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Comment from Jill D
This is great Rhonda...So phoebus has tended to Echo's wounds all the while being extremely patient with her many questions, at times rude maybe but I suppose typical of a reporter.. Theo dad's garden sounds beautiful by the way (something tells me you love your garden;) I'm also liking the sound of his family especially the food fights Lol! Why was Hannah silenced when she mentioned the weather.. And Echo's cat's mixing with Hannah's rabbits...Thank God Sunny's a tom cat..Lol! I should really review as I go along but I don't think of it at the time just when I'm finished reading for the night apologies for this! Catch ya tomorrow night:)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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This is great Rhonda...So phoebus has tended to Echo's wounds all the while being extremely patient with her many questions, at times rude maybe but I suppose typical of a reporter.. Theo dad's garden sounds beautiful by the way (something tells me you love your garden;) I'm also liking the sound of his family especially the food fights Lol! Why was Hannah silenced when she mentioned the weather.. And Echo's cat's mixing with Hannah's rabbits...Thank God Sunny's a tom cat..Lol! I should really review as I go along but I don't think of it at the time just when I'm finished reading for the night apologies for this! Catch ya tomorrow night:)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2024
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Hi Jill!!
Thank you for checking in!! This was one of the fun chapters, sort of meant to balance out all the intensity of past ones.
Echo does a lot of asking questions in the beginning because of nerves and her being a reporter. She gets better later.
Gardens are a bit my thing. I'm a Master Gardener, which basically means I'm certified to do what I like to do anyway, lol.
Thanks again, my friend (and mom)
Rhonda
Comment from w.j.debi
This looks like a fun and accepting family. Echo keeps discovering new things and meeting new people. So the Royal Family likes to enjoy the occasional food fight. I think I would have been shocked too, but then, it did seem like such a natural thing to do, especially since the parents joined in.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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This looks like a fun and accepting family. Echo keeps discovering new things and meeting new people. So the Royal Family likes to enjoy the occasional food fight. I think I would have been shocked too, but then, it did seem like such a natural thing to do, especially since the parents joined in.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hi, Debi!! Thanks so much for the six stars and for catching up on the chapters. I really do appreciate it!! The food fight was a sort of comic relief and a chance for the royal family to be gracious and fun. There's a lot about to be expected of her...and them.
Thanks again, my friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
I love the food fight you added to this chapter. It gives the story a more light-hearted twist. I thoroughly enjoyed reading more of your story and look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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I love the food fight you added to this chapter. It gives the story a more light-hearted twist. I thoroughly enjoyed reading more of your story and look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
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Hi, and thank you so much for reading this chapter. I started to leave the food fight out, but then went for it. When you have that many children and they are high energy, the steam has to be let off now and then. Thanks for going with the flow.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
Anther wonderful chapter in the temporarily peaceful world of Concorde Valley. Echo appears to fit right in with all the descendants of the gods, who seem to know something that we don't know as yet.
A garden is very much a peaceful place, getting ones hands in the dirt and growing vegetables and flowers, like the original garden.
So Theo's name means "bloom" like he sprung from the earth.
I'll bet Uncle Hermes is lingering around somewhere too.
Believe it or not, apparently my family on my mother's side, in Rhode Island, once had food fights on Thanksgiving. My great grandfather would start the melee when dessert was served... pumpkin pie flings nicely off a fork.
My mother says she warned my dad when they were dating not to dress up for Thanksgiving day dinner. Maybe we're descended from the gods. LOL
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Hello Rhonda,
Anther wonderful chapter in the temporarily peaceful world of Concorde Valley. Echo appears to fit right in with all the descendants of the gods, who seem to know something that we don't know as yet.
A garden is very much a peaceful place, getting ones hands in the dirt and growing vegetables and flowers, like the original garden.
So Theo's name means "bloom" like he sprung from the earth.
I'll bet Uncle Hermes is lingering around somewhere too.
Believe it or not, apparently my family on my mother's side, in Rhode Island, once had food fights on Thanksgiving. My great grandfather would start the melee when dessert was served... pumpkin pie flings nicely off a fork.
My mother says she warned my dad when they were dating not to dress up for Thanksgiving day dinner. Maybe we're descended from the gods. LOL
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Hahaha, I always knew there was something mystical about you!
Yes, Hermes is about, and about to show up in the story in a pretty big way.
There is also, something else afoot, lol.
Thank you so much for the six stars and intuitive review, my friend,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely done. Large advancement of the story.
"You're mostly likely right," - a bit awkward. Maybe (most) likely?
FanStory's handling of line spacing is a mystery. Some within this post appear single-spaced, while most double. And some of the font seems much more pale than in other places.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Nicely done. Large advancement of the story.
"You're mostly likely right," - a bit awkward. Maybe (most) likely?
FanStory's handling of line spacing is a mystery. Some within this post appear single-spaced, while most double. And some of the font seems much more pale than in other places.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Hi Wayne,
Thank you so much for your detailed review. I tried multiple times to get rid of those issues you mentioned, only to have it remain like it was. I don't know what else to do... but, I'm glad you noticed, too.
Take care,
Rhonda
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FanStory does it to mine, too.
growly face here
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I agree on the growly, lol.
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I agree on the growly, lol.
Comment from Pam (respa)
Great artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. Notes are appreciated. I enjoyed reading the chapter as the family gathered for a meal with everyone eventually making it. It is nice to see each one sharing with Echo, telling her about their names, and what is special about the garden. It is a large family, and it doesn't take long for a bit of mayhem to take place. I was surprised when Phoebus even joined in. It was pretty funny when Diantha dumped the bowl of
spaghetti in Phoebus' lap. A very good conclusion, too. It was nice to see some lighthearted fun.
I suspects her true motive [suspect]
"You're mostly likely right, [this could use a little revision: You're almost right]
it's been long [it's been a long time]
Helen^ a child she has just met [comma needed]
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Great artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. Notes are appreciated. I enjoyed reading the chapter as the family gathered for a meal with everyone eventually making it. It is nice to see each one sharing with Echo, telling her about their names, and what is special about the garden. It is a large family, and it doesn't take long for a bit of mayhem to take place. I was surprised when Phoebus even joined in. It was pretty funny when Diantha dumped the bowl of
spaghetti in Phoebus' lap. A very good conclusion, too. It was nice to see some lighthearted fun.
I suspects her true motive [suspect]
"You're mostly likely right, [this could use a little revision: You're almost right]
it's been long [it's been a long time]
Helen^ a child she has just met [comma needed]
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Pam, thank you so much for reviewing, and for the lovely golden stars! Each equally appreciated!!
I made the suggested changes, thank you for your careful eye!!
I thought it was a good idea to add in some fun before things start getting intense again. Theo will address the behavior in the next chapter and sort of explain why his parents joined in.
Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. I think the fun was a good idea, too.
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Great!!!
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! It all seemed like a normal family dinner until the food fight. I guess Echo should feel comfortable with this family now. I liked how you mentioned the overprotectiveness of mothers - even among "immortals" who have less worries about the kids getting into scrapes. And "Anthos" is a fun name for a boy. I know a boy named Ficus but that covers the whole range of fig trees including the banyan.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Oh my! It all seemed like a normal family dinner until the food fight. I guess Echo should feel comfortable with this family now. I liked how you mentioned the overprotectiveness of mothers - even among "immortals" who have less worries about the kids getting into scrapes. And "Anthos" is a fun name for a boy. I know a boy named Ficus but that covers the whole range of fig trees including the banyan.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Hi Helen!
Thank you so much for your generous review and comments. I?m glad the food-fight came off okay. I patterned it after my friend with 11 kids. She has a lively sense of humor and, though this happened rarely, such silliness happened.
I?m also glad you picked up on the worry mothers have. It?s hardwired into us, even these immortals, though not having to worry about death, have other anxieties. I think I?ll bring that up in the next chapter. Thanks for pointing it out. You?re ever a help with such things.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Navada
I thoroughly enjoyed this update on the doings of these divine beings in their beautiful garden. I loved that they descended into a full-on food fight at the end and suddenly became so much more relatable! A couple of little spag issues - dirvish and mele. Thanks for the share! :)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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I thoroughly enjoyed this update on the doings of these divine beings in their beautiful garden. I loved that they descended into a full-on food fight at the end and suddenly became so much more relatable! A couple of little spag issues - dirvish and mele. Thanks for the share! :)
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Hi Navada! Thank you for the lovely review and for the spag catching. I?lol chase those down and fix them!
Hugs,
Rhonda
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You're very welcome! :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I love your fantasy series. Keep it coming. I do enjoy it. Being bogged down in winter makes us live through our stories and those of our friends. Have a good week. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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I love your fantasy series. Keep it coming. I do enjoy it. Being bogged down in winter makes us live through our stories and those of our friends. Have a good week. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Hi Karen! It?s good to hear from you. Sorry I?m so far behind on reviewing. I?m having to write curriculum at school and it saps my creativity, lol.
I?m glad this site helps with the winter blues!
Hugs,
Rhonda
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no problem. this is my slow time. cold and wey do not make me a happy camper.':-)
Comment from royowen
It seems like Echo has met and had the whole family, she finds out how special and individual they all are, and how special Theo is, they had managed to get a message to her grandma and grandpa to say she is safe. Exceptional write, Rhonda, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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It seems like Echo has met and had the whole family, she finds out how special and individual they all are, and how special Theo is, they had managed to get a message to her grandma and grandpa to say she is safe. Exceptional write, Rhonda, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Hi Roy,
Thank you for the six stars and your comments! I'm glad you picked up on some of the details. It's hard in a long passage to do.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Well done