Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 30"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from Kelly Hope
I love your work! I felt like this storytell was nicely written. I will say it's undoubtedly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing, God bless!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I love your work! I felt like this storytell was nicely written. I will say it's undoubtedly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing, God bless!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for reading and enjoying my efforts. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
That is no good at all what her granddaughter is doing, Becky is right, Nat's father could get into a lot of trouble and be labelled for life. Good job Isabella heard it all. Now what? Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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That is no good at all what her granddaughter is doing, Becky is right, Nat's father could get into a lot of trouble and be labelled for life. Good job Isabella heard it all. Now what? Ulla xcx
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Hi, Ulla...
Thank you so much. I have posted 31 and 32 and will post the finale on Sunday. I'm a bit nervous for it to be complete, but it's been good therapy. I appreciate that you have followed the story and enjoyed it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I will be reviewing. I can well understand it's been good therapy. Hugs, xcx
Comment from Ric Myworld
As with most fiction, there are many parts that are often taken from truth or something we've seen, heard, or read. Then, we tell it as fiction to protect the innocent, those we are trying to protect, and the others we are wanting to send a message to. But either way, it makes for an intense story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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As with most fiction, there are many parts that are often taken from truth or something we've seen, heard, or read. Then, we tell it as fiction to protect the innocent, those we are trying to protect, and the others we are wanting to send a message to. But either way, it makes for an intense story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Take it to the preacher, my friend! Life hands out so much at times, we often find our outlet in writing and trying to right wrongs. this one is about to wind down...Chapter 33 the end is written and waiting. I hope people are satisfied with the ending. My son asked over and over if it was going to be good or bad... I couldn't decide until the very end.
Smiles, Carol
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That's the best thing about writing. We can twist and turn everything to suit ourselves. Good or bad. :-)
Comment from derek campbell
Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Wow such an amazing writer you are I love everything about it your really good I Can't wait to see more of your amazing skills but next time try and express your feeling a bit more deeper on certain areas but other then that really good stuff can't wait to read more of your magic keep it up
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Derek for taking your time to read and comment on my story. If you have the time, I would appreciate any suggestions in the area, you feel I need to add stronger emotions. The following Chapter 31 is posted.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have created a memorable villain. Becky can't even stand her anymore. Natasha is going to spend a lot of time behind bars in a few years if she doesn't change her ways. If the conversation is from Isabella's point of view as she is listening from the closet, she can't actually see anyone roll their eyes or shrug or nod, but she can know when they move about in the room and Becky can even stomp her feet in fury.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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You have created a memorable villain. Becky can't even stand her anymore. Natasha is going to spend a lot of time behind bars in a few years if she doesn't change her ways. If the conversation is from Isabella's point of view as she is listening from the closet, she can't actually see anyone roll their eyes or shrug or nod, but she can know when they move about in the room and Becky can even stomp her feet in fury.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I agree that I believe Natasha and her (live counterpart) are headed for serious trouble and sadness. Thanks for pointing out the point of view...I got wrapped up in the moment but I'll try to make appropriate changes.
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
I'm ready to ring Natasha's neck! At least Becky has some sense in her brain. That eavesdropping scene was a good device to let the reader in on the truth. Well done chapter!
Issue:
Natasha slumped across the bed. not looking at her (a comma instead?)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I'm ready to ring Natasha's neck! At least Becky has some sense in her brain. That eavesdropping scene was a good device to let the reader in on the truth. Well done chapter!
Issue:
Natasha slumped across the bed. not looking at her (a comma instead?)
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Me too! Thank you so much for following and making suggestions to improve the story. I appreciate it very much.
Have a great day!
Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Natasha is a little teenaged demon playing around telling adult stories, but making immature child-like decisions. I love the way you started this novel in Chapter 1, and took us through the twisted backstory. I recall Isabella was taken to the hospital, but I'm hoping Natasha has to pay in some way, for all the lies she has told. She cares about no one but herself.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Natasha is a little teenaged demon playing around telling adult stories, but making immature child-like decisions. I love the way you started this novel in Chapter 1, and took us through the twisted backstory. I recall Isabella was taken to the hospital, but I'm hoping Natasha has to pay in some way, for all the lies she has told. She cares about no one but herself.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Lorraine
I finished and wrapped the story this afternoon...three chapters. I struggled with blending in the beginning of the story so I had to repeat a little. When I rewrite, I think I will move the beginning to the end. When I started, the story was headed somewhere else and it got a life and took me down this route. The ending is fiction but I'm satisfied with it and I hope you will be too. Thanks so much for following it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
At least Becky now knows the truth and may have the integrity to stand for it even at the cost of losing her friend and being in trouble re the drugs. My heart is aching, as I fill in the gaps. Very well written, and I am sorry to be out of a six-star rating for you.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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At least Becky now knows the truth and may have the integrity to stand for it even at the cost of losing her friend and being in trouble re the drugs. My heart is aching, as I fill in the gaps. Very well written, and I am sorry to be out of a six-star rating for you.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Not a problem, Wendy. I got on a roll today and finished the story...three more chapters. I made an effort to narrow it down, but it wasn't meant to be. The plot thickens and then explodes so be prepared.
Thanks so much, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray for Isabella and her stealthy spying! She found out the truth but she won't be able tell Ava because that would open more problems but at least, she can rest her mind about her son-in-law. Scary stuff that Nat is playing with!
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Hooray for Isabella and her stealthy spying! She found out the truth but she won't be able tell Ava because that would open more problems but at least, she can rest her mind about her son-in-law. Scary stuff that Nat is playing with!
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Hello, Helen...
I finished the story today...three chapters. I tried to narrow it down, but it wasn't meant to be. As the plot continues to thicken, it just might explode. It's quite a ride!
Thanks so much...I hope you enjoy the remaining chapters.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Tell the cops. They can question Becky and get the straight skinny. Becky will fold like a dinner napkin.
Natasha should at the very least go to a mental hospital, she is half a bubble off plumb. Good writing. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Tell the cops. They can question Becky and get the straight skinny. Becky will fold like a dinner napkin.
Natasha should at the very least go to a mental hospital, she is half a bubble off plumb. Good writing. Karen :-)
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Tell the cops! Not yet...that takes all the remaining explosions out of the story. LOL I actually finished it today (3 chapters). I couldn't make it any less. Hope you enjoy it and find the ending different than you expected.
Smiles, Carol
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How did you like my simile" Becky" will fold like a dinner napkin ? Was it good? Karen
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Yes, you did good! And she does!
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I love simile. I always thought it was a part of country story telling. Along with the meandering way I write. We pull you in with the mundane everyday stuff, buying groceries and whatnot, that by the time we are cutting up the bodies for premium liver sales you have been properly sucked in. It seems to work. Karen :-)
