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Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello again Gypsy! (Port Raid Review #2)
I LOVE sensual poetry--sensual in the sense of passion, as in inspired by Erato! And the Greek muse of this type of poetry must surely love this one. It blooms with the most exquisite phrases to show the narrator's need for her lover. (I am going to assume that the narrator is a "she," although the poem never specifies.)
Some Thoughts:
---"the moon rests on our skin" --This entire senryu that starts the poem is wonderful, but I wanted to focus on this line. The use of the word "rests" gives the moon a gentle role to play in this rendevous. It is perfect that you do not refer to the moon's light, but the moon itself. This type of hyperbole is what gives poetry its beauty, for it implies that the moon approves and is complicit in their lovemaking (and might even be participating in it figuratively).
---The second senryu approaches the line defining erotica, but a careful phrase like "hidden places" keeps it just on this side of it. Taking the reader that close, though, has a way of titillating them anyway.
---The third senryu brings us three evocative nouns: "ache," "sweetness," and "flame." These nouns to me become the very core of the expression. This is what her lover means to her, an almagamation of pain, joy, and heat that says it all about the power of her feelings.
---And the last senryu lifts us out of the physical and into the spiritual when she claims that "your soul is my beacon." There is also the insinuation of reincarnation here at the end with "life after life."
---As usual, your excellent poetry is enhanced by such a tasteful and colorful presentation. You are a true artist, my friend!
I am very impressed by this poem. It's sex and love, passion and destiny. Well done!
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Hello again Gypsy! (Port Raid Review #2)
I LOVE sensual poetry--sensual in the sense of passion, as in inspired by Erato! And the Greek muse of this type of poetry must surely love this one. It blooms with the most exquisite phrases to show the narrator's need for her lover. (I am going to assume that the narrator is a "she," although the poem never specifies.)
Some Thoughts:
---"the moon rests on our skin" --This entire senryu that starts the poem is wonderful, but I wanted to focus on this line. The use of the word "rests" gives the moon a gentle role to play in this rendevous. It is perfect that you do not refer to the moon's light, but the moon itself. This type of hyperbole is what gives poetry its beauty, for it implies that the moon approves and is complicit in their lovemaking (and might even be participating in it figuratively).
---The second senryu approaches the line defining erotica, but a careful phrase like "hidden places" keeps it just on this side of it. Taking the reader that close, though, has a way of titillating them anyway.
---The third senryu brings us three evocative nouns: "ache," "sweetness," and "flame." These nouns to me become the very core of the expression. This is what her lover means to her, an almagamation of pain, joy, and heat that says it all about the power of her feelings.
---And the last senryu lifts us out of the physical and into the spiritual when she claims that "your soul is my beacon." There is also the insinuation of reincarnation here at the end with "life after life."
---As usual, your excellent poetry is enhanced by such a tasteful and colorful presentation. You are a true artist, my friend!
I am very impressed by this poem. It's sex and love, passion and destiny. Well done!
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
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Wow, thank you, Patrick and Pookie! I love your detailed reviews. They are helpful, detailed, and so long! It must take you a long time and I appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a very nice poem. It puts vivid images and feeling in my head. I also like this Senryu style of poetry. Thanks for sharing your poem Gypsy Blue Rose!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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This is a very nice poem. It puts vivid images and feeling in my head. I also like this Senryu style of poetry. Thanks for sharing your poem Gypsy Blue Rose!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Jodi.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
There is so much beauty in this poem and some intimacy, too. The imagination can make the desires intimate, but the images are beyond its beauty.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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There is so much beauty in this poem and some intimacy, too. The imagination can make the desires intimate, but the images are beyond its beauty.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Rosemary.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Esther Brown
Adored it. Reminded me of the song of Solomon in the Bible. I like the Novalis saying above as well....about poetry healing wounds. Writing is healing. I love the way you put the words together. Inspiring.
Esther
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Adored it. Reminded me of the song of Solomon in the Bible. I like the Novalis saying above as well....about poetry healing wounds. Writing is healing. I love the way you put the words together. Inspiring.
Esther
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I did write a poem inspired by the songs of Salomon. It's very romantic. My friend Helen suggested I write it. I'm not sure where is at, lol
Thank you, Esther.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, gypsy is how it should be....the way love effects you before time and reality bash in your head and love turns a bit boring and bitter
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Another fine poem, gypsy is how it should be....the way love effects you before time and reality bash in your head and love turns a bit boring and bitter
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Mike, 😊
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh, so very sensual. I enjoyed reading this poem. Once again, your God given talents outshines others with the poem and the presentation. Wonderful job with both.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Oh, so very sensual. I enjoyed reading this poem. Once again, your God given talents outshines others with the poem and the presentation. Wonderful job with both.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara.
Gypsy hugs 🤗
Comment from GWHARGIS
This made me think of a romance novel that spans time. Where the couple keeps reconnecting in different eras. Star crossed lovers, if you will. Very rich in romance and passion. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This made me think of a romance novel that spans time. Where the couple keeps reconnecting in different eras. Star crossed lovers, if you will. Very rich in romance and passion. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen.
Gypsy hugs 🤗
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Hubba Hubba. The sexuality is so raw. I wish I was in better health and had some young thing to jump on.
Oh, for my better days. You are naughty to stir all that up. Not that I mind. Karen
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hubba Hubba. The sexuality is so raw. I wish I was in better health and had some young thing to jump on.
Oh, for my better days. You are naughty to stir all that up. Not that I mind. Karen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Karen.
Gypsy hugs 🤗
Comment from royowen
Another excellent post, full of passion, full of great life, in the wonderful language of those that are deeply involved with there passionately engaged lover, this is superbly written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Another excellent post, full of passion, full of great life, in the wonderful language of those that are deeply involved with there passionately engaged lover, this is superbly written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy.
Gypsy hugs 🤗
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Most welcome
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice, romantic, lightly sensual, well written and presented.
A poem definitely made for lovers.
notes:
Suggestion only:
ripples on my thighs--or-
ripples up my thighs--
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This is very nice, romantic, lightly sensual, well written and presented.
A poem definitely made for lovers.
notes:
Suggestion only:
ripples on my thighs--or-
ripples up my thighs--
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, sir lancelot, I appreciate your help. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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