Securely Joyful
My mind feels good2 total reviews
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very good poem. Your poem reads and flows well. However, your last line has six syllables. The other lines have the correct syllable count. Your picture is good. If you correct the last line, contact me and I will revise my rating.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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This is a very good poem. Your poem reads and flows well. However, your last line has six syllables. The other lines have the correct syllable count. Your picture is good. If you correct the last line, contact me and I will revise my rating.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I made the correction in the last line. Thank you for your help and kind review! Please revise it!
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I just revised it. You are welcome.
Comment from jessizero
I think you have one syllable too many in that last line. I do like your poem, though. It is happy. Thank you for sharing your poem, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I think you have one syllable too many in that last line. I do like your poem, though. It is happy. Thank you for sharing your poem, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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It's fixed. Thank you for your help and kind review!