Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Behind Closed Doors"Young girl with special abilities.
14 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I see some interest evolving in this, particularly with some mystery concerning Lester and Ihe question of whether he actually has a mother or not, the story is looking at for a plot, you're building it, it seems, well done, blessings Roy
Typo , Oohs and (awes) ahhas? 2: I (hollar) holler?
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I see some interest evolving in this, particularly with some mystery concerning Lester and Ihe question of whether he actually has a mother or not, the story is looking at for a plot, you're building it, it seems, well done, blessings Roy
Typo , Oohs and (awes) ahhas? 2: I (hollar) holler?
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for catching those mistakes. I appreciate the nice review and the help. Gretchen
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Most welcome
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The two of them are becoming fast friends and Heddy is helping him find some fun in his summer with his unpleasant aunt but rather fun uncle. Sadly, he really misses his mother.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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The two of them are becoming fast friends and Heddy is helping him find some fun in his summer with his unpleasant aunt but rather fun uncle. Sadly, he really misses his mother.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Lester's uncle is the janitor that sneaks off with Heddys teacher to "share a cigarette with." He might be too fun. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I so enjoy this story. What a drag that Lester has to stay with an aunt that is so much of a bitch. It's too bad he can't stay with Heddy and her mom, at least he would know what love was. He certainly won't get any from his cold hearted aunt. World War II affected so many families. We sometimes forget that it's not just the men who serve who are affected by war, but their families also. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I so enjoy this story. What a drag that Lester has to stay with an aunt that is so much of a bitch. It's too bad he can't stay with Heddy and her mom, at least he would know what love was. He certainly won't get any from his cold hearted aunt. World War II affected so many families. We sometimes forget that it's not just the men who serve who are affected by war, but their families also. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Tom. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. I'm grateful for the six as well. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
War is horrible. I'm happy Lester has Heddy and her mom. He needs to be a normal little boy. Mr. and Mrs. Collette are interesting characters and has an interesting spice to the story. I really like this story.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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War is horrible. I'm happy Lester has Heddy and her mom. He needs to be a normal little boy. Mr. and Mrs. Collette are interesting characters and has an interesting spice to the story. I really like this story.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your support. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Thank God for heddy's mom. I feel so bad for Lester and he really needs love and care.
Its nice to see Lester and Heddy's growing friendship.
Mrs. Collette is a big "b" and witch. I hope she gets caught opening mail.
Well done, Gretchen.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank God for heddy's mom. I feel so bad for Lester and he really needs love and care.
Its nice to see Lester and Heddy's growing friendship.
Mrs. Collette is a big "b" and witch. I hope she gets caught opening mail.
Well done, Gretchen.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for this awesome review and the extra star. Mrs. Collette is exactly what you said she is. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so sad. So many children were sent away from home during the war. Perhaps Lester can come to play with Heddy more often. This is such a lovely story, Gretchen, I especially like that Heddy can talk to her grandmother. A great read,Gretchen. I've just noticed you've halted Miranda for a while. I hope she rings your bell soon. Warmest hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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That is so sad. So many children were sent away from home during the war. Perhaps Lester can come to play with Heddy more often. This is such a lovely story, Gretchen, I especially like that Heddy can talk to her grandmother. A great read,Gretchen. I've just noticed you've halted Miranda for a while. I hope she rings your bell soon. Warmest hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Sandra. Sorry my response was so late. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Heddy sort of reminds me of all the times I got in trouble for saying things that I shouldn't have, which was usually more than once a day or so. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Heddy sort of reminds me of all the times I got in trouble for saying things that I shouldn't have, which was usually more than once a day or so. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I was constantly tasting soap. Thank you so much. Gretchen
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I figured you might have had a few of my habits. I tasted a few people's shares of soap. :-)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In Background the word "cand" should be can.
If his hair is "willy-nilly," and he has "something crusty on the corner of his lip," while those words describe a vivid image, the boy definitely needs a bath.
"cold as a witch's tit" is a cliche.
"like cat" should be like a cat.
Running across burning hot sand in bare feet would make one haul like their "tail on fire."
War is rough on everyone concerned, and a little boy does need his momma.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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In Background the word "cand" should be can.
If his hair is "willy-nilly," and he has "something crusty on the corner of his lip," while those words describe a vivid image, the boy definitely needs a bath.
"cold as a witch's tit" is a cliche.
"like cat" should be like a cat.
Running across burning hot sand in bare feet would make one haul like their "tail on fire."
War is rough on everyone concerned, and a little boy does need his momma.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for this understanding review. I appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
There's a little foreshadowing in this chapter when Neddy and Lester talk about the war and him seeing his mother again.
I'm guessing again, and I won't say a word because your writing is far from predictable.
I keep my mouth shut and wait! Hahaha! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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There's a little foreshadowing in this chapter when Neddy and Lester talk about the war and him seeing his mother again.
I'm guessing again, and I won't say a word because your writing is far from predictable.
I keep my mouth shut and wait! Hahaha! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Predict whatever you want. I never know what is happening until it's actually happening. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
A very engaging story - I am enjoying it a lot. I am glad they are getting on smoothly and well. What a horrid aunt for him to be stuck with. Relationships are natural and characters are well developed and seem authentic.
Well done.
Wendy
Mrs. Collette let's the smile fall away from her face. (lets)
"Okay." I hollar as we run down the stairs. (holler)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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A very engaging story - I am enjoying it a lot. I am glad they are getting on smoothly and well. What a horrid aunt for him to be stuck with. Relationships are natural and characters are well developed and seem authentic.
Well done.
Wendy
Mrs. Collette let's the smile fall away from her face. (lets)
"Okay." I hollar as we run down the stairs. (holler)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. So glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen