2024 Japanese Poetry
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13 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
The sun may have forgotten you, but the memories will always remain with you. This free-style poem has exactly the format you need to express this truly joyful experience. Thank you!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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The sun may have forgotten you, but the memories will always remain with you. This free-style poem has exactly the format you need to express this truly joyful experience. Thank you!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Comment from Alexandra Trovato
very romantic and beautiful poem, as a man's voice can be beautiful and romantic too. I read your poem as a man's voice like you mentioned. This is full of sensory words, vibrant imagery, and emotion. The image is priceless. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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very romantic and beautiful poem, as a man's voice can be beautiful and romantic too. I read your poem as a man's voice like you mentioned. This is full of sensory words, vibrant imagery, and emotion. The image is priceless. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reviewing it.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Alex. Have a wonderful weekend.
MariVal
Comment from jim vecchio
For the I don't know how manyeth time, you've proven your skill and versatility in poetic forms. When you write about love, you reach my heart and make me wish I was in love once more. Your words are always chosen to perfection.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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For the I don't know how manyeth time, you've proven your skill and versatility in poetic forms. When you write about love, you reach my heart and make me wish I was in love once more. Your words are always chosen to perfection.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I (*+*)
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Thank you for showing me how to do it!
Comment from QC Poet
A very different poem writing style from what I can remember. Your notes were very helpful and informative to me. There is a line that reads; your body breaded in sand- that term eludes me but I'm guessing it means covers as in bread covers the things within a sandwich. Thanks for Sharing this style of poem writing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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A very different poem writing style from what I can remember. Your notes were very helpful and informative to me. There is a line that reads; your body breaded in sand- that term eludes me but I'm guessing it means covers as in bread covers the things within a sandwich. Thanks for Sharing this style of poem writing.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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yes, breaded with sand, hopefully, creates a visual of breathing food... fish, chicken, meat, veggies... not that the lover is going to eat her ... or maybe yes :)
Thank you, QC. I appreciate your kind feedback. I hope you have a wonderful day.
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Comment from kahpot
Though I may have read this wrong-I read it my way (instead of "breaded" I had the vision of (braided) (artwork) gave me that thought, just loved the thought of "the sun forgot us..." yet love keeps us warm, so very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Though I may have read this wrong-I read it my way (instead of "breaded" I had the vision of (braided) (artwork) gave me that thought, just loved the thought of "the sun forgot us..." yet love keeps us warm, so very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. There's no right or wrong way to understand this poem, it's about what you feel.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very passionate and very sensual and a wonderful description of unconditional love in which we all deserve and can have. I wish I had a six left for this poem. I ran out very early this week.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Very passionate and very sensual and a wonderful description of unconditional love in which we all deserve and can have. I wish I had a six left for this poem. I ran out very early this week.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
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Comment from dovemarie
Hi Gypsy, good love poem, good pictures of how the body was "breaded in sand" and you planted a seed that grew into eternal love. I think "kept" was supposed to be "keep." Dove
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Hi Gypsy, good love poem, good pictures of how the body was "breaded in sand" and you planted a seed that grew into eternal love. I think "kept" was supposed to be "keep." Dove
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
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Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. You do wonderful work and I always enjoy your poems. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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This is very well written, and I enjoyed listening to it. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. You do wonderful work and I always enjoy your poems. Patricia.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
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Comment from lyenochka
That sure sounds like a committed love! My favorite lines are "we cuddled by ocean whispers" and "your body breaded in sand
gave birth to this poem
I just planted the seed
of our eternal love"
Beautifully written!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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That sure sounds like a committed love! My favorite lines are "we cuddled by ocean whispers" and "your body breaded in sand
gave birth to this poem
I just planted the seed
of our eternal love"
Beautifully written!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
Big sister.
Love
Marival
Comment from royowen
Who doesn't like the thought of eternal love, certainly not me, this is so well written with a terrific handle on the language therein, the artwork is perfect and the atmosphere terrific, well done,blessing, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Who doesn't like the thought of eternal love, certainly not me, this is so well written with a terrific handle on the language therein, the artwork is perfect and the atmosphere terrific, well done,blessing, Roy
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much. 😊
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Well done