Latchkey Love
Ah, mothers and daughters...12 total reviews
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is great, and conveys all the emotion that you would feel in that situation. We love our kids so much, that we always wonder if we are bothering them when we want to know what is happening in their lives. Great job with this!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is great, and conveys all the emotion that you would feel in that situation. We love our kids so much, that we always wonder if we are bothering them when we want to know what is happening in their lives. Great job with this!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Jodi Ann - Indeed - I need a barometer to figure out what my daughter's mood is. It's usually safer to let her get in touch with me. I wrote this poem over 20 years ago and it's still true. :-(
Comment from Aussie
You did grab me with this one. I think it's more like a letter than a poem. So many young people toss the towel in when they realise no one is there to clean up after them or study for them. They still want the points but some are too lazy to work for them. Brilliant writing I enjoyed a mother's view. K xx
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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You did grab me with this one. I think it's more like a letter than a poem. So many young people toss the towel in when they realise no one is there to clean up after them or study for them. They still want the points but some are too lazy to work for them. Brilliant writing I enjoyed a mother's view. K xx
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, K - It's a letter I'd never send. My little wasn't the introspective sort then and still isn't. :-) I still have to "get over myself" because our love language is SO different. ;-) - Aisha (And I won't tell her about publishing my poetry, either. Hey ho.)
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Does she have autism?
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Yes, she does. Didn't figure it out till a couple of years ago, so I've had to look at her years of behavior from a different POV. She has a very difficult time connecting emotionally with anyone - I'd always thought it was me. I had a similar type of mother. And me an empath. Go figure :-(
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Me an empath too! Your sharpness of understanding could be too much. Sometimes they tell us by saying nothing. Love is the key. K xx
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They just communicate differently.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Latchkey Love, is s snapshot of life that some must live through when separated from relatives and suffering the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune.
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This poem, Latchkey Love, is s snapshot of life that some must live through when separated from relatives and suffering the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from XinaD
Oh, my goodness! This one hit me right in the feelings. I recently wrote about my empty nest situation, so this story is obviously relatable. Very well done!
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Oh, my goodness! This one hit me right in the feelings. I recently wrote about my empty nest situation, so this story is obviously relatable. Very well done!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
I winder if your daughter just simply stayed where she was because moving may have unsettled her from achieving success by moving, you didn't actually explain how you were in Arlington, although it explains the 2800 miles, a long way. This is not really free form poetry, it's completely devoid of poetic device, metaphor, some rhyme, alliteration, parable expression, nothing really to separate it from prose, blessings Roy
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I winder if your daughter just simply stayed where she was because moving may have unsettled her from achieving success by moving, you didn't actually explain how you were in Arlington, although it explains the 2800 miles, a long way. This is not really free form poetry, it's completely devoid of poetic device, metaphor, some rhyme, alliteration, parable expression, nothing really to separate it from prose, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What an absolutely delightful free verse which is written with such nostalgia and maternal love. This flows beautifully with the repetition of that line: 'Sweetheart, am I bothering you' cleverly breaking through the train of memories without being intrusive, wanting simply to know that everything is alright. The description of the apartment is superb and so relatable. And then the heartbreaking news you don't want to hear, that she's lonely and having to do things for herself. It's difficult for me in the UK to appreciate fully the sort of distances you have in the US but this inevitably compounds the agony of separation Love those last 4 lines as you choke back the tears. Well done, Aisha! Good luck! Debbie
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What an absolutely delightful free verse which is written with such nostalgia and maternal love. This flows beautifully with the repetition of that line: 'Sweetheart, am I bothering you' cleverly breaking through the train of memories without being intrusive, wanting simply to know that everything is alright. The description of the apartment is superb and so relatable. And then the heartbreaking news you don't want to hear, that she's lonely and having to do things for herself. It's difficult for me in the UK to appreciate fully the sort of distances you have in the US but this inevitably compounds the agony of separation Love those last 4 lines as you choke back the tears. Well done, Aisha! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from June Sargent
I can feel the pain experienced by both of you - although not openly expressed. Sometimes circumstances force us to make difficult choices that result in sadness and some guilt. I was a latchkey kid. I can relate. Parents have to do what they can to support the family. I understood and I'm sure your daughter did too. Beautiful artwork to highlight your poignant piece. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I can feel the pain experienced by both of you - although not openly expressed. Sometimes circumstances force us to make difficult choices that result in sadness and some guilt. I was a latchkey kid. I can relate. Parents have to do what they can to support the family. I understood and I'm sure your daughter did too. Beautiful artwork to highlight your poignant piece. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, June - Yes, this wasn't an easy time, but I didn't and still don't know how my daughter REALLY felt about the choice she made. Thank you for reviewing! - Aisha
Comment from Kelly Hope
This is a beautiful poem. Put together well.
(Constructive criticism), if I may, that all stanzas should intertwine more, but that's just my opinion. Still good work!
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is a beautiful poem. Put together well.
(Constructive criticism), if I may, that all stanzas should intertwine more, but that's just my opinion. Still good work!
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Kelly!
Comment from Lisasview
Oh boy, this brought back memories (which poems writing by other writers often do) My daughter now 54 years old decided when she was 15 to live with her father... only about an hour from me... but it killed me.. I would fall on the floor in front of her door and cry... Even now all these years later I can feel the pain in my heart...
She was crazy about her father who was less "strict" than me and that relationship flourished... However recently she really has been making an effort to connect with me... I am in Spain and she is in Austin, Texas... Funny how life works out...
Lisasview
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Oh boy, this brought back memories (which poems writing by other writers often do) My daughter now 54 years old decided when she was 15 to live with her father... only about an hour from me... but it killed me.. I would fall on the floor in front of her door and cry... Even now all these years later I can feel the pain in my heart...
She was crazy about her father who was less "strict" than me and that relationship flourished... However recently she really has been making an effort to connect with me... I am in Spain and she is in Austin, Texas... Funny how life works out...
Lisasview
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Lisa - My daughter lives in Austin, too! But I'm in San Antonio - a bit closer than Spain ;-). Lots of commiseration if we chatted, I'm sure! - Aisha
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Of course my brain goes right to... How old is your daughter, and where in Austin does she lives... and wow maybe she knows my daughter Heather....????
Lisa
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-crafted poem. The message in your poem is one I can identify with. Your poem was captivating from beginning to end. Your picture complimented the poem well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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This is a well-crafted poem. The message in your poem is one I can identify with. Your poem was captivating from beginning to end. Your picture complimented the poem well. Nice job.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Again, and again - many thanks! I write because I must, and I enjoy reading what I've written, and when someone else does, too, my heart soars!