Life's Twisted Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Life's Twisted Road - Chap 15"Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble
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Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, those girls can surely get into mischief! It's a good thing Gabby is not there, although it sounds like Audrey won't stop searching till she knows where Gabby is. I'm wondering if Bobby survived the crash, and if the trucker is OK. I'll be watching for the next segment of this story. Carol
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Wow, those girls can surely get into mischief! It's a good thing Gabby is not there, although it sounds like Audrey won't stop searching till she knows where Gabby is. I'm wondering if Bobby survived the crash, and if the trucker is OK. I'll be watching for the next segment of this story. Carol
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I see you have read the next chapter as well so you know Bobby's fate,,,rough way to go, for sure. Now we need to worry about all the "mess" he left behind.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Audrey has Jackson in her life with the weight of the world on her shoulders.
I like how you described the trucker and hope he survived. But if Bobby doesn't survive, I guess it's only up to Judy to share the about the drugs that he planted in Dion's car.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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It's good that Audrey has Jackson in her life with the weight of the world on her shoulders.
I like how you described the trucker and hope he survived. But if Bobby doesn't survive, I guess it's only up to Judy to share the about the drugs that he planted in Dion's car.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Austin and Roscoe to the rescue! With Judy in a coma, it might be a rockier road for Dion with the drugs. For now, it's a wait and see thing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Not good. I mean the events within the story, not the story itself, or your writing. I hope that came across as intended. Good work is what I mean. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Not good. I mean the events within the story, not the story itself, or your writing. I hope that came across as intended. Good work is what I mean. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY, WAYNE
Got it! You enjoyed the wild events in the chapter and I appreciate that very much. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh my goodness. I'm just hoping Dion is safe, and the poor man and his dog in the big truck. That stupid Bobby is a prat! If he's killed himself, that's his own fault. He hasn't acted like a loving father since her mother died. This is exciting, my friend. I have another one to read! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Oh my goodness. I'm just hoping Dion is safe, and the poor man and his dog in the big truck. That stupid Bobby is a prat! If he's killed himself, that's his own fault. He hasn't acted like a loving father since her mother died. This is exciting, my friend. I have another one to read! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Yes, Bobby is a wild one on the loose, but unfortunately, things seem to catch up to those kind sooner or later. Thanks for the review and your thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Julie Helms
I'm starting to get a handle on all the characters now, putting the relationships together. You continue with good tension and storyline. You also do a really good job with weaving different storylines together, which is a talent! You did a great job giving that long-haul trucker character development in a short amount of space.
For your consideration:
1. rear-view (rearview)
2.They had me Work overtime this weekend to get the job done and on Monday they laid us off." (work) (comma after done)
3.Audrey's jaw dropped as took in the scene (as she took)
Nicely done. Off to read the next one! Julie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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I'm starting to get a handle on all the characters now, putting the relationships together. You continue with good tension and storyline. You also do a really good job with weaving different storylines together, which is a talent! You did a great job giving that long-haul trucker character development in a short amount of space.
For your consideration:
1. rear-view (rearview)
2.They had me Work overtime this weekend to get the job done and on Monday they laid us off." (work) (comma after done)
3.Audrey's jaw dropped as took in the scene (as she took)
Nicely done. Off to read the next one! Julie
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you highly for setting my errors on the right. Like you said in another review...my brain gets ahead of my fingers. LOL Appreciate the notice. thank you for reading and reviewing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I fear that Dion too has been involved in the accident, and the truck driver probably killed. Bobby will have his blood analysed and will be seen to be totally drunk. What a disaster for everyone else. lind drunken rage behind the wheel. As for the girls and their party, nothing good can come from this! So many strands to this story, and such a fast pace of events. Amazing. Well written!!
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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I fear that Dion too has been involved in the accident, and the truck driver probably killed. Bobby will have his blood analysed and will be seen to be totally drunk. What a disaster for everyone else. lind drunken rage behind the wheel. As for the girls and their party, nothing good can come from this! So many strands to this story, and such a fast pace of events. Amazing. Well written!!
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you Wendy... Your personal story is still weighing on my heart and it makes me happy that mine is fictional and on paper. Neither of us can change the past but I can rip up the story or rewrite it with a magical ending. But I won't because I can't....I'm compelled to write it as it unfolds.
Thank you again. Carol
Comment from karenina
Yikes. You ping -ponged back and forth between scenes and characters so seamlessly I had to slow myself down and switch gears so as not to miss a beat!
That's a real skill, right there.
Dion better be okay. I have a sick feeling that trucker may have list his life while swerving to avoid mass casualties.
Bobby?
Meh.
I could get over him!
(Wink)
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Yikes. You ping -ponged back and forth between scenes and characters so seamlessly I had to slow myself down and switch gears so as not to miss a beat!
That's a real skill, right there.
Dion better be okay. I have a sick feeling that trucker may have list his life while swerving to avoid mass casualties.
Bobby?
Meh.
I could get over him!
(Wink)
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Well, I thank you for your kind review and concern for my fictional friends. The crash has happened and the aftermath is spread across the highway. Hopefully, but I doubt it, life will be on the brighter side.
Hugs, Carol
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Hah. I read the next chapter. Spoiler alert...the right person perished!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Everyone is having a truly awful day, Dion and Audrey and Judy most of all. Bobby might be having a good day if his life ends, and he doesn't have to be crazy mad all the time. You wrote this so well I am even worried about the truck driver and his dog.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Everyone is having a truly awful day, Dion and Audrey and Judy most of all. Bobby might be having a good day if his life ends, and he doesn't have to be crazy mad all the time. You wrote this so well I am even worried about the truck driver and his dog.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you for your kindness, Carol. Things are about to change for everyone, but the world isn't perfect. Trouble lies ahead regardless. Your review and glitter bring a smile to my face. Thank you!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Jerry Reed Hubbert the real "guitar man," born in Atlanta, Georgia, and lived and loved to fish in Alabama. I must saw I never took for a Reed fan, but now I like you even more. Makes me think about Eight More Miles to Louisville, Amos Moses, and the Preacher and bear. Now, back to the story. Great writing! :-)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Jerry Reed Hubbert the real "guitar man," born in Atlanta, Georgia, and lived and loved to fish in Alabama. I must saw I never took for a Reed fan, but now I like you even more. Makes me think about Eight More Miles to Louisville, Amos Moses, and the Preacher and bear. Now, back to the story. Great writing! :-)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Remember what they say....Don't judge a book by it's cover. I'm full of surprises. I could see me sitting in the big rig, singing right along with him. Music feedsmy soul! Thanks for the review and finding something else we enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is unbelievably fast moving and remarkably engaging. Before I can process one scene, the next scene is even more compelling. What makes your writing so moving is the little details you include.
An example is:
Jackson's eyes shifted to Audrey as he asked, "Any casualties?"
I could imagine Jackson looking at Audrey, recognizing the need to be careful about what he said in her presence. This is all very realistic. Thanks for sharing your impressive imagination.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This is unbelievably fast moving and remarkably engaging. Before I can process one scene, the next scene is even more compelling. What makes your writing so moving is the little details you include.
An example is:
Jackson's eyes shifted to Audrey as he asked, "Any casualties?"
I could imagine Jackson looking at Audrey, recognizing the need to be careful about what he said in her presence. This is all very realistic. Thanks for sharing your impressive imagination.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you! You confirm what I always say is necessary to make a story good... actually drawing the reader in and connecting them to the characters. Make them see or feel the action. I'm smiling from ear to ear.
Smiles, Carol