The maiden
Self deception5 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is an excellent entry for the Free Form Poetry Contest. Very well written and nice descriptions/ A good flow to the piece. The only suggestion I would make would be to possibly consider increasing your font size. This was extremely difficult for my old peepers to read and I imagine there are others like me on this site. I think it would help you get more reviews. Very good job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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This is an excellent entry for the Free Form Poetry Contest. Very well written and nice descriptions/ A good flow to the piece. The only suggestion I would make would be to possibly consider increasing your font size. This was extremely difficult for my old peepers to read and I imagine there are others like me on this site. I think it would help you get more reviews. Very good job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Ok thanks for your suggestion. I used 16 P which is large but not on this site. Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from Bethany Heart
Wow! This is so true of so many ladies who have been blindsided by life! It's very moving and tugs on your heart strings as you read this sad but well-written poem. I'd love to read another one where she experiences true love and has a happy ending. I'm sure it would be powerful, too!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Wow! This is so true of so many ladies who have been blindsided by life! It's very moving and tugs on your heart strings as you read this sad but well-written poem. I'd love to read another one where she experiences true love and has a happy ending. I'm sure it would be powerful, too!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2024
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Oh yes I do love a happy ending. Next time, I promise!
Comment from royowen
A sad, sad tale. And unfortunately it's the result of misfortune, some would call it bad luck, but a trusting heart without discernment can be a fatal flaw in another wise sweet nature, beautifully written, good luck Jan, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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A sad, sad tale. And unfortunately it's the result of misfortune, some would call it bad luck, but a trusting heart without discernment can be a fatal flaw in another wise sweet nature, beautifully written, good luck Jan, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Oh thanks Roy. I just finished my review of your works Genesis. It was great work.
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Thank you Jan
Comment from patcelaw
This is a nice Freeform poem that you have written however it would've been just a little easier to listen to how you used some even sparse punctuation because when it is rather loud by AI, it just moves on and on and on without a breaker. Other than that is beautiful thank you Patricia .
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This is a nice Freeform poem that you have written however it would've been just a little easier to listen to how you used some even sparse punctuation because when it is rather loud by AI, it just moves on and on and on without a breaker. Other than that is beautiful thank you Patricia .
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Ok thanks I'll take note.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like murder as it's worst as this girl has lost her way in life and taken a path she regrets Jan. This is a unique and unusual post full with twists and turns, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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This sounds like murder as it's worst as this girl has lost her way in life and taken a path she regrets Jan. This is a unique and unusual post full with twists and turns, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thanks again Dolly
