A Mermaid's Tale or Tail
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Comment from Ric Myworld
You've just brought back to mind some of those happy times when I used to love visiting Sea World in Orlando, Florida and watching the interaction with the killer whales. And then deep sea fishing trips where dolphins would attack hooked fish as we would try to land them. Of course, it could have been mermaids. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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You've just brought back to mind some of those happy times when I used to love visiting Sea World in Orlando, Florida and watching the interaction with the killer whales. And then deep sea fishing trips where dolphins would attack hooked fish as we would try to land them. Of course, it could have been mermaids. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from royowen
I can remember my granddaughter watching a show were the main characters were mermaids and merguys, the minute the touched water, they grew tails, and on land, legs, I never figured the clothes Angle, beautifully written Liz, I enjoyed reading it, well done blessings
Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I can remember my granddaughter watching a show were the main characters were mermaids and merguys, the minute the touched water, they grew tails, and on land, legs, I never figured the clothes Angle, beautifully written Liz, I enjoyed reading it, well done blessings
Roy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Haqve a blessed day.
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Well doves
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I have not read you before, however, I had no problem following this. I find this interesting. I think 8-year-olds would enjoy this as well. They were in love with "The Little Mermaid" after all. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I have not read you before, however, I had no problem following this. I find this interesting. I think 8-year-olds would enjoy this as well. They were in love with "The Little Mermaid" after all. Karen
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stas. Habe a blessed day.
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You are welcome. Write , and I will read. Karen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This post is fun and creative. I enjoyed reading. I would think Middle school girls would enjoy reading this. I hope you continue the story.
Lucy faced her daughter, "Don't worry, you will understand everything. (period after 'daughter' not a speech tag.)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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This post is fun and creative. I enjoyed reading. I would think Middle school girls would enjoy reading this. I hope you continue the story.
Lucy faced her daughter, "Don't worry, you will understand everything. (period after 'daughter' not a speech tag.)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. Thank you for finding that error. I will fix it. I appreciate all those stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Allieas
I enjoyed your story chapter a lot. The flow was good and the dialogue felt believable.
one thing, You have a lot of fun thoughts in here like - "Do Not Go to the Whale!" and "GO!" - I wonder if it may be better to put these in italics?
Anyway, great chapter and happy writing!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed your story chapter a lot. The flow was good and the dialogue felt believable.
one thing, You have a lot of fun thoughts in here like - "Do Not Go to the Whale!" and "GO!" - I wonder if it may be better to put these in italics?
Anyway, great chapter and happy writing!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024
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I am glad you pointed that out. When I wrote it in google docs I had them bolded but it not transfer. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.