2024 Japanese Poetry
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15 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
This one has a lot of brilliant imagery that paints a strong image in your readers eye. Most enjoyable.
You are such a magnificent talent. Here is number fifteen.
Douglas
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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This one has a lot of brilliant imagery that paints a strong image in your readers eye. Most enjoyable.
You are such a magnificent talent. Here is number fifteen.
Douglas
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to go through my old poems. You are very nice to me.
Gypsy
Comment from patcelaw
Your Japanese poetry always paints. Such a lovely picture in the minds of the readers. I enjoyed this poem very much and your presentation is beautiful. I wish you a very good week. God bless.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Your Japanese poetry always paints. Such a lovely picture in the minds of the readers. I enjoyed this poem very much and your presentation is beautiful. I wish you a very good week. God bless.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. God bless you.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your perfect word choices put us right in the center of this beautiful simple romance. Thank you for doing that. I enjoyed reading. As usual, your presentation is unequalled by all.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Your perfect word choices put us right in the center of this beautiful simple romance. Thank you for doing that. I enjoyed reading. As usual, your presentation is unequalled by all.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from June Sargent
The imagery in this free verse is striking and beautiful, highlighting the love and bond between two souls. It flows with great rhythm - just like the universe itself. Without end.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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The imagery in this free verse is striking and beautiful, highlighting the love and bond between two souls. It flows with great rhythm - just like the universe itself. Without end.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
awww simple, sweet, romantic
loving word choices and imagery and smooth flow throughout
nice random and scattered rhyme, too
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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awww simple, sweet, romantic
loving word choices and imagery and smooth flow throughout
nice random and scattered rhyme, too
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Wow. This was beautiful. I could picture every scene and all the colors and scents were very vivid. This was a very cool poetic form. I'm learning a lot about poetry from you. I might not be able to do it but I'm learning what to look for in it. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Wow. This was beautiful. I could picture every scene and all the colors and scents were very vivid. This was a very cool poetic form. I'm learning a lot about poetry from you. I might not be able to do it but I'm learning what to look for in it. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Oh, good, that's what Japanese poetry is about.... using the senses to visualize the words imagery. I'm glad you are learning it, it's such a beautiful poetic form that most wouldn't hear about it.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Treischel
I see all the earmarks of a Japanese poem with lack of punctuation, lack of rhyme, lack of capitalization, no particular meter, and often written in a three line format. Other than that I see no discernible difference with a free verse poem. Not to say that this isn't a lovely piece with excellent imagery. It is romantic. You can really feel the essences of nature.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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I see all the earmarks of a Japanese poem with lack of punctuation, lack of rhyme, lack of capitalization, no particular meter, and often written in a three line format. Other than that I see no discernible difference with a free verse poem. Not to say that this isn't a lovely piece with excellent imagery. It is romantic. You can really feel the essences of nature.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Japanese poetry is not just 5-7-5. haiku. There are so many forms... but haiku is the most popular. But you are right about lack of punctuation, lack of rhyme, lack of capitalization, no particular meter, about nature or human nature.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This poem is beautifully written and full of romantic phrases. You should enter the Romantic poem contest since you write a lot of romantic poetry. The presentation presents burning love also.
Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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This poem is beautifully written and full of romantic phrases. You should enter the Romantic poem contest since you write a lot of romantic poetry. The presentation presents burning love also.
Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thankyouverymuchforyourexcellentreviewandkindwords.
Gypsyhugs,
Comment from royowen
Just love that last stanza Gypsy, such a blast with words that colour and give a thrust to the narrative, the wind pours down the cliff, singing the scent of the ocean to us. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Just love that last stanza Gypsy, such a blast with words that colour and give a thrust to the narrative, the wind pours down the cliff, singing the scent of the ocean to us. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh how I love your romantic poems. You are such a natural at these beautiful free verse treasures. I know I have told you before how I tend to melt a little at your lovely words and enjoy the beauty of how you word each and every line to make it as beautiful as your gorgeous art and entire presentation. I checked out both your contests for this week already and wondered if I was brave enough to try this one.
We will see, as February is looking like a big month for birthdays and also to see how brave I am. LOL... And one more thing about you and your beautiful poem, in the words of Carly Simon, nobody does it better! Love, Debi
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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Oh how I love your romantic poems. You are such a natural at these beautiful free verse treasures. I know I have told you before how I tend to melt a little at your lovely words and enjoy the beauty of how you word each and every line to make it as beautiful as your gorgeous art and entire presentation. I checked out both your contests for this week already and wondered if I was brave enough to try this one.
We will see, as February is looking like a big month for birthdays and also to see how brave I am. LOL... And one more thing about you and your beautiful poem, in the words of Carly Simon, nobody does it better! Love, Debi
Comment Written 28-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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It is basically a free verse.. pretty easy but you sound very busy this month, maybe in March. You can write it any time. It's okay to write from previous events.
Thank you very much, Debi 😊
love and Gypsy hugs
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Actually I have been practicing, and I do get the best feedback from your contests. So thank you and I do have to post something continuous so I will look at the birthday schedule and might be back to join one.
Thanks for all you do to help everyone learn about these lovely forms of Japanese poetry..
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Thank you, Debi. You are very kind.
Love
Marival
