Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 21"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm still trying to get caught up whenever I find a chance. I'm down to and hour and forty-five minutes away from the start of a new FanStory week. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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I'm still trying to get caught up whenever I find a chance. I'm down to and hour and forty-five minutes away from the start of a new FanStory week. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Not to worry...my story will be there, waiting. Matter of fact I've posted 26. 27 is written and 28 which might be the final chapter is half way done. It's just winding up now... I hope you like it...especially the ending. I've been writing fast so I don't allow myself to think to deeply about the people I drew from while writing. It's in the past and writing has been awesome therapy. Take care... and drop in with a smile whenever you can.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I like reading everything you write. As I've said many times, I learn from you every time I read one of your posts. The only problem is: I forget things about as fast as I learn. :-)
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There's another thing we have in common LOL. Have a nice night! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
It sounds like Coach knows his team members very well, and he might be on to Jason. Is a twelve-pack drugs? Alcohol? I hope the girls will be safe. It sounds like Juan won't be. Another exciting chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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It sounds like Coach knows his team members very well, and he might be on to Jason. Is a twelve-pack drugs? Alcohol? I hope the girls will be safe. It sounds like Juan won't be. Another exciting chapter.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2024
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Good day, Carol....I see you've read a few chapters today. I am most appreciative since I know you are taking care of your husband. How is he doing? I hope he's better and maybe back home.
A twelve-pack is 12 cans of beer sold in a box.
Smiles, Carol
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I'm trying to read now and then, as I can't do so every day. Mitch is in rehab, and will be for several more weeks. He's making progress, and his blood pressure is mostly under control now. It's like learning to balance and walk all over again. Thanks for asking about him. Hugs!
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Keep me informed and don't worry about reading. Keep up your strength too! The story will be waiting for you whenever you can.... Hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent, as usual. My computer was down for a couple of days, so I got a bit behind. You know how to keep a reader interested with all the action in this story. Nice work.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Excellent, as usual. My computer was down for a couple of days, so I got a bit behind. You know how to keep a reader interested with all the action in this story. Nice work.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Good morning, April
Hope all is well with you. I appreciate you coming back to the story and enjoying it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. I am a little behind on my reviewing. This is the third chapter today. I say keep writing. Have you published any books? I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. I am a little behind on my reviewing. This is the third chapter today. I say keep writing. Have you published any books? I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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I've never published though I always say I would like to do it. Just having my work in print just for me would be awesome. Thanks so much for the three chapter read today. Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
There's some other variable creeping in the story, like drug dealers and their piranha like bosses, Audrey is a bit tough with poor old Jackson, who is a fair cop, and thinks the best of Dion, things are falling in a hole, at the moment, blessings, great writing Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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There's some other variable creeping in the story, like drug dealers and their piranha like bosses, Audrey is a bit tough with poor old Jackson, who is a fair cop, and thinks the best of Dion, things are falling in a hole, at the moment, blessings, great writing Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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I'm hoping Audrey will see things clearer after the dust settles and she gets a handle on her grief. If not, she most likely will lose the best chance she had in life..Jackson and his love.
Thank you so much, Roy.
Smiles, Carol
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I think she will
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The coach is trying to get some answers from Jason. Jackson is finding Audrey is playing mercenary. Natasha and Becky have no common sense and may be in really big trouble. The story is going off in different directions, but that is the way true life is.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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The coach is trying to get some answers from Jason. Jackson is finding Audrey is playing mercenary. Natasha and Becky have no common sense and may be in really big trouble. The story is going off in different directions, but that is the way true life is.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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No doubt that Natasha and BEcky have no common sense. It all seems like a wild adventure to them with no consequences. I don't think Big Frank sees it quite the same. Hopefully Juan survives.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This story is like an onion. Layer upon layer upon layer. Good work here. The writing is very believable.
I am really enjoying the way you tease us with tiny bits of info, then move on to the next character's story. It drives me nuts. Thank you. Karen :-)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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This story is like an onion. Layer upon layer upon layer. Good work here. The writing is very believable.
I am really enjoying the way you tease us with tiny bits of info, then move on to the next character's story. It drives me nuts. Thank you. Karen :-)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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An awesome description...exactly what I hoped I was doing with my characters. Thank you so much. I love to leave the reader wanting more....
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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That is the key to a good serial. Not to focus solely on one character above all others.
That is your great talent. I am in awe. Can't do it myself. :-)
Comment from lyenochka
Jason continues to disappoint. Hopefully, he will contact Gabby like he said he would. It seems anger and grief has brought out the worst in Audrey but Jackson remains supportive but keeps his integrity.
Now Juan seems to be in trouble with some really bad guys. His witness would be key and I hope Jackson checks him out!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Jason continues to disappoint. Hopefully, he will contact Gabby like he said he would. It seems anger and grief has brought out the worst in Audrey but Jackson remains supportive but keeps his integrity.
Now Juan seems to be in trouble with some really bad guys. His witness would be key and I hope Jackson checks him out!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Yes, Jason has failed to think of others and seems focused on his goals, forgetting others. He is a me..me..me person. Too bad because he is missing out on a lot of good things in life. And Juan..our drug dealer.. may have met his match. Hopefully, he survives his little "drive".
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Another excellent chapter filled with drama and suspense. The girls are now in way over their heads, and who knows what will happen to Juan. As for Audrey she is unscrupulous and doesn't deserve to have a man of integrity like Jackson. And the coach has doubtless put two and two together regarding Jason. Full of complex action and relationships. Very well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Another excellent chapter filled with drama and suspense. The girls are now in way over their heads, and who knows what will happen to Juan. As for Audrey she is unscrupulous and doesn't deserve to have a man of integrity like Jackson. And the coach has doubtless put two and two together regarding Jason. Full of complex action and relationships. Very well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Good morning, Wendy
Thank you for the thoughtful review. Yes, the girls view everything as a wild adventure and fail to see the extreme possibilities of their actions. The incident with Juan and Big Frank might make a bigger impression, I hope. Life definitely is a complex situation.
Have a great day!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good chapter full of wondering what is going to happen next. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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This is a very good chapter full of wondering what is going to happen next. You used great descriptive words and very good dialogue. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Oh, I am so blessed and thankful for your enjoyment and the lovely stars. Thank you so much!
Have a great day, Teri
Smiles and hugs, Carol