated. G
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is a well written prologue. There doesn't seem to be enough information and meat for a proper introduction to what lay before the reader. Is this meant to be part one of the first chapter, like a 1A?
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Hmm, this is a well written prologue. There doesn't seem to be enough information and meat for a proper introduction to what lay before the reader. Is this meant to be part one of the first chapter, like a 1A?
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Nope, it's the initial set up (plot, language, tone, purpose and a bit of intrigue). The narrator arrives at the starting point and sits back to take in his travelling companions. Chapters 2 and 3 will deal with his companions and then onto to journey itself.
It's a particular tone and style of a piece given it's set in the 14th century.
Much appreciated. G
Comment from SimianSavant
Nice work! My phone is about to die so I only have time to comment on proofreading.
Falling in with such a diverse group, under the guise of 'writer' <= comma here
A glorious time of year with tender green shoots bursting from the ground; the tree tops alive with birdsong; and the light wind caressing all with its sweet breath, bringing life anew. <= This is a fragment, but can be excused under poetic license. The semicolons however should be commas as the are not separating independent clauses with a clear subject and predicate (progressive verbs ending in "ing" function as adjectives rather than verbs)
strange and distant lands, <= period instead
A bustling business of some renown, and one I could attest to personally. <= fragment, most easily solved by converting this period to a comma to merge with the next sentence
Thanks for the read,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Nice work! My phone is about to die so I only have time to comment on proofreading.
Falling in with such a diverse group, under the guise of 'writer' <= comma here
A glorious time of year with tender green shoots bursting from the ground; the tree tops alive with birdsong; and the light wind caressing all with its sweet breath, bringing life anew. <= This is a fragment, but can be excused under poetic license. The semicolons however should be commas as the are not separating independent clauses with a clear subject and predicate (progressive verbs ending in "ing" function as adjectives rather than verbs)
strange and distant lands, <= period instead
A bustling business of some renown, and one I could attest to personally. <= fragment, most easily solved by converting this period to a comma to merge with the next sentence
Thanks for the read,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Excellent help here my friend. I have to spend time translating from middle english and poetic form to prose and updating somewhat. I keep missing bits & pieces lol but it's fun. Much appreciated. G
Comment from Jim Wile
Just wonderful writing, G-man. Unfortunately, no 6s left, but I certainly enjoyed your literary style.
So this will be a revisit of the Canterbury Tales. It's been years since I've read those, and I've largely forgotten them, so I'm looking forward to this. Can't wait for the next chapter. - Jim
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Just wonderful writing, G-man. Unfortunately, no 6s left, but I certainly enjoyed your literary style.
So this will be a revisit of the Canterbury Tales. It's been years since I've read those, and I've largely forgotten them, so I'm looking forward to this. Can't wait for the next chapter. - Jim
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Many thanks as always, Jim. G
Comment from rspoet
Hello Gareth,
It's good to see your name and fascinating post appear on my screen.
Marvelous descriptive imagery introduces the setting of the story perfectly.
It should be a fun endeavor to revisit the tales in prose. Hopefully, the copious amounts of mead, ale and wine won't distort the writer's observational skills to much.
"anew. It was, indeed, the perfect time for travel, for adventure, and journeys to strange and distant lands,
However, on this fine spring morning, it was not far and distant lands which drew my attention but..."
Perhaps it is merely old English punctuation, otherwise, I'd suggest a period after lands, or lower case on "However" and maybe a comma after "attention." Of course, Chaucer capitalized new lines because of the poetic form.
Excellent beginning to your story.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Hello Gareth,
It's good to see your name and fascinating post appear on my screen.
Marvelous descriptive imagery introduces the setting of the story perfectly.
It should be a fun endeavor to revisit the tales in prose. Hopefully, the copious amounts of mead, ale and wine won't distort the writer's observational skills to much.
"anew. It was, indeed, the perfect time for travel, for adventure, and journeys to strange and distant lands,
However, on this fine spring morning, it was not far and distant lands which drew my attention but..."
Perhaps it is merely old English punctuation, otherwise, I'd suggest a period after lands, or lower case on "However" and maybe a comma after "attention." Of course, Chaucer capitalized new lines because of the poetic form.
Excellent beginning to your story.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, Robert. I just missed a few little bits & pieces. Updating from middle english and poetry to prose is a challenge but also quite fun! lol Much appreciated. G
Comment from jim vecchio
I wish I had a six for this one! It was one of the best shorts I've read on this site! Sure puts my humble writing to shame. I also would like to see more of this Pilgrim's Progress as he continues to gather local color for his "Canterbury Tales".
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I wish I had a six for this one! It was one of the best shorts I've read on this site! Sure puts my humble writing to shame. I also would like to see more of this Pilgrim's Progress as he continues to gather local color for his "Canterbury Tales".
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for the great response to this piece, Jim. G
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Loved it!
Comment from Mintybee
The description in this is well done and, in places, gorgeous. I never really liked the Canterbury Tales, but your version of Chaucer is intriguing. You leave us wondering what he's really up to.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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The description in this is well done and, in places, gorgeous. I never really liked the Canterbury Tales, but your version of Chaucer is intriguing. You leave us wondering what he's really up to.
Mintybee
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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I studied it in school many moons ago and I think with the things we have to read you get a certain image of them. The tales themselves are quite salacious and rude in places. lol Much appreciated. GMG