Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 22"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
16 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
"Something wet touched Becky's cheek and she trembled, holding back a scream." As usual, I don't often have to read past the first line before you've set my imagination in a whirl. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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"Something wet touched Becky's cheek and she trembled, holding back a scream." As usual, I don't often have to read past the first line before you've set my imagination in a whirl. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2024
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Okay, I'm sitting her at my computer in the dark and the minute I saw the first words of your review, I started laughing. I knew exactly where your mind was headed. You are terrible, but you sure can make me laugh.
Thank you.... Smiles, Carol
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Sadly, no matter how hard I try, I've never been a good boy. But hopefully, you've figured out that I want to be. Most of the time. LOL.
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You're the best!
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Nope, you're the best!
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Now I'm blushing.... a red faced old lady. Oh wait, maybe it's just the wine. LOL
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"Pour me another one, just like the other one."
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These last couple of chapters are proving to be a little rough to write...and then you come along and make my night. Thank you! I needed to smile and laugh....
Hugs, Carol
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I've found that in life we have to laugh at something, even if it's ourselves. It doesn't always help or ease the pain, but sometimes our jaws get tired, giving us something else to think about. :-)
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Perfect!
Comment from Carol Clark2
I'm glad the girls are OK and have rescued Juan. Gabby was kind to visit Judy at the hospital. I hope Judy will be a truthful witness about Dion. He seems to have many people thinking he's responsible for Bobby's death. This story's getting complicated.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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I'm glad the girls are OK and have rescued Juan. Gabby was kind to visit Judy at the hospital. I hope Judy will be a truthful witness about Dion. He seems to have many people thinking he's responsible for Bobby's death. This story's getting complicated.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Town gossips always have their own version of what might be the truth or not. Let's hope the real story comes out and soon.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, As you know I have not been a consistent reviewer to this story.vcand it's been my loss. I have been busy with visitors and then I've been indulging myself with my own writing. But I'm slowly catching up. You have surely left us on a cliff hanger. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Hi Carol, As you know I have not been a consistent reviewer to this story.vcand it's been my loss. I have been busy with visitors and then I've been indulging myself with my own writing. But I'm slowly catching up. You have surely left us on a cliff hanger. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I fully understand not having time to do everything that's required...writing, reviewing, and reading.... It's too much sometimes. I am thrilled that suddenly the words are flowing so fast, but I can't read enough to post as much as I would like. The final few chapters will be explosive... at least for the writer. Much of it is based on real life (not the deaths of course) and this story has served as therapy in a way. Thank you for taking the time to read this chapter. We are nearing the end.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
Hmph! You and your cliff hangers haha!
As per usual, gripping story, well told.
I just have a few typo, grammar suggestions for you:
Juan being kicked and drug into the grass. (dragged)
Roon 520 (Room)
The following uses "felt" 3x in proximity to each other. I'd recommend rewording one or two of them:
She didn't know exactly what to say but *felt* she owed Judy an apology. She'd almost lost her life because of her father's recklessness.
Standing outside Judy's room, Gabby suddenly *felt* nervous. She couldn't imagine how Judy must have *felt*
Excellent chapter. I will tune in next week! Julie.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Hmph! You and your cliff hangers haha!
As per usual, gripping story, well told.
I just have a few typo, grammar suggestions for you:
Juan being kicked and drug into the grass. (dragged)
Roon 520 (Room)
The following uses "felt" 3x in proximity to each other. I'd recommend rewording one or two of them:
She didn't know exactly what to say but *felt* she owed Judy an apology. She'd almost lost her life because of her father's recklessness.
Standing outside Judy's room, Gabby suddenly *felt* nervous. She couldn't imagine how Judy must have *felt*
Excellent chapter. I will tune in next week! Julie.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thank you for spotting my slip-ups. Fixed and appreciated, of course. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Rough roads still lie ahead.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done it again, leaving me hanging and anxiously awaiting the next chapter. I have faith that you will save Dion one way or another. I'm looking forward to the next addition to the story.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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You have done it again, leaving me hanging and anxiously awaiting the next chapter. I have faith that you will save Dion one way or another. I'm looking forward to the next addition to the story.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Judy can save Dion by saying it was Bobby's fault and she can say Bobby bought drugs.... but she didn't see him put the drugs in Dion's truck. So we have to worry about possession.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I understand that you have had a lot of chaos in your life. You did a fine job setting the stage for Chaos in your story.I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I understand that you have had a lot of chaos in your life. You did a fine job setting the stage for Chaos in your story.I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for your kindness. It's been a rough road and continues to be.. and luckily fiction blends well with the nonfiction. Writing has allowed me to release a lot of pentup anger and anxiety through the characters. As always, I appreciate your review and support.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
I can't believe it has been 22 chapters already! You have not lost your touch, Carol. I'm hoping Dion is cleared, Jason at least faces up to being the father, and Gabby comes through it all.
Juan's lucky to be alive...at least until he comes to and has Natasha and Becky hanging around!
Those two seem headed for no good!
Very good chapter!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I can't believe it has been 22 chapters already! You have not lost your touch, Carol. I'm hoping Dion is cleared, Jason at least faces up to being the father, and Gabby comes through it all.
Juan's lucky to be alive...at least until he comes to and has Natasha and Becky hanging around!
Those two seem headed for no good!
Very good chapter!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thanks, my friend. I think Juan and the girls are just beginnings to see the troubles that face them. As in real life, some of them never learn or not until it's too late.
Thanks for the review and thoughts.
Hugs, Carol
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Yup/ I know two or ten of those folks... (smile)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
If it wasn't for bad luck, they would have no luck at all. Dion needs to recuperate fully. Some rehab will fix him right up. No drugs will be found in his system. A scared kid comes clean to his Mom. He wasn't supposed to be outside paying. He saw Bobby putting the bags of dope in Dion's truck. She drags him to the police station. Hooray! The good side has a win. My brain keeps busy:-) Karen
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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If it wasn't for bad luck, they would have no luck at all. Dion needs to recuperate fully. Some rehab will fix him right up. No drugs will be found in his system. A scared kid comes clean to his Mom. He wasn't supposed to be outside paying. He saw Bobby putting the bags of dope in Dion's truck. She drags him to the police station. Hooray! The good side has a win. My brain keeps busy:-) Karen
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Not quite...but something good has to happen, right? Thank you for stopping by to review and toss some ideas around with me. Appreciate your interest.
Hugs, Carol
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Always happy to help. Good writing puts my brain on alert, and stuff just spits out! :-)
Comment from Wendy G
Oh, it would be good if Judy could be honest - with Gabby and with the police, about what Bobby had done. She owes Bobby nothing .... Dion needs to be cleared. (And Jason is no friend, shallow and self-centred.)
And let's hope Juan survives, despite everything. The two girls have probably learnt nothing, but will make up more lies to cover themselves. And Natasha's mother obviously doesn't care for her evening to be interrupted, regardless of her daughter's safety! Filled with drama and emotions. Well done.
Edits: She hadn't loss (lost) the baby,
Roon (Room) 520.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Oh, it would be good if Judy could be honest - with Gabby and with the police, about what Bobby had done. She owes Bobby nothing .... Dion needs to be cleared. (And Jason is no friend, shallow and self-centred.)
And let's hope Juan survives, despite everything. The two girls have probably learnt nothing, but will make up more lies to cover themselves. And Natasha's mother obviously doesn't care for her evening to be interrupted, regardless of her daughter's safety! Filled with drama and emotions. Well done.
Edits: She hadn't loss (lost) the baby,
Roon (Room) 520.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Yes, unfortunately, the Natasha saga is only beginning. And Isabella will find herself in the center of it whether she likes it or not. Thanks so much for the review and encouragement.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The two brats should have learned a lesson that will set them on the straight and narrow. I did notice one problem. There is no way Gabby could know that her father had tried to run Dion off the road as only Judy knows that. Since her father is who he is, she could suspect he did something stupid, but she probably needs Judy to say something about what he did.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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The two brats should have learned a lesson that will set them on the straight and narrow. I did notice one problem. There is no way Gabby could know that her father had tried to run Dion off the road as only Judy knows that. Since her father is who he is, she could suspect he did something stupid, but she probably needs Judy to say something about what he did.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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You are so right...I had Gabby talking to Dion first, but then took it out of the chapter. but my brain forgot to change the conversation with Judy. Thank you for catching that. I'll see how I can correct it. You are on your toes, Carol. I appreciate it very much.