Cold Winter Heart
cold and lonely, apart5 total reviews
Comment from Jeano
Oooo. Ouch. Few words speak volumes. The message comes through loud and clear. This sounds like a winner. Will have to go back and check. I hope you won the competition with this one.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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Oooo. Ouch. Few words speak volumes. The message comes through loud and clear. This sounds like a winner. Will have to go back and check. I hope you won the competition with this one.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2024
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I'm a winner just from your wonderful words. Sorry some of my replies are a bit late.
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Comment from Sueswrite
This is a very nice 5-7-5, "Ode to Winter" poem and a wonderful commemorative honor to Tony Bennett. The included video was a true compliment to your entry. Best wishes for this contest.
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This is a very nice 5-7-5, "Ode to Winter" poem and a wonderful commemorative honor to Tony Bennett. The included video was a true compliment to your entry. Best wishes for this contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from Saki the Artist
Very, very clever. Even the title didn't spoil the punchline. Great choice of artwork too--at first the reader thinks that the speaker of the poem may be the woman in the photo, but the last line reveals that she is the love interest of the speaker.
One small edit: no comma after the 'O'.
I don't know if it's intentional, but the vowel and consonant composition of the first and second lines versus the third line are nicely contrasted. (The third line introduces 'a' as a new vowel sound, and 'h' as a new consonant.) It suggests alliteration without being cheesy about it.
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Very, very clever. Even the title didn't spoil the punchline. Great choice of artwork too--at first the reader thinks that the speaker of the poem may be the woman in the photo, but the last line reveals that she is the love interest of the speaker.
One small edit: no comma after the 'O'.
I don't know if it's intentional, but the vowel and consonant composition of the first and second lines versus the third line are nicely contrasted. (The third line introduces 'a' as a new vowel sound, and 'h' as a new consonant.) It suggests alliteration without being cheesy about it.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
Comment from jessizero
This was an excellent winter 5-7-5. You managed to capture the beauty of winter and the ugliness of the frozen heart of someone at once. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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This was an excellent winter 5-7-5. You managed to capture the beauty of winter and the ugliness of the frozen heart of someone at once. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you. You should be called jessioneinamillion!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
such a melancholic poem, it's right down my alley cause I love gloom.
Great rhyme too. Unusual, original. Love it!
That said, you need to read the requirements again,
this contest is a 5-7-5 format subject Winter.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Ciao mystery poet,
such a melancholic poem, it's right down my alley cause I love gloom.
Great rhyme too. Unusual, original. Love it!
That said, you need to read the requirements again,
this contest is a 5-7-5 format subject Winter.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I realized the criteria after I posted it, so I changed the words. Thank you for being more alert than I!
