Comment from Elise H

Excellent

I really liked your word choice in the last line. "He bursts into raucous torment" is a great and unexpected way to put a fresh birth.

Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024

Thank you for your review. Glad you enjoyed the poem. It was a challenge to write.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I think so. I love the creativity of your poem. This acrostic is well written as the first word of each line feels natural. Love the final line. That's what you are waiting for. Great job!

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024

Thanks for your review. This was a challenge.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This acrostic poem, BIRTH, introduces the bundle of joy into the cold and scary world within which he/she will need to become as comfortable in as the former abode. Not much chance of that though.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024

Thanks for your review.

Comment from JP_Ryan

Excellent

this is a really good representation of the moments after a baby presents themselves to the world, Thank you for sharing and wishing you the very best of luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024

Thank you for your review. This was a challenge.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

New horns always make themselves heard and this is their only communication with the outside world. You captured those moments here perfectly with your acrostic, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2024