Thaw sets in
Haiku20 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
If I had that sixth star, you'd have earned it! This is one of the best haiku I've read for awhile. The image fir perfectly of the butter melting and the welcome warmth following a chilly frost. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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If I had that sixth star, you'd have earned it! This is one of the best haiku I've read for awhile. The image fir perfectly of the butter melting and the welcome warmth following a chilly frost. Great job!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much
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It was a beautiful piece of writing, as usual!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm not sure I understand how butter relates to this; something melting in nature would have made more sense to me (but I'm no poet). What is the syllable count for a Haiku? Isn't it 5-7-5? This is 3-5-4 by my count. You might want to check that.
Thanks for sharing.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I'm not sure I understand how butter relates to this; something melting in nature would have made more sense to me (but I'm no poet). What is the syllable count for a Haiku? Isn't it 5-7-5? This is 3-5-4 by my count. You might want to check that.
Thanks for sharing.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thanks for dropping by .this was a club entry for Succinct haiku.with lesser syllables than normal haiku please check Gypsy Blue Roses Club .
I understand your reservation about butter melting in a longer poem I could have given the connection at least my version.I don't understand why it didnt appear as a club entry.
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I changed the rating to excellent. Thanks for the explanation.
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Thank you very much.
Comment from GWHARGIS
The imagery was awesome in this. If you wanted us to think about the smooth creamy smear of butter that was once a cold hard brick and visualize the crust of snow turning to slush before seeping in to the earth .. then yes you succeeded. Lol. Great imagery. Gretchen
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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The imagery was awesome in this. If you wanted us to think about the smooth creamy smear of butter that was once a cold hard brick and visualize the crust of snow turning to slush before seeping in to the earth .. then yes you succeeded. Lol. Great imagery. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Maybe, I should go away, or perhaps resort to attending an English class you teach to garner in what is meant in your two releases today. Maybe I should have a cup of coffee and awaken more save for the fact I don't do caffeine.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Maybe, I should go away, or perhaps resort to attending an English class you teach to garner in what is meant in your two releases today. Maybe I should have a cup of coffee and awaken more save for the fact I don't do caffeine.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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It should have appeared as a club entry .I don't understand why it didn't. Irequirement was to write shorter Haiku! Shorter than the usual. So there severe word limitation .reader can use husband own.perception.no need yo go away. We need writers like you
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery with
the thaw and warmth.
-You did a good job and got your point
across because the snowman will be melting,
and he feels it in his heart.
-It an also relate to people who enjoy
the warmth after a cold winter.
-A very good satori line that shows
what this feeling is like so I think
you got your idea across.
-A common expression is smooth as butter,
and that's how the warmth in their hearts felt.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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-Very nice image and presentation, Sanku.
-You have written a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery with
the thaw and warmth.
-You did a good job and got your point
across because the snowman will be melting,
and he feels it in his heart.
-It an also relate to people who enjoy
the warmth after a cold winter.
-A very good satori line that shows
what this feeling is like so I think
you got your idea across.
-A common expression is smooth as butter,
and that's how the warmth in their hearts felt.
-Well done!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much..sorry for the tardiness in replying
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You are very welcome. No problem about tardiness.
Comment from jaded831
Absolutely beautiful, a natural warming in nature but also has a human aspect. I love this style of writing, and on other poetry sites have judged contests. You definitely have a winner here.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Absolutely beautiful, a natural warming in nature but also has a human aspect. I love this style of writing, and on other poetry sites have judged contests. You definitely have a winner here.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Once again thanks
Comment from Douglas Goff
This could be taken a couple of ways. One would be the Love of Spring. The second, more unlikely would be the death of the snowman when things flaw meaning we should see things from a different perspective. That would be deep.
Regardless, fun short poem. Carry's a lot of weight!
D
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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This could be taken a couple of ways. One would be the Love of Spring. The second, more unlikely would be the death of the snowman when things flaw meaning we should see things from a different perspective. That would be deep.
Regardless, fun short poem. Carry's a lot of weight!
D
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for this perspective .i am sorry my reply was delayed.
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning,
I get it dear Sanku... and i liked it.. It made me think because of the use of butter... and the image of the cold...
Thank you for sharing,
Lisa
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Good morning,
I get it dear Sanku... and i liked it.. It made me think because of the use of butter... and the image of the cold...
Thank you for sharing,
Lisa
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much .sight of melting butter gives me a kind of comfort..
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I believe you did get your O'Dea across. I say this because your poem as seemingly simple, has many layers. It could be taken both figuratively and literally. Also, it could pertain to love or other relationships. I think any reader that engages with your poem will get your meaning through their perspective. :) Best wishes! Alex
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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I believe you did get your O'Dea across. I say this because your poem as seemingly simple, has many layers. It could be taken both figuratively and literally. Also, it could pertain to love or other relationships. I think any reader that engages with your poem will get your meaning through their perspective. :) Best wishes! Alex
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for dropping by
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When the thaw arrives it is always a blesing as mild weather calms us down and gives us hope, this is what I felt when I read your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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When the thaw arrives it is always a blesing as mild weather calms us down and gives us hope, this is what I felt when I read your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much...
