Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 28"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from prettybluebirds
Don't apologize. I enjoyed this extra-long chapter, and it needed to be done in this manner. There is no end to what Nat will do to get her way. I'm waiting for you to expose her deceit.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Don't apologize. I enjoyed this extra-long chapter, and it needed to be done in this manner. There is no end to what Nat will do to get her way. I'm waiting for you to expose her deceit.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Oh my, I see you have read al the chapters. I'm thrilled to see that. Thank you for the time and the reviews. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
As I'm marveling over the details, descriptions, dialogue, and actions of your characters, I realize that your characters are real people, doing things that happen in real life. Isabella, Ava, Natasha, Jason, Bobby and others are so well developed, I think I've met them, or YOU know them.
This chapter was not too long. Certain things need to be explained and you need all the space it takes. I don't see how this story can be resolved in just one additional chapter. If it takes 2, 3, or 4 more chapters, I'm here ready to read them. This is spellbinding real life.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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As I'm marveling over the details, descriptions, dialogue, and actions of your characters, I realize that your characters are real people, doing things that happen in real life. Isabella, Ava, Natasha, Jason, Bobby and others are so well developed, I think I've met them, or YOU know them.
This chapter was not too long. Certain things need to be explained and you need all the space it takes. I don't see how this story can be resolved in just one additional chapter. If it takes 2, 3, or 4 more chapters, I'm here ready to read them. This is spellbinding real life.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Every time I think I can wrap it up, I see that more needs to unfold. I see the ending (a fictional one) but it's not quite there. Thank you so much for understanding how much this story means to me as well.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well constructed, chapter in your book, and I enjoyed listening to it very much your sentence structure and your paragraphing is very good. I wish you the very best with with your book and I also wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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This is a very well constructed, chapter in your book, and I enjoyed listening to it very much your sentence structure and your paragraphing is very good. I wish you the very best with with your book and I also wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Good morning -
My apologies for responding so late, but life got in the way the last few days. I appreciate your kindness and review and am happy that you are still enjoying the story. Thank you.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
She is evil, and now she will be living with her grandmother who she hates and treets like sh.. And her grandmother doesn't deserve to have Nat put onto her without any discussion. That just isn't on. Oh it makes me so angry. You really have done a great job with this one, my friend. Onto the next one. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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She is evil, and now she will be living with her grandmother who she hates and treets like sh.. And her grandmother doesn't deserve to have Nat put onto her without any discussion. That just isn't on. Oh it makes me so angry. You really have done a great job with this one, my friend. Onto the next one. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Natasha has learned and learned it well that tears, lies and later claiming something in her brain made her do it....she uses it well and continues to get her way. It's a painful process to watch, knowing someone else will suffer from it in the end...not Natasha.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Your story has mentioned what has become a very big problem with children these days. They've come to think of parents as their friends, and many times, the parents think they should be friends to their children. It's a big mistake that I see everywhere. Parents have to be the parents and offer guidance, not sit down and smoke a doobie to be accepted. Okay, I'd better shut up before I get on a tangent. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Your story has mentioned what has become a very big problem with children these days. They've come to think of parents as their friends, and many times, the parents think they should be friends to their children. It's a big mistake that I see everywhere. Parents have to be the parents and offer guidance, not sit down and smoke a doobie to be accepted. Okay, I'd better shut up before I get on a tangent. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I totally agree with your anology of our current society. I don't fit in... and I'm coming to terms with that. I prefer the peacefulness of the country and my river as it flows by.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
My heart breaks as I see how your reality has bled into this story with equally devastating results. I'm proud of you for writing about it...
You did everything possible for your daughter when your granddaughter made the same accusations. It nearly did you in!
And now your family cuts you out?
I can only hope they come to their senses one day soon!
pmd are honing in on a finale, but I can't see it in just one more chapter!
Pat yourself on the back for braiding your truth and into the story!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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My heart breaks as I see how your reality has bled into this story with equally devastating results. I'm proud of you for writing about it...
You did everything possible for your daughter when your granddaughter made the same accusations. It nearly did you in!
And now your family cuts you out?
I can only hope they come to their senses one day soon!
pmd are honing in on a finale, but I can't see it in just one more chapter!
Pat yourself on the back for braiding your truth and into the story!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I'm stunned by your kindness. You can't imagine my shock when I sat at the computer this morning. You are something else. Thank you so much.
And you are right on the ending. As I started writing this morning so much more wanted to be written. I don't see it ending in one chapter.... Maybe two long ones. I'm working on Chap 29... but if I want to make it real...I need a laugage warning for sure. Hope that doesn't scare any readers away. I've tried to steer away from "Ava's" foul mouth but my conscience wants me to make it closer to what she is like. I'm debating.....
Love you and thanks again. Carol
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My two cents: If your story calls for it (and it sounds like you feel it does) a "language" warning is not going to affect your readership. Ava needs to express herself as you feel she would. Go for it! And... It's been a pleasure boosting you up a bit! (I'll have to get busy reviewing if I'm going to be able to help you with these final chapters! Love you back, Carol--
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You've done so much for me, I can not ask you to keep doing more. I did post 29 with Ava's mouth in full gear... as it always is. I'm working on 30 to see if I can finish it but I've got to lead up to Isabella being sent to the hospital and then she has to complete the unfinished business. Might be a bit much... Darn this story keeps growing ...some have actually said they don't want to see it end. In real life...I am disowned, but I think I am currently in love with my choice of endings.... Fiction of course!
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I don't recall you asking me to do anything. What would be the fun in that? I'll see what I can do...and then review!
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You are the best! I will keep you in my heart while I struggle through this next chapter.... Sometimes it's too real. I keep reminding myself that this part is over and in the past....now it's just the blow back from a daughter who never has shown me much respect. I'm good!
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Nobody can make you feel unworthy unless you give them permission. Everything your daughter and others have done to demean or disrespect you says a whole lot about them...and leaves you unscathed and loved even more!
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I'm trying to convince myself of that...I guess that explains writing the story. I needed to get so much out of me. She's an angry person for some reason and she's unfortunately passed it on to her children. I was floored at Christmas when Kaitlyn called me every swear word possible and then her mom blamed me. She hasn't spoken to me since... but I'm getting better with that every day.
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Chapter 29 is now in the top ten.
(smile)
How sad that they have such a wonderful mom and grandmom and they are depriving themselves of a relationship with you.
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I just saw that my messages went crazy as I was hitting your reply. Thank you again...
It hit be pretty hard at first and then Matt told me Mike would want me to be writing and I always felt better when I did...so I tried. Then Sandra started messaging me, telling me everyone missed my stories. It might have been an ego thing but here I am. And thanks to you, Sandra, Helen and a few others, I am feeling better (at least in my head)
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I can feel Mike smiling down at you...
You need to share your gift with us!
Don't for him....for us....and for YOU!
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Isabella should be forced to house Natasha as she would cause more trouble and put Isabella at risk both from her behavior and the potential attack from the drug dealing gangster. I hope Ava comes to her senses. As I read this I couldn't help but remember what you went through when your granddaughter falsely accused her father. And then the crazy social services worker made life hell for everyone. Hope somehow that makes Natasha wake up!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Poor Isabella should be forced to house Natasha as she would cause more trouble and put Isabella at risk both from her behavior and the potential attack from the drug dealing gangster. I hope Ava comes to her senses. As I read this I couldn't help but remember what you went through when your granddaughter falsely accused her father. And then the crazy social services worker made life hell for everyone. Hope somehow that makes Natasha wake up!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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To this very day...the saga goes on. Natasha may never learn how devastating her lies are since Ava is always covering up or making excuses for her. And Isabella... she holds on, praying for relief.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is really well done. Natasha has sunk as low as she can to blame her father for something he didn't do, something that will destroy him and ultimately her if she ever wises up. Technically it is all her mother's fault for believing Natasha instead of Isabella. Even her best friend is going to be horrified by what she has done. Unless she believes her. And poor Isabella is stuck with her.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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This is really well done. Natasha has sunk as low as she can to blame her father for something he didn't do, something that will destroy him and ultimately her if she ever wises up. Technically it is all her mother's fault for believing Natasha instead of Isabella. Even her best friend is going to be horrified by what she has done. Unless she believes her. And poor Isabella is stuck with her.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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And life rolls on....Unfortunately, you can't take back the destruction of harm caused by lies and deceit. Especially of this kind. No one will ever be the same regardless of the outcome. Thank you so much for your kindness and the stars. This story holds a lot of meaning for me.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Very powerful chapter. You cover a lot of emotional ground here.
Some things for your consideration:
my fault?" Natasha screamed at her mother. (I would put this, the fact that she screamed, much higher in the quote. I read the whole quote in my mind at a normal tone, and then found out at the end that she was screaming, if that makes sense.)
You're being me, Nat? (I don't know what this means. Is there a typo here?)
Paybacks a bitch." (Payback's)
He might have a temper and I can believe (temper, and)
Nicely crafted chapter. I can tell this is the tough one for you. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Very powerful chapter. You cover a lot of emotional ground here.
Some things for your consideration:
my fault?" Natasha screamed at her mother. (I would put this, the fact that she screamed, much higher in the quote. I read the whole quote in my mind at a normal tone, and then found out at the end that she was screaming, if that makes sense.)
You're being me, Nat? (I don't know what this means. Is there a typo here?)
Paybacks a bitch." (Payback's)
He might have a temper and I can believe (temper, and)
Nicely crafted chapter. I can tell this is the tough one for you. Thanks for sharing! Julie.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Fixed and refixed... I hate it when I forget to save my edits.
Thanks so much for your help and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am not ready for it to end. Natasha's lies are transparent and Becky folds like a dinner napkin. Becky is grounded until social security kicks in. Natasha is sent to adult prison secuase she is 17. Her prints where found on one of the heroin bags. And her diatribes are backed up by no one. Isabella refuses to house Natasha. Ava's husband has had enough. Her and the daughter she ruined are on their own. It is his families house. She has no right to it, he tosses them out. This is what my head sees.:-)
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I am not ready for it to end. Natasha's lies are transparent and Becky folds like a dinner napkin. Becky is grounded until social security kicks in. Natasha is sent to adult prison secuase she is 17. Her prints where found on one of the heroin bags. And her diatribes are backed up by no one. Isabella refuses to house Natasha. Ava's husband has had enough. Her and the daughter she ruined are on their own. It is his families house. She has no right to it, he tosses them out. This is what my head sees.:-)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Karen. Your input is well received and is filed away in my possible outcomes. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
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U R Welcome Karen :-)