Worn Out!
(Time to take a nap)!14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Worn Out, could easily be the story of any office manager who has to make sure that the star of the company stays bright. Certainly the same is true of the head elf.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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This poem, Worn Out, could easily be the story of any office manager who has to make sure that the star of the company stays bright. Certainly the same is true of the head elf.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Hi, Bill! Thank you so much for the great review! It could definitely work for any office manager (that's exactly what I did for 42 years before retiring from our local government - LOL)! I'm so glad you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a wonderful day!
Comment from bob cullen
The final line converted a mediocre poem into a near classic. And it added vindication to the story concept.
I must confess I was greatly relieved on reading the line, 'The weather is freezing cold.' So, I figured it must be winter. Then I saw mention of the Big Man. Big Man & winter. Did that imply Christmas?
Truly delightful. If made for a great read. Thank you.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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The final line converted a mediocre poem into a near classic. And it added vindication to the story concept.
I must confess I was greatly relieved on reading the line, 'The weather is freezing cold.' So, I figured it must be winter. Then I saw mention of the Big Man. Big Man & winter. Did that imply Christmas?
Truly delightful. If made for a great read. Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Bob, for that adorable review! I was wondering if anyone would pick up on what I had deemed tiny hints towards the punch line! Bet you even caught the one about vehicle as "...not just gas and go..." You must be a detective! So happy you enjoyed this little mystery! Thank you again and have a fantastic day!
Comment from BermyBye50
Mimi,
Congrats on your first place win in the Funny poem about your job contest. You title of your poem Worn Out says it all. The story you tell with your words is funny and the rhythm and rhyming flows easily. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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Mimi,
Congrats on your first place win in the Funny poem about your job contest. You title of your poem Worn Out says it all. The story you tell with your words is funny and the rhythm and rhyming flows easily. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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Thank you so very much, Bermy, for the lovely review! So happy that you enjoyed the humor. I actually had started this one several years ago, but got stuck and let it fall by the wayside... The contest writing prompt nagged me into finding it and get me to completion! LOL! Thank you again and have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a humorous, jolly poem you wrote. To be an elf and your boss is Santa Claus would be a sleepless job. Unless you called the other elves to help you. You'd be checking the list and checking it twice!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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What a humorous, jolly poem you wrote. To be an elf and your boss is Santa Claus would be a sleepless job. Unless you called the other elves to help you. You'd be checking the list and checking it twice!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Rosemary, for your wonderful review and am so happy that you enjoyed! Definitely a "sleepless" job! LOL! Thank you again and have a beautiful day!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Hahaha! This is excellent. You did a fantastic job on this as you named many of the administrative assistant's duties. I knew a punch line was coming, but never expected the boss to be Santa. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Hahaha! This is excellent. You did a fantastic job on this as you named many of the administrative assistant's duties. I knew a punch line was coming, but never expected the boss to be Santa. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I'm so happy you enjoyed and was surprised by who the boss ended up to be! Thank you again and have a lovely evening!
Comment from zanya
Such a cute and humorous angle on the Funny poem about your job theme. That little North Pole Office ELF is so well portrayed as he scrambles to get everything together.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Such a cute and humorous angle on the Funny poem about your job theme. That little North Pole Office ELF is so well portrayed as he scrambles to get everything together.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank so much for your lovely comments! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one - it was quite fun to write and was hoping it encouraged a good chuckle at the end! Thank you again and have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Excellent! This really captures urgency and stress here and the verse seems to speed through, hardly taking a breath. Well rhymed and flowing, it then springs the unexpected surprise of Santa Claus being the boss. I like this. It may be February but a great choice for this particular contest brief. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Excellent! This really captures urgency and stress here and the verse seems to speed through, hardly taking a breath. Well rhymed and flowing, it then springs the unexpected surprise of Santa Claus being the boss. I like this. It may be February but a great choice for this particular contest brief. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Hi, Debbie! Thank you for the wonderful review... I had started this several years ago and just couldn't get it completed. When I saw the writing prompt, it brought back memories that gave me incentive to finally complete! I'm so happy you enjoyed - Thank you again and have a lovely evening!
Comment from Wendy G
Very cleverly written, and with a super twist at the end. The job description itself was very humorous, but the final lines made it even better. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Very cleverly written, and with a super twist at the end. The job description itself was very humorous, but the final lines made it even better. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for the great review! I'm so happy you enjoyed it; and especially, the surprise at the end! Thank you again and have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Jeano
I feel the stress, it's bad enough doing my own book work let alone for others. I've read them all, and you just might have a winner with this one. Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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I feel the stress, it's bad enough doing my own book work let alone for others. I've read them all, and you just might have a winner with this one. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a lovely day!
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You're welcome.
Comment from QC Poet
Six sentence has an unknown word anon? It's difficult to fallow your rhyme scheme structure
but there seems to be alternating in different sentences it is funny take on a head elf's job. Good Luck in this contest
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Six sentence has an unknown word anon? It's difficult to fallow your rhyme scheme structure
but there seems to be alternating in different sentences it is funny take on a head elf's job. Good Luck in this contest
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much for your review and so glad you enjoyed my take on the head-elfs job!
