Drowning To Swim
A Poem3 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like this free verse and your philosophical meditation on life, who you are, your conflicting roles and, ultimately, your search for some real meaning to brighten your current path. You take idioms and twist them around so that, in the end, you're no wiser at finding a solution. The essence of the verse is in the mystery of our lives. I hope I haven't gone too far astray. Thank you for sharing, Jay. Debbie
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I like this free verse and your philosophical meditation on life, who you are, your conflicting roles and, ultimately, your search for some real meaning to brighten your current path. You take idioms and twist them around so that, in the end, you're no wiser at finding a solution. The essence of the verse is in the mystery of our lives. I hope I haven't gone too far astray. Thank you for sharing, Jay. Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
Comment from Allieas
Powerful poem. You conveyed a lot of meaning and pain in your words. I really felt for the subject of this. I liked the interesting line: "I don't take pennies for my thoughts." thank you for sharing!
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Powerful poem. You conveyed a lot of meaning and pain in your words. I really felt for the subject of this. I liked the interesting line: "I don't take pennies for my thoughts." thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024
Comment from patcelaw
I am only giving you a four on this, because you have not used any punctuation. That makes it really be sensible to the reader. Especially when the reader has to listen to it being read. Punctuation is important. Patricia.
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I am only giving you a four on this, because you have not used any punctuation. That makes it really be sensible to the reader. Especially when the reader has to listen to it being read. Punctuation is important. Patricia.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2024