From the Murky Waters
Haiku15 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a Haiku full of imagery. Lovely word choices. The picture you chose to accompany it adds to the poem. If I could make one recommendation it woud be to remove the coma at the end of the poem. Either make it a period of add no punctuation at all. I believe that punctuation isn't required in a Haiku but I could be wrong. Not a big deal but I think it would look cleaner. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This is a Haiku full of imagery. Lovely word choices. The picture you chose to accompany it adds to the poem. If I could make one recommendation it woud be to remove the coma at the end of the poem. Either make it a period of add no punctuation at all. I believe that punctuation isn't required in a Haiku but I could be wrong. Not a big deal but I think it would look cleaner. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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oh the comma was inadvertently put there .I will remove it .Thank you for pointing it out
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Murky Waters, has the proper formatting and points to tyhis famous flower as one that can escape the dense mire to present itself in stunning beauty.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This 5-7-5, Murky Waters, has the proper formatting and points to tyhis famous flower as one that can escape the dense mire to present itself in stunning beauty.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much
Comment from teafor2
Sanku, the compression of these 17 syllables provide reader(s) with a
succinct view from Mother Nature's initial call to Spring. What more could a conscious set of eyes want or need. teafor2
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Sanku, the compression of these 17 syllables provide reader(s) with a
succinct view from Mother Nature's initial call to Spring. What more could a conscious set of eyes want or need. teafor2
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much..
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You are welcome.
Comment from Sally Law
I enjoy this beautiful lotuses year round as I live on a small spring fed lake. My grandchildren like to fish them out of the water and bring them in the house for me. Lovely haiku poem of the lotus flower, Sanku.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the club challenge.
Sally xos
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I enjoy this beautiful lotuses year round as I live on a small spring fed lake. My grandchildren like to fish them out of the water and bring them in the house for me. Lovely haiku poem of the lotus flower, Sanku.
Sending you my best today as always and my very best for the club challenge.
Sally xos
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for stopping by.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. I always thought it interesting that a plant can grow underwater as it does. Your poem captures that quite well. I love your descriptions. Wonderful word choices.
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Nicely done. I always thought it interesting that a plant can grow underwater as it does. Your poem captures that quite well. I love your descriptions. Wonderful word choices.
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much..
