Three Men in the Woods
deserters try to outrun their pasts.2 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
You have done a gripping, psychological thriller with the story. In the sense, the men's own thoughts condemn themselves. You make the reader feel the tension as they would have.
A few possible suggestions for typo correction:
the sound pace with them. (paced or kept pace)
Max and the dog camp were camp guards. (remove first camp)
knelling at the lip (kneeling)
Traditor! (Traitor)
Well-done story. Thanks so much for sharing! Julie.
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You have done a gripping, psychological thriller with the story. In the sense, the men's own thoughts condemn themselves. You make the reader feel the tension as they would have.
A few possible suggestions for typo correction:
the sound pace with them. (paced or kept pace)
Max and the dog camp were camp guards. (remove first camp)
knelling at the lip (kneeling)
Traditor! (Traitor)
Well-done story. Thanks so much for sharing! Julie.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story paints a haunting picture. It's scary thinking about being the prey. I like how you use the characters inner thoughts to show us how they are feeling. This is well written and kept me on the edge of my seat. I thought the ending was tough but realistic unfortunately. Well done!
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Your story paints a haunting picture. It's scary thinking about being the prey. I like how you use the characters inner thoughts to show us how they are feeling. This is well written and kept me on the edge of my seat. I thought the ending was tough but realistic unfortunately. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
