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Life's Twisted Road

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Pages turn, stories change, bonds crumble

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Comment from LJbutterfly
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I enjoy the detail you put into every chapter. I could easily envision Judy, standing outside the jail waiting for Bobby. Gabby standing at the top of the stairs bleeding, was also very clear. It put me in the room with Isabella. What I enjoy most about your storytelling is that I can't predict what will happen next.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Oh, Lorraine what compliments you give upon this humble writer. since I came back to FS, I have been so afraid that I'd lost my touch of putting the reader in the center of the action. And the fact I keep you guessing is outstanding.

    Thank you....Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
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What is that saying about ''the tangled webs we weave." And the more tangled they get, the more entertaining they become, as long as they are in stories. LOL. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    The spider is on the move and I'm looking forward to your thoughts.... especially 14 and the upcoming 15. It's actually out of my league so any suggestions will be appreciated.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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A miscarriage? As much as that would be awful, it would be better for Gabby. I'm not at all liking her father of his bit of stuff!! She's out to make trouble. I missed this one, but I'm catching up again. You write sooooo fast! Another great chapter, Carol. Well done, my friend, Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    Hmm.. maybe just a warning that stress isn't a good mix with being pregnant. Unfortunately, her stress isn't over with yet and Bobby is up to no good as usual. I wrote three chapters in one day... I think the story went wild in my mind and just started rolling out of my thoughts. Chap. 14 is tomorrow and then I'll take a breather...at least for a few days. Though I really need 15 or some people might not like where I left them hanging. LOL

    Smiles, hugs and love, Carol
Comment from Ulla
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I will admit that I'm trying to keep up as best as I.can, and I'm not doing a very good job of it. I've had visitors for the last two weeks. So I'm desperately behind. Now I will try to catch up with the story. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    Life happens to all of us. I just appreciate that you read when you can. And hopefully, enjoy what I write. Thank you so much Ulla. Have a great day!

    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
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It's getting better and better. At least Gabby won't have to go through an abortion or pregnancy. Good addition to the plot. I have truly enjoyed reading all these chapters at once.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    Thank you! I struggled to write for months and became deeply depressed. And then I had a dream... And this story started unfolding in my head. Though it's fiction, I am drawing unfortunately on my own family tragedies... Writing the story is good therapy.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
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I'm surprised that Judy had the money to bail out Bobby. I wonder if Gabby is having a miscarriage? I would think that kind of bleeding so early in a pregnancy is not good. Hope the right person will come to help.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
    Hmmm... don't know much about her background yet, but never judge a book by its cover I guess. As for Gabby...I'm on the fence as to how I want it to go. Either way, her life has changed forever.

    Smiles, Carol
reply by lyenochka on 09-Feb-2024
    I vote for Gabby to get together with Dion as long as Bobby has a lifechanging event. A miscarriage is lifechanging enough and shows her what kind of person her ex-boyfriend is.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Bobby should never have been bailed out. He needs a lot more jail time, not less. I hope he doesn't remember what Dion looks like. Poor Gabby has been under so much stress, one more thing not going as it should is certainly not what she needs. You have a lot of things going on in this chapter that are what readers like to read.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
    What an awesome surprise! To earn a six this late in the week or at any time for that matter. I am blessed! Yes, Bobby's out of control temper is going to raise havoc and pain for many people. And GAbby... the poor girl is lucky to be Isabella's hands. Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and the stars.

    Smiles and hugs, Carol

Comment from Wendy G
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Sounds like a miscarriage, but she is very fortunate to have Isabella caring for her so well. No gel from her father of boyfriend. I hope Dion mends quickly and will remain a support. She's going through quite a lot of trauma at present.
Well written.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
    Once again, Wendy, I find myself straddling the fence so to speak. Society would prefer the young girl's pregnancy disappear somehow, but then isn't it a gift - a reason for the season. Thoughts? And the golden stars.... you bless me. Thank you!!!

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from eliz100
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This is another excellent chapter. The hook at the end makes me want to keep reading. Who is Isabella calling? I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
    I've got enough "hooks" maybe I was a fisherman in another life. LOL Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate it as always.

    Smiles. Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
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It sounds like Gabby is losing her baby. I'm glad Isabella is helping her. Poor girl! I'm sorry Judy paid the bail money for Bobby. He will be up to no good again soon, I imagine. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2024
    Judy has no idea of how much evil lies inside Bobby, but I'm afraid she's about to learn. An Gabby...I'm on the fence as to where I go with the pregnancy. True to life... society tends to scrub away the so called "blemish", but my heart says we are given things for a reason. Thoughts?

    Smiles, Carol
reply by Carol Clark2 on 09-Feb-2024
    Personally, I couldn't take a baby's life. There are other available options. But you're the author, sweetie. I would surely fight to not allow Bobby near the child or me.