Love Honor and a Mail Order Bride
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Comment from BethShelby
This is a great start to a new novel and I'm looking forward to reading it. I've enjoyed your western stories in the past ane more recently enjoyed the stories of your life. I think this should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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This is a great start to a new novel and I'm looking forward to reading it. I've enjoyed your western stories in the past ane more recently enjoyed the stories of your life. I think this should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thanks again for this Beth. Its always good to have years of shared writings.
Comment from royowen
I think this would make a fatastic first chapter, I have great confidence in you as a writer Stan, and I know ou write from the goodness of your soul. And all your work would be thoughtful and well thought out. Your language skills are vety reasonable, and more than creative, I like your male characters, when thus restrained himself, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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I think this would make a fatastic first chapter, I have great confidence in you as a writer Stan, and I know ou write from the goodness of your soul. And all your work would be thoughtful and well thought out. Your language skills are vety reasonable, and more than creative, I like your male characters, when thus restrained himself, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much. Appreciate what you said and how it resonates.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ben Colder
I am out of six for now, but as you always capture your readers, I thought I was reading Louie La More but knew better. You have given us a wonderful chapter to stew with.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I am out of six for now, but as you always capture your readers, I thought I was reading Louie La More but knew better. You have given us a wonderful chapter to stew with.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thanks brother! So glad to know you. I keep getting pulled back into the western genre. There's something special about those times, and how it took a GRITTY Hardcore faith in our LORD!
Appreciate you Bro.
Comment from lyenochka
You have written an intriguing first chapter. Already, I feel like there is some deep connection between Luke and Aiyana despite the fact that Luke has a "mail-order bride" coming his way. Aiyana has so much mystery that would be great to unravel, especially how she came to be of the Christian faith. Perhaps that's why she was cast out and injured.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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You have written an intriguing first chapter. Already, I feel like there is some deep connection between Luke and Aiyana despite the fact that Luke has a "mail-order bride" coming his way. Aiyana has so much mystery that would be great to unravel, especially how she came to be of the Christian faith. Perhaps that's why she was cast out and injured.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I'm glad you said out loud what I hoped for, that a reader would be interested to know what happened to her and how Luke would handle his visitor with a bride on her way.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wish I had a six left for this contest entry. This story is fantastic. I really like it. Good luck. I'm sure you'll do well in the contest.
Looks like between Lucy my horse and Sugar, (comma after 'Lucy')
"Open your mouth." He ordered. (mouth," he)
Sugar didn't mind sharing his floor pillow with her. He snuggled next to her, and only now and then left his nose to sniff the aroma of onion and deer venison stewing in a pot. (I thought you said before Sugar was a girl dog.)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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I wish I had a six left for this contest entry. This story is fantastic. I really like it. Good luck. I'm sure you'll do well in the contest.
Looks like between Lucy my horse and Sugar, (comma after 'Lucy')
"Open your mouth." He ordered. (mouth," he)
Sugar didn't mind sharing his floor pillow with her. He snuggled next to her, and only now and then left his nose to sniff the aroma of onion and deer venison stewing in a pot. (I thought you said before Sugar was a girl dog.)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks Barbara. What you said means much from someone who is on a professional and proven level compared to others here.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good chapter for the first chapter of a book, and I wish you the very best in writing a book. I wish you the best in the contest as well. May you have a wonderful day, and may God bless.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This is a very good chapter for the first chapter of a book, and I wish you the very best in writing a book. I wish you the best in the contest as well. May you have a wonderful day, and may God bless.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thanks Pat!
