All By Myself
a french fry saga9 total reviews
Comment from Jeano
This may have raised the bar for this competition. Very cute commentary from a French fry. I'm not sure if it's silly, cute or funny. I am having trouble distinguishing silly from funny. Good luck with the contest. I liked it.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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This may have raised the bar for this competition. Very cute commentary from a French fry. I'm not sure if it's silly, cute or funny. I am having trouble distinguishing silly from funny. Good luck with the contest. I liked it.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you, ma'am! Glad you did! And I appreciate your comments!!!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
another clever writing for sure~
I like these silly poems and besides they are fun to write~
your rhyming is great and besides if we like French fries~we never leave any on our plate LOL
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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another clever writing for sure~
I like these silly poems and besides they are fun to write~
your rhyming is great and besides if we like French fries~we never leave any on our plate LOL
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much.
Lonely french fry feel much better, now :)
Comment from SimianSavant
This was a great read! Well constructed, with perfect A-B rhymes a great ongoing narrative. I only have one small suggestion to offer:
=> What'd one more French fry do? <=
To get a better click on your syllable count and reduce redundancy, try "what would one more do"?
Thanks for a great read,
Harambe the Gorilla
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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This was a great read! Well constructed, with perfect A-B rhymes a great ongoing narrative. I only have one small suggestion to offer:
=> What'd one more French fry do? <=
To get a better click on your syllable count and reduce redundancy, try "what would one more do"?
Thanks for a great read,
Harambe the Gorilla
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thanks for reading and for your suggestion. It's before the committee now.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hahaha! I wouldn't have thought it was possible to tell an entertaining story in verse about a french fry. But you proved me absolutely wrong. This is wonderfully imaginative to the extent I almost feel sorry for the chip's sad demise. The last stanza rounds off the verse and the french theme in excellent style. Well done! Silly and humorous in equal measure and a great contender! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Hahaha! I wouldn't have thought it was possible to tell an entertaining story in verse about a french fry. But you proved me absolutely wrong. This is wonderfully imaginative to the extent I almost feel sorry for the chip's sad demise. The last stanza rounds off the verse and the french theme in excellent style. Well done! Silly and humorous in equal measure and a great contender! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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thanks, Debbie! I really appreciate your great comments.
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! so very enjoyable, one nearly has feelings for the lonely fry, an excellent for this prompt, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Ha! Ha! so very enjoyable, one nearly has feelings for the lonely fry, an excellent for this prompt, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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thank you so much for your sweet comments and best wishes!
Comment from Julie Helms
This is hysterical. The journey of the french fry! You had me gripped till the end wondering what would happen to it.
Just a note, French should not be capitalized. It comes from the procedure of frenching (making strips).
Thanks so much for the laugh! Julie
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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This is hysterical. The journey of the french fry! You had me gripped till the end wondering what would happen to it.
Just a note, French should not be capitalized. It comes from the procedure of frenching (making strips).
Thanks so much for the laugh! Julie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Well, Julie, I not only thank you for reading and for your wonderful comments but also for the catch!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I have always left two French fries together. Of course! I'm only human not a callus animal!! I wouldn't think of leaving one alone. Seriously, I personify everything, normally, throughout every day.
Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. The rhyming is paced well and is effective. Perfect image! Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes!
Alex
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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I have always left two French fries together. Of course! I'm only human not a callus animal!! I wouldn't think of leaving one alone. Seriously, I personify everything, normally, throughout every day.
Excellent writing. It is full of good sensory words and vibrant imagery. The rhyming is paced well and is effective. Perfect image! Thank you for sharing this. Many writers will relate to this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes!
Alex
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Alex. I appreciate your neat comments very much.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent silly poem for the contest
that actually makes sense in a French fry way.
Nicely rhymed with easy meter and fun to read.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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This is an excellent silly poem for the contest
that actually makes sense in a French fry way.
Nicely rhymed with easy meter and fun to read.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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thanks, Robert. Your comments are much appreciated!!
Comment from jim vecchio
A very lighthearted, silly poem. Reminded me a little about the old das when I wanted to be a comic book writer. One company had a series about a french fry tht fell in love with and ran away with a fork. Best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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A very lighthearted, silly poem. Reminded me a little about the old das when I wanted to be a comic book writer. One company had a series about a french fry tht fell in love with and ran away with a fork. Best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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thank you!
I hope you gave it a try.
I bet the series with the french fry and the fork was a short one. Sounds like paring up Sylvester and the canary.
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It was a limited series, and the company is long gone, and I never got to see the end! Thanks. I did try, but like all my works, it is nothing to speak of.