Old Roy
He had it coming43 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
Jessica,
Congrats on your win in the Limerick contest. I note that you have reached the #13 spot in the ranking. I believe there is not a single poetic form you cannot master. I hope to see you reach the #1 spot this year.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
Jessica,
Congrats on your win in the Limerick contest. I note that you have reached the #13 spot in the ranking. I believe there is not a single poetic form you cannot master. I hope to see you reach the #1 spot this year.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Eugene, once again, you?ve brightened my day.
Thank you, my friend.
Xo
Jess
Comment from Saki the Artist
Haha I like limericks that make you think for a sec. Also, great choice of description ("he had it coming") - I love it when poets sneak in a little extra pun in there.
Suggestions for minor edits:
Capitalize 'O' in "old Roy" in the 3rd line.
The last line could benefit from meter reinforcement. What I mean is, it's a little awkward to accent "does", even though you've set up every line to start on an unaccented beat. My suggested rewrite would be "Sure looks a lot more like Roy's brother ".
Still a 5 star poem even without the edits I suggested. I also like the choice of artwork.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
Haha I like limericks that make you think for a sec. Also, great choice of description ("he had it coming") - I love it when poets sneak in a little extra pun in there.
Suggestions for minor edits:
Capitalize 'O' in "old Roy" in the 3rd line.
The last line could benefit from meter reinforcement. What I mean is, it's a little awkward to accent "does", even though you've set up every line to start on an unaccented beat. My suggested rewrite would be "Sure looks a lot more like Roy's brother ".
Still a 5 star poem even without the edits I suggested. I also like the choice of artwork.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you kindly, for your thoughtful review! I will revisit that line.
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! serves Roy right, an excellent limerick very clever and thoughtful,
I would like to be a fly on the wall when Roy greets his newborn son, he could become Uncle Roy, thoroughly enjoyable, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
Ha! Ha! serves Roy right, an excellent limerick very clever and thoughtful,
I would like to be a fly on the wall when Roy greets his newborn son, he could become Uncle Roy, thoroughly enjoyable, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Hahaha i almost titled it ?Uncle Roy? so I love love love this comment! lol
Thanks so much
Xo
Comment from Baltimore Born
Now, that was a good Limerick poem. This poem was well-crafted. Each line connected well with the next. This poem meets all of the requirements for this contest. Good accentuating picture. Nice job.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
Now, that was a good Limerick poem. This poem was well-crafted. Each line connected well with the next. This poem meets all of the requirements for this contest. Good accentuating picture. Nice job.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you, I truly appreciate it!!
Xoxo
Comment from patcelaw
And this is a well for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Keep bragging and keep sharing. Patricia .
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
And this is a well for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest may you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Keep bragging and keep sharing. Patricia .
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Patricia, thank you so much!
Xoxo
Comment from godlucifer
i guess this was by surprising. at the end the joke was on roy. this is a love triangle cause its going to cause some friction. your poem was craft with a structure. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
i guess this was by surprising. at the end the joke was on roy. this is a love triangle cause its going to cause some friction. your poem was craft with a structure. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you!:)
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is too good, and too funny! It is a perfect limerick! You made a great story in just a few words! I will have to check out your other poems as well!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
This is too good, and too funny! It is a perfect limerick! You made a great story in just a few words! I will have to check out your other poems as well!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Jodi!! Xoxo
Comment from Begin Again
Just goes to show you...what goes around, comes around. What's good for the goose is good for the gander..... and of course....let's keep it in the family.
Your contest entry was excellent. I enjoyed it.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
Just goes to show you...what goes around, comes around. What's good for the goose is good for the gander..... and of course....let's keep it in the family.
Your contest entry was excellent. I enjoyed it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Carol, you crack me up! Thank you! Xoxo
Comment from Sally Law
Oh my! Gosh darn those genetics! A fun limerick of the cuck. Hopefully the wife gets alimony and child support. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
Oh my! Gosh darn those genetics! A fun limerick of the cuck. Hopefully the wife gets alimony and child support. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you my friend!!
Comment from XinaD
Well done. This one gave me a chuckle, though I'm sure ol' Roy would think there's nothing funny about it. You laid it out well and the twist at the end was unexpected. An enjoyable read :)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
Well done. This one gave me a chuckle, though I'm sure ol' Roy would think there's nothing funny about it. You laid it out well and the twist at the end was unexpected. An enjoyable read :)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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lol thank you!!