Comment from Jeano

Excellent

Oh, that's cold. You achieved a complete story here, but yet leaving the reader wanting more. Good job. The competition is high with this contest. It's going to be hard to vote for only one. Good Luck.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thank you

reply by Jeano on 13-Feb-2024

You're welcome.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was a compelling story in just 100 words. I was taken by surprise when John sacrificed himself, then I was horrified by the ending. You did a great job with audience control. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thank you for taking the time to read and review..

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

A man of his word, but not much conscience since he knew he was leaving a man stranded in the desert to die a cruel death. That's gangsters in a nutshell. He followed his code of honor even if it's not the same as a good person. Good luck in the contest.

Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thank you

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is an excellent flash story for the contest with a good surprise ending.
Morale: never trust a gangster. Of course, John could have taken the gun and
suddenly turn and kill Orlando.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thank you