Ms. Kitty's lost Lunch
Don't lose your lunch, or your head.11 total reviews
Comment from Sarita Méndez
This is a nice little poem, and I love its imagery.
The picture you chose is very beautiful.
Thank you very mucho for sharing and good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This is a nice little poem, and I love its imagery.
The picture you chose is very beautiful.
Thank you very mucho for sharing and good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
That was funny. And, it was very clever. I had been disappointed on here so far. You are a welcome sight.
Sometimes I despair of these contests. People winning because they have friends not talent. So, I try to vote on as many as I can. If more people would vote on more than just the ones they write for, things would be fairer. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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That was funny. And, it was very clever. I had been disappointed on here so far. You are a welcome sight.
Sometimes I despair of these contests. People winning because they have friends not talent. So, I try to vote on as many as I can. If more people would vote on more than just the ones they write for, things would be fairer. :-) Karen
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate that.
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever entry showing creativity and originality along with a fun and humorous theme.The accompaniment is also fun, a good choice to accompany your poem. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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A very clever entry showing creativity and originality along with a fun and humorous theme.The accompaniment is also fun, a good choice to accompany your poem. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Begin Again
Oh my! Ms. Kitty eats her friends for lunch..a horror movie for sure. But definitely cute as the little bird realizes he could be next. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Oh my! Ms. Kitty eats her friends for lunch..a horror movie for sure. But definitely cute as the little bird realizes he could be next. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a delightful poem, sweetly told, flawlessly rhymed. I can see this as a children's book, one that adults would take pleasure in reading. A great contest entry. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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This is a delightful poem, sweetly told, flawlessly rhymed. I can see this as a children's book, one that adults would take pleasure in reading. A great contest entry. Best of luck.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Awe, thank you so much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Kitties just love chasing mice and our cat would offer up a mouse every now and then to say thanks for his supper, you made me smile with this post, good luck with he contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Kitties just love chasing mice and our cat would offer up a mouse every now and then to say thanks for his supper, you made me smile with this post, good luck with he contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Ha. Yes, it was fun to write. Thank you so much.
Comment from Sallyo
Great use of the prompt! It's funny, fictional and it tells a story. There are a few editorial matters...
"I am not sure." I said, quite wary.
"I am not sure," I said, quite wary.
heard her say "Now where did they go?"
heard her say, "Now where did they go?"
"That is nonsense." she hissed in a rage.
"That is nonsense!" she hissed in a rage.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Great use of the prompt! It's funny, fictional and it tells a story. There are a few editorial matters...
"I am not sure." I said, quite wary.
"I am not sure," I said, quite wary.
heard her say "Now where did they go?"
heard her say, "Now where did they go?"
"That is nonsense." she hissed in a rage.
"That is nonsense!" she hissed in a rage.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, appreciate the help.
Comment from Saki the Artist
This is super cute. It was categorized as Children's Story, not poetry, so I want expecting a poem. What a nice surprise!
One part I was a tad confused about was "Perhaps it's keeping them in a cage." Who or what is the "it" referring to? I assume it's the owner? I'm sure I could figure it out, but if the intended audience is children, they may be confused.
Small grammar correction: it should be "why have my pets RUN" instead of ran.
I thought the ending was really clever and cute. A cat blaming its owner for a lost toy is very catty.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This is super cute. It was categorized as Children's Story, not poetry, so I want expecting a poem. What a nice surprise!
One part I was a tad confused about was "Perhaps it's keeping them in a cage." Who or what is the "it" referring to? I assume it's the owner? I'm sure I could figure it out, but if the intended audience is children, they may be confused.
Small grammar correction: it should be "why have my pets RUN" instead of ran.
I thought the ending was really clever and cute. A cat blaming its owner for a lost toy is very catty.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review, I am glad you liked it.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Poor Ms. Kitty. Preschoolers will be on the side of the mice that got away. Kindergarteners will hope Ms. Kitty catches the mice or a bird. They won't want her to be hungry. This story has a great rhythmic rhyme that captures children's attention. Best wishes in the contest.
My personal favorite lines:
"A can of tuna that just won't do. I play with my food, before I chew!"
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Poor Ms. Kitty. Preschoolers will be on the side of the mice that got away. Kindergarteners will hope Ms. Kitty catches the mice or a bird. They won't want her to be hungry. This story has a great rhythmic rhyme that captures children's attention. Best wishes in the contest.
My personal favorite lines:
"A can of tuna that just won't do. I play with my food, before I chew!"
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from Heather Bagley
What a cute little children's story! The rhyming lines remind me of my favorite childhood books, particularly those of Dr. Seuss. I can even imagine reading it to my kids one day.
Good luck in the contest!
~Heather
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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What a cute little children's story! The rhyming lines remind me of my favorite childhood books, particularly those of Dr. Seuss. I can even imagine reading it to my kids one day.
Good luck in the contest!
~Heather
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, what a lovely compliment.
