2024 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I actually understood that one, Gypsy. And it was a fun one, it went perfectly with the picture! Lol. I then read your author's notes, is there a difference in the American Haikus and those written in the UK? It was this line that made me wonder: because English syllables are longer than Japanese syllables.... Writing poetry over the years I've found that many times some have said my syllable count was out, but it wasn't in UK rhyme. It just made me wonder. I'm going to try my hand at haikus this coming week. Can I PM you with it before I post it?
I enjoyed reading yours, and the picture was perfect for it. :)) Love and hugs, my friend, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I actually understood that one, Gypsy. And it was a fun one, it went perfectly with the picture! Lol. I then read your author's notes, is there a difference in the American Haikus and those written in the UK? It was this line that made me wonder: because English syllables are longer than Japanese syllables.... Writing poetry over the years I've found that many times some have said my syllable count was out, but it wasn't in UK rhyme. It just made me wonder. I'm going to try my hand at haikus this coming week. Can I PM you with it before I post it?
I enjoyed reading yours, and the picture was perfect for it. :)) Love and hugs, my friend, Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Yes, please, you can always message me if you have questions about haiku or if you want to send me a draft and look it over before you post it. I can make suggestions and give you the information you may need. I usually add links where you can find more information too.
Concerning syllables:
Japanese don't use syllables, they use 'on' sounds, which are much shorter than English syllables sound. For example....
a HAIKU IN JAPANESE:
Furu ike ya
kawazu tobikomu
mizu no oto
Fu/ru i/ke ya ( 5 on)
ka/wa/zu to/bi/ko/mu (7 on)
mi/zu no o/to (5 on)
SAME HAIKU TRANSLATED TO ENGLISH
old pond (2 syllables)
frogs jumped in ? (3 syllables)
sound of water (4 syllables)
*famous haiku by Matsuo Basho, the first haiku master from the 17th century
Thank you very much, Sandra, it's good to hear from you.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and as a former letter carrier one that I shared his panic. Constantly having to watch for unknown dogs. We weren't supposed to get out of our delivery truck if there was a dog loose.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and as a former letter carrier one that I shared his panic. Constantly having to watch for unknown dogs. We weren't supposed to get out of our delivery truck if there was a dog loose.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL I couldn't help but laugh at this poem. When I was growing up, we had a Great Dane, a gigantic dog. Duke was the kindest, gentlest dog you could ever meet, unless you were the mailman. For real. When it was about time for the mailman to come, we put Duke in the basement. He would jump through the picture window to get the mailman. Never knew why he hated the man, but he did. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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LOL I couldn't help but laugh at this poem. When I was growing up, we had a Great Dane, a gigantic dog. Duke was the kindest, gentlest dog you could ever meet, unless you were the mailman. For real. When it was about time for the mailman to come, we put Duke in the basement. He would jump through the picture window to get the mailman. Never knew why he hated the man, but he did. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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LoL poor guy.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
ahhahahahaha! fun senryu! yea, dogs do not like those delivery men! for they are entering their domain lol
cool imagistic senryu with smooth flow of words and a totally cute pic
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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ahhahahahaha! fun senryu! yea, dogs do not like those delivery men! for they are entering their domain lol
cool imagistic senryu with smooth flow of words and a totally cute pic
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Haha. This was funny. I was talking to a friend who is a UPS driver. He's been working for UPS for 23 years. He's been bitten by dogs a total of 39 times. I feel for the mail carriers and delivery men. Great haiku. Gretchen
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Haha. This was funny. I was talking to a friend who is a UPS driver. He's been working for UPS for 23 years. He's been bitten by dogs a total of 39 times. I feel for the mail carriers and delivery men. Great haiku. Gretchen
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kindThank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs words. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh the poor postal carrier! We had guests tonight and they told us about their son who was briefly a mail carrier and a pit bull lunged at him and bit his face! So hearing that story and reading this poem on the same night makes me cringe! Ack!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Oh the poor postal carrier! We had guests tonight and they told us about their son who was briefly a mail carrier and a pit bull lunged at him and bit his face! So hearing that story and reading this poem on the same night makes me cringe! Ack!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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That sounds terrifying, poor mailman.
Thank you very much for your excellent review , big sister.
Love,
Marival
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a fun Haiku for a cute picture. I like the humor in this poem. I wish the font could be larger. Thanks a lot for sharing. You made me laugh.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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What a fun Haiku for a cute picture. I like the humor in this poem. I wish the font could be larger. Thanks a lot for sharing. You made me laugh.
Well done.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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I changed the font size. I wrote the poem on my phone so I didn't notice.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
For some reason known only by postmen and dogs, dogs really seem to hate these poor, arrive winter and summer, hardworking men. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
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For some reason known only by postmen and dogs, dogs really seem to hate these poor, arrive winter and summer, hardworking men. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is so cut and funny! I am visual so I enjoy the words and image together. This is excellent writing for the challenge! Good syllable counts and descriptions. This is also relatable to readers. Excellent image!
Best wishes as always,
Alexan
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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This is so cut and funny! I am visual so I enjoy the words and image together. This is excellent writing for the challenge! Good syllable counts and descriptions. This is also relatable to readers. Excellent image!
Best wishes as always,
Alexan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs