2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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9 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This is a great mix of words and artwork. It seems ekphrastic.
The boat is beautiful but seems lonely.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on finishing third in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hi MariVal,
This is a great mix of words and artwork. It seems ekphrastic.
The boat is beautiful but seems lonely.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on finishing third in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Joan.
Gypsy hugs 🤗
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You are most kindly welcome, MariVal
Joan
Comment from mrsmajor
Hi, Gypsy
I like how the moonlight takes the place of the water, and floods the empty boat...I enjoyed this, the picture is just stunning...All the Best!
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Hi, Gypsy
I like how the moonlight takes the place of the water, and floods the empty boat...I enjoyed this, the picture is just stunning...All the Best!
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 11-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Victoria 😊
gypsy
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You're most welcome, it was my pleasure!
Victoria
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You're very welcome, it was my pleasure!
Victoria
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This short Haiku is like the Zen Haiku. It's peaceful, beautiful and very profound. I like the usage of the word "flood" to describe the beautiful moonlight.
Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This short Haiku is like the Zen Haiku. It's peaceful, beautiful and very profound. I like the usage of the word "flood" to describe the beautiful moonlight.
Well done.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Lisa
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Love how you take an empty boat and flood it with light. The boat becoming the vessel keeping the moonlight. Beautiful imagery and calming. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Love how you take an empty boat and flood it with light. The boat becoming the vessel keeping the moonlight. Beautiful imagery and calming. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very nice poem. The poem reads and flows well. Your 2-4-2 syllable count is good for this contest. Good complimentary picture, it really accentuates the poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This is a very nice poem. The poem reads and flows well. Your 2-4-2 syllable count is good for this contest. Good complimentary picture, it really accentuates the poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Baltimore.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That is quite the contrast! The boat is empty but it is full of moonlight. Great choice of the word "flooded" as it conjures up the water imagery of where we think a boat should be. Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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That is quite the contrast! The boat is empty but it is full of moonlight. Great choice of the word "flooded" as it conjures up the water imagery of where we think a boat should be. Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister.
Love,
Marival
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am wondering if this empty boat is a metaphor for an empty body or soul. I know beautiful moonlight could fill both with hope and beauty. Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation with us.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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I am wondering if this empty boat is a metaphor for an empty body or soul. I know beautiful moonlight could fill both with hope and beauty. Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation with us.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Good metaphor :) it can also be an empty boat by the moonlight. The phrase 'flooded with moonlight light is a zen concept that everything is connected in nature and human nature.
Thank you very much, I hope you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a good play on words, very clever! :) An excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reviewing this, and your full and interesting Author Note. Thank you for sharing this!
Best wishes,
Alexan :) xx
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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This is a good play on words, very clever! :) An excellent poem for the challenge. I enjoyed reviewing this, and your full and interesting Author Note. Thank you for sharing this!
Best wishes,
Alexan :) xx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
cool zen haiku!
the flooding emptiness versus the moonlight...
great imagery and smooth flow of words
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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cool zen haiku!
the flooding emptiness versus the moonlight...
great imagery and smooth flow of words
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs