2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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10 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
You did a brilliant job of combining poetry and artwork to express the grief felt at the loss of a loved one. We need to view this work and not just read it but meditate on it.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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You did a brilliant job of combining poetry and artwork to express the grief felt at the loss of a loved one. We need to view this work and not just read it but meditate on it.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with vivid imagery and sensory appeal.
Of note:
tangled in tears of grief
for her Navy Seal
(Soulful)
Great photo choice. Well done. Xo. Margaret
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Hi Gypsy, your poem is filled with vivid imagery and sensory appeal.
Of note:
tangled in tears of grief
for her Navy Seal
(Soulful)
Great photo choice. Well done. Xo. Margaret
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Margaret.
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Gorgeous pictures, You have true feelings for your writing that stand out right away. These days, my reviewing is slow. I am hibernating. My pain is such that I am taking my aspirin whenever I wake up after fours or more of sleep. I am keeping track of my dosage times. Then, I drink some liquid, eat a pouch of tuna, and crawl under my heated blankets and pads. Off to sleep I go, Karen :-)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Gorgeous pictures, You have true feelings for your writing that stand out right away. These days, my reviewing is slow. I am hibernating. My pain is such that I am taking my aspirin whenever I wake up after fours or more of sleep. I am keeping track of my dosage times. Then, I drink some liquid, eat a pouch of tuna, and crawl under my heated blankets and pads. Off to sleep I go, Karen :-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
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Comment from kahpot
The brave men and women who sign up to defend us are all heroes to me, and these words make us all remember them and their grieving families, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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The brave men and women who sign up to defend us are all heroes to me, and these words make us all remember them and their grieving families, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, kym.
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Comment from shelley kaye
yup- and if they're called in... they must go- no choice!
a great naval nature haiku
love the double meaning of seal
nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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yup- and if they're called in... they must go- no choice!
a great naval nature haiku
love the double meaning of seal
nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Navy SEALs are an elite group of men and women. I've always been fascinated with them. Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation about them with us.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Navy SEALs are an elite group of men and women. I've always been fascinated with them. Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation about them with us.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara.
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Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Nicely done. I would capitalize to Navy Seal or Navy SEAL since it is a proper noun in your intended usage.
The top artwork is a nice companion to the thought evoked for the lost loved one. Likely "sifting sands" might be used for the soldiers lost in Desert Storm and related military actions in the Middle East and elsewhere.
Mark
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Gypsy,
Nicely done. I would capitalize to Navy Seal or Navy SEAL since it is a proper noun in your intended usage.
The top artwork is a nice companion to the thought evoked for the lost loved one. Likely "sifting sands" might be used for the soldiers lost in Desert Storm and related military actions in the Middle East and elsewhere.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and feedback.
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Comment from lyenochka
That's always a possibility when a spouse is in the military. The Navy Seals are one of the top, super trained of the military groups and are assigned some dangerous missions. Good use of water themes tying it all together with waves, tears, and navy.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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That's always a possibility when a spouse is in the military. The Navy Seals are one of the top, super trained of the military groups and are assigned some dangerous missions. Good use of water themes tying it all together with waves, tears, and navy.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Tank you, big sister. (*=*)
Love
Marival
Comment from teafor2
Gypsy, thanks for your discerning capturing of the distinction between
Eastern and Western/Japanese haiku...The haiku and senryu is so closely
related, it's probably easier to just to label it as 5-7-5...What I find simple
to do is if it leans more toward Mother Nature (haiku) than Human Nature
(senryu)...Also, the Western form of "these" are definitely (as you have said
in your notes with references) more relaxed or less formal than the originators (Japanese) of the form. Well done. teafor2
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Gypsy, thanks for your discerning capturing of the distinction between
Eastern and Western/Japanese haiku...The haiku and senryu is so closely
related, it's probably easier to just to label it as 5-7-5...What I find simple
to do is if it leans more toward Mother Nature (haiku) than Human Nature
(senryu)...Also, the Western form of "these" are definitely (as you have said
in your notes with references) more relaxed or less formal than the originators (Japanese) of the form. Well done. teafor2
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are welcome. teafor2
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was very cool. I loved how you used the theme of the navy seal. Very intriguing and one line led to the next. Another wonderfully romantic piece. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This was very cool. I loved how you used the theme of the navy seal. Very intriguing and one line led to the next. Another wonderfully romantic piece. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
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