Tucker (Seize Command Part-11)
An Acapulco showdown.31 total reviews
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
I am back, Ric! (Port Raid Review #3)
READ THIS REVIEW LAST FOR CONTINUITY. EVERYONE ALWAYS READS MY PORT RAID REVIEWS CHRONOLOGICALLY BACKWARDS!
Oh, thank goodness Tammy Jo (and T.D.) are okay. I knew they would be, but still.
I really enjoyed your script-writer zoom-in of Acapulco. I remember you using this technique earlier in your chapters, and I think it is awesome to create the setting. You have a real instinct for giving your prose a cinematic feel, and this makes sense to me now that I know about your history.
RIC'S TRIFECTA:
---"Blood and tissue splattered until shots stopped; then, the lifeless corpses collapsed, likely dead at first impact." --I saw this, how their bodies were held up by the bullets until they collapsed. Great description!
---"He played smackie-mouth and kissy-face with one, then the other." --I'd probably do this too, not gonna lie.
---"The moistened diver's skin glistened under the cliff-based floodlights, glaring torpedoed-bodies launched from various perches." --This is excellent!
---""Daniel, I'm not a killer. I just want him captured and locked away."" --I wonder if Tucker would think differently if he had NOT gotten the message that Tammy Jo was safe or if she had been killed.
---"nothing but an old fool could live through this and shun her affections again." --Yes, Tucker. I have been saying this the whole time. Get you shit together! *laughs*
---"one wrong calculation or miscue meaning sudden death--Thelma and Louise style." --Great allusion here that fits your description. Anyone who has seen the movie knows exactly what this means.
Just a few things I noticed:
---"Elvis Presley's "Fun in Acapulco" was filmed" --Films need to be italicized.
---"Once a Heaven for foreign tourists." --Just a suggestion. I would not capitalize "heaven" here.
---"Only wanting the best, who could ever treat her better or appreciate her more.[?]"--Question mark needed here.
---"Out the side door, they sprinted [alongside] along-side a" --No hyphen, one word.
Oh my god, there is ONE more chapter! I just don't have the time to get to it now, but I am not going to wait until your next Port Raid to do it either. I will stick it in my bookcase and hopefully get to it this week. After that, what would you like me to start on next?
This is the end of your second Port Raid! I thoroughly enjoyed my time visiting you, as always! I shall now head to other ports, but I have you on my maps and charts and shall return again soon! Keep your lighthouse beacon lit and the Hippodrome well funded. It is a hit in your port! (Hey, Pookie wanted to know if you can see if that macaw could be sold. I tried to talk him out of it, but you know, he DOES need a mate, and she was kind of cute in an avian sort of way.)
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
I am back, Ric! (Port Raid Review #3)
READ THIS REVIEW LAST FOR CONTINUITY. EVERYONE ALWAYS READS MY PORT RAID REVIEWS CHRONOLOGICALLY BACKWARDS!
Oh, thank goodness Tammy Jo (and T.D.) are okay. I knew they would be, but still.
I really enjoyed your script-writer zoom-in of Acapulco. I remember you using this technique earlier in your chapters, and I think it is awesome to create the setting. You have a real instinct for giving your prose a cinematic feel, and this makes sense to me now that I know about your history.
RIC'S TRIFECTA:
---"Blood and tissue splattered until shots stopped; then, the lifeless corpses collapsed, likely dead at first impact." --I saw this, how their bodies were held up by the bullets until they collapsed. Great description!
---"He played smackie-mouth and kissy-face with one, then the other." --I'd probably do this too, not gonna lie.
---"The moistened diver's skin glistened under the cliff-based floodlights, glaring torpedoed-bodies launched from various perches." --This is excellent!
---""Daniel, I'm not a killer. I just want him captured and locked away."" --I wonder if Tucker would think differently if he had NOT gotten the message that Tammy Jo was safe or if she had been killed.
---"nothing but an old fool could live through this and shun her affections again." --Yes, Tucker. I have been saying this the whole time. Get you shit together! *laughs*
---"one wrong calculation or miscue meaning sudden death--Thelma and Louise style." --Great allusion here that fits your description. Anyone who has seen the movie knows exactly what this means.
Just a few things I noticed:
---"Elvis Presley's "Fun in Acapulco" was filmed" --Films need to be italicized.
---"Once a Heaven for foreign tourists." --Just a suggestion. I would not capitalize "heaven" here.
---"Only wanting the best, who could ever treat her better or appreciate her more.[?]"--Question mark needed here.
---"Out the side door, they sprinted [alongside] along-side a" --No hyphen, one word.
Oh my god, there is ONE more chapter! I just don't have the time to get to it now, but I am not going to wait until your next Port Raid to do it either. I will stick it in my bookcase and hopefully get to it this week. After that, what would you like me to start on next?
This is the end of your second Port Raid! I thoroughly enjoyed my time visiting you, as always! I shall now head to other ports, but I have you on my maps and charts and shall return again soon! Keep your lighthouse beacon lit and the Hippodrome well funded. It is a hit in your port! (Hey, Pookie wanted to know if you can see if that macaw could be sold. I tried to talk him out of it, but you know, he DOES need a mate, and she was kind of cute in an avian sort of way.)
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Patrick, for the time you've spent on such a complete and helpful review; and especially, for spending it on an old story that offers nothing in return, as you do often. I'm sure you have better and more entertaining things to do than read this old hack's scratchings, but it's nice of you to ask what I'd like you to read next. My new posts, I try to promote at over a dollar, not to get more reviews, but to make reading them, somewhat, worthwhile. And I don't post often, so you'll have more time to keep up with everyone else. But if you're curious, here are a few of my most recent posts: "The Unpredictable Cycles of Life"; "Streets of Cincinnati"; "Blind Justice": "Expect the Unexpected"; four-part "Lingering Devotion"; and "Halloween Night." I figured I'd just go back to my last Halloween story since you've just ended with this year's. Much appreciated!
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading your story, and I am jumping into your writing. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
This is an excellent chapter. I enjoyed reading your story, and I am jumping into your writing. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Eliz100, for your generous review and kind words. I doubt my foolishness is in your preferred zone of reading, which makes me all the more grateful you took time out to read it. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'm thankful I could entertain you for a minute or two. Much appreciated!
Comment from Terry Broxson
Ric, I don't believe for a moment you struggled to find a stopping point! Ten years from now, when Tucker Volume 58 hits the top of the rankings, you'll still be struggling to find a stopping point, and your readers will not let you!
I think we need to consider a contest: "Write a story that casts the Movie. Tucker, Man of Action." Tell us who gets the lead and supporting roles. Well done, Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
Ric, I don't believe for a moment you struggled to find a stopping point! Ten years from now, when Tucker Volume 58 hits the top of the rankings, you'll still be struggling to find a stopping point, and your readers will not let you!
I think we need to consider a contest: "Write a story that casts the Movie. Tucker, Man of Action." Tell us who gets the lead and supporting roles. Well done, Terry.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Terry, for taking time out to read and review by ongoing foolishness. Just my way of living an exciting life from the comfort of my La-Z-Boy. I appreciate you and your continuing encouragement. :-)
Comment from RJ Fuller
This is really action packed and entertaining! I'm reminded of Ian Fleming, but with more historical details and accuracies. Your descriptions are superb! I am going to have to go back and start this from the beginning, for sure. I'm looking forward to reading more!!!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
This is really action packed and entertaining! I'm reminded of Ian Fleming, but with more historical details and accuracies. Your descriptions are superb! I am going to have to go back and start this from the beginning, for sure. I'm looking forward to reading more!!!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, RJ, for your generous review and kind words. As I've often said, writing is my way of jazzing up an otherwise dull life. LOL. I appreciate you taking time out to read my foolishness and your encouraging remarks. And I'm glad I could entertain you for a minute or two. I look forward to reading your new posts.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
From the layering of the action this chapter its a full blast marathon. Re scue mission, extermination of some cartel members...and a moll in the FBI section? Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
From the layering of the action this chapter its a full blast marathon. Re scue mission, extermination of some cartel members...and a moll in the FBI section? Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Wow, thank you so much, Iza, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I tried to lull readers early on, hoping when the action picked up it would make it more intense. I'm just afraid there a thin line between lulling them to sleep. LOL. It's always great to get starry reviews from those I enjoy reading. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I don't care about length when the story is riveting. I had been waiting to read Tucker and Farnsworth's next moves. What I like most about this story is the fact that no matter what the circumstances and dangers, Tucker always gets away. He reminds me of the old Charles Bronson "Death Wish" movies. Charles always got away.
Fast paced action, mystery, and crime is my favorite genre to read. I'm looking forward to reading what happens to Tammy Jo and T.D. Plus, I'm still not sure if Farnsworth can be trusted.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
I don't care about length when the story is riveting. I had been waiting to read Tucker and Farnsworth's next moves. What I like most about this story is the fact that no matter what the circumstances and dangers, Tucker always gets away. He reminds me of the old Charles Bronson "Death Wish" movies. Charles always got away.
Fast paced action, mystery, and crime is my favorite genre to read. I'm looking forward to reading what happens to Tammy Jo and T.D. Plus, I'm still not sure if Farnsworth can be trusted.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Lorraine, for your generous review and kind words. Charles Bronson was my favorite character of all time, mostly because he was a real life tough guy, not just a movie character. Tucker is just a good ol' boy caught up in a bad situation. LOL. I appreciate YOU, and for sticking with my long series. :-)
Comment from Kaiku
first time I have read a work of yours. Quite entertaining. Thanks for the large type face. I must certainly roll back the chapters and dive into this story. Good stuff.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
first time I have read a work of yours. Quite entertaining. Thanks for the large type face. I must certainly roll back the chapters and dive into this story. Good stuff.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Kaiku, for your generous review and kind words. I'm just an old man who can't do all the things I used to, so I just make up foolishness to keep from being too bored. LOL. I appreciate your encouragement and for taking time out to check this story out. Much appreciated!
Comment from Yardier
Been there, done that. Acapulco is now a rotting ghost town with abandoned condos home now to bats and parrots. Nightfall reveals squatters flickering flames as they cook their meal for the night. I don't think legitimate cruise lines even go there anymore.
Still, your story is great, full of action and mystic nuances. My favorite line says it all; " Fresh, soft-blowing sea breezes flickered flames of giant table candles." Just like your prose, wafting words of enticing mystery.
Most excellent, my fried.
Write on, or you will shrivel and die.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
Been there, done that. Acapulco is now a rotting ghost town with abandoned condos home now to bats and parrots. Nightfall reveals squatters flickering flames as they cook their meal for the night. I don't think legitimate cruise lines even go there anymore.
Still, your story is great, full of action and mystic nuances. My favorite line says it all; " Fresh, soft-blowing sea breezes flickered flames of giant table candles." Just like your prose, wafting words of enticing mystery.
Most excellent, my fried.
Write on, or you will shrivel and die.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Yard, my friend, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. Yes, you are so right about Acapulco. What a shame such a beautiful place has gone down the tubes. I thought that line sounded better than down the shi_ _er. I used to have a wonderful time there. I've never been smart enough to be too afraid of anything or anywhere, but a man who is scared of that place is stupid. :-)
Write On sounds like the trick for both of us: the only way we can still see action. :-) I appreciate YOU!
Comment from CornishChick
This story is highly creative. However, it seems to hop from scene to scene and was a bit hard to follow at times. With a little development, the scenes will flow better. It kept my attention to the end. I like the abrupt ending, but it needs a teeny tweak to leave the reader even more bewildered *grin*
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
This story is highly creative. However, it seems to hop from scene to scene and was a bit hard to follow at times. With a little development, the scenes will flow better. It kept my attention to the end. I like the abrupt ending, but it needs a teeny tweak to leave the reader even more bewildered *grin*
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for taking timeout to read my story. This is the 11th chapter of a much longer story, so it does make three jumps to let readers know what the other characters are doing. Sorry it confused you.
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I'm almost 70. Maybe I confuse easily *snicker*
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I'm 69, and without a list, I can't remember why I went to the store. Have a wonderful rest of your week.
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yep... been there, done that!
Comment from Nicki Nance
You took me there before most of the action with the details about the cliff diving event. Your imagery makes this read like a movie... The disguises, the two "babes", the dancing death by machine gun fire. Though you hit a lot of locations, I never felt lost. I liked your stopping point.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
You took me there before most of the action with the details about the cliff diving event. Your imagery makes this read like a movie... The disguises, the two "babes", the dancing death by machine gun fire. Though you hit a lot of locations, I never felt lost. I liked your stopping point.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Nicki, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm sure my foolishness is way outside your preferred reading zone, which makes it all the more special that you took time to read it. This is what old guys do when they can't do all the exciting things they used to. LOL. I appreciate YOU! Your writing, and your reviews.