What We See
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "What We See - Chapter 11B"A wrongly accused teacher reinvents his life
18 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is another great chapter filled with realistic life events. Things don't always go as planned. Ginny and Tommy will be disappointed, but when they return home and see Alan's note, hopefully they will understand. I hope Alan's dad will recover from the fall.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This is another great chapter filled with realistic life events. Things don't always go as planned. Ginny and Tommy will be disappointed, but when they return home and see Alan's note, hopefully they will understand. I hope Alan's dad will recover from the fall.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Lorraine. Alan hopes they can forgive him. They don't know him well enough to know that this won't become a regular pattern. That's what he worries about.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Sorry to hear that Alan will be breaking the trust he has built up with Ginnie and Tommy. I hope that does not hurt his business. Interesting chapter. Good dialogue between Alan and Tommy. I hope Alan's father will be OK. Carol
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Sorry to hear that Alan will be breaking the trust he has built up with Ginnie and Tommy. I hope that does not hurt his business. Interesting chapter. Good dialogue between Alan and Tommy. I hope Alan's father will be OK. Carol
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much, Carol. He has challenged their trust in him, and we will soon see how they respond.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It is hard when you have to break a promise to a child.I am looking forward to te next chapter. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. It is hard when you have to break a promise to a child.I am looking forward to te next chapter. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Yes, it is, and he felt like he was betraying the trust Tommy, and Ginnie, were building in him. Hopefully they will understand.
Comment from jmdg1954
Seems like Alan and Tommy are forming a bond together with both work and baseball being the common ground. Baseball has that tendency!
Hopefully Alan's dad will recover.
I can see Tommy being hurt and disappointed with Alan not coming to the game in the afternoon and he may think it was something he did or said?
A bit confusing to me about lunch...
He would come to work at 10:00 AM and work until 2:30, when we would take a half hour for lunch. (I read that as they took lunch at 2:30)
We spent the rest of the afternoon until he left at 2:30 working on a TV set. (This reads as if they took lunch and then continued working)
It may just be me...
Good posted chapter, Jim.
John
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Seems like Alan and Tommy are forming a bond together with both work and baseball being the common ground. Baseball has that tendency!
Hopefully Alan's dad will recover.
I can see Tommy being hurt and disappointed with Alan not coming to the game in the afternoon and he may think it was something he did or said?
A bit confusing to me about lunch...
He would come to work at 10:00 AM and work until 2:30, when we would take a half hour for lunch. (I read that as they took lunch at 2:30)
We spent the rest of the afternoon until he left at 2:30 working on a TV set. (This reads as if they took lunch and then continued working)
It may just be me...
Good posted chapter, Jim.
John
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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You're right, John. Kids do tend to do that--take things as something they've are responsible for. He'll set him straight soon.
Good catch about the lunch time. I took some words out and didn't do a very good job of fixing it up. It's fixed now. Thanks.
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Cool. Glad to help.
Comment from tfawcus
I like the way you are gradually building the relationship between these two. The interactions with customers are a great way of showing how the business is growing and how well it will do in the future.
This continues to be an intriguing story.
Only one suggestion:
I could open it up right now (immediately) and perhaps give him a diagnosis right away [to avoid the repetition]
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I like the way you are gradually building the relationship between these two. The interactions with customers are a great way of showing how the business is growing and how well it will do in the future.
This continues to be an intriguing story.
Only one suggestion:
I could open it up right now (immediately) and perhaps give him a diagnosis right away [to avoid the repetition]
Comment Written 21-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thanks very much for the 6 stars, Tony. One more chapter before a plot switch with some answers to earlier questions.
I liked your wording change suggestion and took it. Thanks.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I would think they would be understanding of his reason for not making it to the game. I hope his business takes off so he can feel sure he is successful.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I would think they would be understanding of his reason for not making it to the game. I hope his business takes off so he can feel sure he is successful.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Hopefully, they're beginning to trust him more, but this will soon be put to the real test.
Comment from royowen
I'm pretty sure Andrew has a knack for business, the cost of computers back then was prohibitively expensive, and the cost of a games driven variety was preferable at the, one can by very powerful reworked varieties now, much cheaper, well done Jim, good writing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I'm pretty sure Andrew has a knack for business, the cost of computers back then was prohibitively expensive, and the cost of a games driven variety was preferable at the, one can by very powerful reworked varieties now, much cheaper, well done Jim, good writing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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I worked for a professor at the Michigan State University in 1978, when we bought a microcomputer system which contained a system unit with 48 k of main memory, a dual floppy disk drive, a monitor, and a printer that printed all capital letters for $6,000! Unbelievable what those early computers cost. But I wrote some pretty sophisticated programs for him. There was so little main memory that we had to break large programs into pieces and chain them together because the whole thing wouldn't fit into main memory.
Today's computers have 8 gigabytes of main memory, and we had 48 k. That's 167 times more today, and the equivalent system price would be 10 times less.
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That?s right
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is getting more involved and better fleshed out.
I like the tutelage on the repair work. His Dad is a wrinkle I had not heard of before, or did I forget? Good writing here. Karen
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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This is getting more involved and better fleshed out.
I like the tutelage on the repair work. His Dad is a wrinkle I had not heard of before, or did I forget? Good writing here. Karen
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Karen. Yeah, his dad has Alzheimers. We met him in Chapter 5 (FanStory chapter 6) when David (Alan) visited him at the VA hospital where he lives in the memory care unit.
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I don't think I started reading at the beginning. I will need to go read. Homework! :-)
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If you don't feel like reading the whole thing, each chapter begins with a recap of the previous one. Much shorter read that way.
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That would be cheating. :-)
Comment from Wendy G
Oh that is disappointing that he has to miss the game, but his father's well-being has to be his first priority. Let's hope they understand. Well written chapter and one is left wondering about outcomes for both areas of the story.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Oh that is disappointing that he has to miss the game, but his father's well-being has to be his first priority. Let's hope they understand. Well written chapter and one is left wondering about outcomes for both areas of the story.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Both will be resolved in the next chapter. I'm really looking forward to the one after that, though. That begins a sequence of events that will answer a number of questions.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I'm left wondering what Alan has in mind for the computer he's bought from his client. That sounded like a good deal for the customer. Ooh ladders and the frail are not a good partnering at all. A poignant finish to a good chapter Jim.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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I'm left wondering what Alan has in mind for the computer he's bought from his client. That sounded like a good deal for the customer. Ooh ladders and the frail are not a good partnering at all. A poignant finish to a good chapter Jim.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Any ideas about that computer?
You're right. Ladders and old, infirm people--bad combination!
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Well I was wondering if he was going to try to furtively use it to find out waht's happening at his old school.