A leaky valve
Shattered hearts continue to cry.18 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Couldn't resist checking this out. Love the way you took a medical issue and turned it into an issue of love. A leaky heart turns into tears over unfaithfulness. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Couldn't resist checking this out. Love the way you took a medical issue and turned it into an issue of love. A leaky heart turns into tears over unfaithfulness. Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review and the 6 stars. I am so glad you liked it. I am a nurse as well as an unfortunate victim of unfaithfulness-- so, this poem was pumped right from my leaky valve. Thankfully, there is healing in writing and forgiveness.
Have a blessed weekend!
Glenda
Comment from lyenochka
Great metaphor of a "valve" which a heart has and also plumbing, but here the leak is an emotional one and you used it well to bring to reality the ongoing "leaks" of a broken heart. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Great metaphor of a "valve" which a heart has and also plumbing, but here the leak is an emotional one and you used it well to bring to reality the ongoing "leaks" of a broken heart. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review and kind words. They are very encouraging to me.
Have a blessed weekend.
Glenda
Comment from Topeking
Firstly well-done on the 575 syllable count! This poem was a superb translation of what heart breaks feels like. The first stanza and last stanza was beautifully crafted because it is the stages you go through when your heart is broken.' A heart ever changed' this line really shows the nature of heartbreak because it always starts with the heart changing from loving to hating because of an external force which in this case is an 'unfaithful lover' and 'ever changed' shows this is an unending cycle of experience that is felt by many. The last stage of a heartbreak always comes with 'tears of mowning'. The curse of love is heartbreak that is inevitable. I love the title because it was intelligently chosen for this remarkable piece 'a leaky valve' a valve in our heart stops a backward flow of blood but it is odd in this case because this valve is leaking which suggest there is an issue somewhere that disturbed the nature of a valve. I love the relation between a valve and the heart because valves can be found in the heart which both symbolises the process of a heartbreak within this poem. Skilfully and well written. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece!
Topeking
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Firstly well-done on the 575 syllable count! This poem was a superb translation of what heart breaks feels like. The first stanza and last stanza was beautifully crafted because it is the stages you go through when your heart is broken.' A heart ever changed' this line really shows the nature of heartbreak because it always starts with the heart changing from loving to hating because of an external force which in this case is an 'unfaithful lover' and 'ever changed' shows this is an unending cycle of experience that is felt by many. The last stage of a heartbreak always comes with 'tears of mowning'. The curse of love is heartbreak that is inevitable. I love the title because it was intelligently chosen for this remarkable piece 'a leaky valve' a valve in our heart stops a backward flow of blood but it is odd in this case because this valve is leaking which suggest there is an issue somewhere that disturbed the nature of a valve. I love the relation between a valve and the heart because valves can be found in the heart which both symbolises the process of a heartbreak within this poem. Skilfully and well written. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece!
Topeking
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for such a thorough and kind review. I appreciate it and the six star rating so much. I am a nurse so I also felt the title was a logical choice, glad you appreciated it.
Blessings,
Glenda
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Wow it does make a logical sense! Thank you for the poem and ,my pleasure!
It was well deserved!
Bless
Tking
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Glenda,
This is a vivid metaphoric poem that describes the broken heart in the artwork. It is true that the effects of the broken heart last for a long time in mourning.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Hi Glenda,
This is a vivid metaphoric poem that describes the broken heart in the artwork. It is true that the effects of the broken heart last for a long time in mourning.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day
Joan
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind review and well wishes. I appreciate your time and review.
Blessings,
Glenda
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You are most kindly welcome, Glenda.
Joan
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Oh, what an honor. Thank you so much! I appreciate this and it is very encouraging to me, and a much needed boost today.
Blessings,
Glenda
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your poem speaks of the many heartbroken lovers of unfaithful quests. But rather than mourning the loss, they should be celebrating the reward. They are free to find someone worth having. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Your poem speaks of the many heartbroken lovers of unfaithful quests. But rather than mourning the loss, they should be celebrating the reward. They are free to find someone worth having. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Agreed. Takes a while to get there, but agreed!
Thank you for the review.
Blessings,
Glenda
Comment from Neil Samways
A nice haiku, and one that resonates with me, as I'm sure it does with many a reader. Unfortunately sometimes it takes an unfaithful lover to make the heart grow stronger.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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A nice haiku, and one that resonates with me, as I'm sure it does with many a reader. Unfortunately sometimes it takes an unfaithful lover to make the heart grow stronger.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I think it has made my defenses stronger, unfortunately, not my heart. Thank you for the review and your time.
Blessings,
Glenda
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A beautfiul but sad commentary on a lover's heartbreak. The artwork was perfect for this piece. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poetry contest and Iw ish you good luck in it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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A beautfiul but sad commentary on a lover's heartbreak. The artwork was perfect for this piece. This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poetry contest and Iw ish you good luck in it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for the review. Appreciate you.
Glenda
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Glenda.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You do a good job of showing what happens
when someone's lover has been unfaithful.
-A very good closing line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Glenda.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You do a good job of showing what happens
when someone's lover has been unfaithful.
-A very good closing line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Glenda
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning dear Glenda from early morning in Spain,
Yes, our hearts are changed by unfaithful lovers... trust is destroyed..
Excellent write for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest...and I love the image you chose,
Lisa
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Good morning dear Glenda from early morning in Spain,
Yes, our hearts are changed by unfaithful lovers... trust is destroyed..
Excellent write for the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest...and I love the image you chose,
Lisa
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for the review and good early morning from Georgia (traveling this week for work/never can sleep in hotels very well).
Glenda
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I always take my pillow with me when traveling...works like a charm...
Lisa