Robert's Moon
A true lune poem5 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Welcome to FanStory, Jamie.
-A nice presentation and
well written lune.
-I like how you incorporate
the creator of the lune in the poem,
as well as the play on words with
"crescent lune, making us think of the moon.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
**One small thing; I would take
the title out of the poem box;
anything in that box can count for the poem.
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-Welcome to FanStory, Jamie.
-A nice presentation and
well written lune.
-I like how you incorporate
the creator of the lune in the poem,
as well as the play on words with
"crescent lune, making us think of the moon.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
**One small thing; I would take
the title out of the poem box;
anything in that box can count for the poem.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milestone post! I thought your poem was funny. I don't know if that was your intention, but I enjoyed it. "Freedom from haiku" was nice. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulations on your first milestone post! I thought your poem was funny. I don't know if that was your intention, but I enjoyed it. "Freedom from haiku" was nice. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Lune poetry contest and a good first post. Welcome to Fanstory! It sounds like someone is burnt out on Haiku. Well, you've come to the right place. There are so many different styles to try and contests for them too! Good luck.
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An excellent entry for the Lune poetry contest and a good first post. Welcome to Fanstory! It sounds like someone is burnt out on Haiku. Well, you've come to the right place. There are so many different styles to try and contests for them too! Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
haha. Done with Haiku are you! I thought this was funny and creative. And it's an excellent Lune. Great job - I enjoyed reading this and you did a wonderful job with a few words.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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haha. Done with Haiku are you! I thought this was funny and creative. And it's an excellent Lune. Great job - I enjoyed reading this and you did a wonderful job with a few words.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-crafted poem. Your poem reads and flows well. Each line has the correct syllable count for this contest. Very humorous last line. Congratulations with your first post. Nice job.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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This is a well-crafted poem. Your poem reads and flows well. Each line has the correct syllable count for this contest. Very humorous last line. Congratulations with your first post. Nice job.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your remarks!
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Thank you for your remarks!
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You are welcome.