No Body
Naani - 24 syllables10 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
Your words go so wonderfully with the picture. The picture didn't pop up right away. I was blown away by the words even before the picture came up.
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Your words go so wonderfully with the picture. The picture didn't pop up right away. I was blown away by the words even before the picture came up.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
When the contest ends, I recommend adding an s to the word bone.
Your poem is straight to the point without any gloss.
No muss no fuss. Good luck with the contest. Have a good week. Karen
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When the contest ends, I recommend adding an s to the word bone.
Your poem is straight to the point without any gloss.
No muss no fuss. Good luck with the contest. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
Comment from Jeano
Very interesting. I liked it, especially the last line. Proclaiming you're writing from the other side makes me wonder, do you still vote. LOL. It amazes me how some of you can pull such interesting ideas from your imagination. I've tried to cultivate one but I'm still struggling with it. Good Luck!
Write on.
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Very interesting. I liked it, especially the last line. Proclaiming you're writing from the other side makes me wonder, do you still vote. LOL. It amazes me how some of you can pull such interesting ideas from your imagination. I've tried to cultivate one but I'm still struggling with it. Good Luck!
Write on.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
That's exactly what happens unless a person selects cremation. Going to the cemetery does bring back moments of remembering, and why we are there. When a person has been gone for several years, we do turn to bones in a coffin.
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That's exactly what happens unless a person selects cremation. Going to the cemetery does bring back moments of remembering, and why we are there. When a person has been gone for several years, we do turn to bones in a coffin.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
This is well done and creepy! Especially since the speaker has been disassembled. You have paired it with a perfect picture. Thanks for sharing! Julie
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This is well done and creepy! Especially since the speaker has been disassembled. You have paired it with a perfect picture. Thanks for sharing! Julie
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
Comment from Navada
This is an interesting reflection on the process of transitioning into a future life. I like the way you've incorporated rhyme into your syllabic structure.
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This is an interesting reflection on the process of transitioning into a future life. I like the way you've incorporated rhyme into your syllabic structure.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
Comment from jessizero
This poem was chilling, and I mean that in the best possible way. It brings out a response in the reader, which is always good. You did a good job with the descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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This poem was chilling, and I mean that in the best possible way. It brings out a response in the reader, which is always good. You did a good job with the descriptions. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent humorous naani poem for the contest
with the nice addition of the two rhyming couplets.
An excellent epitaph for the tombstones too.
one of favorites is:
Here lies Les Moore
shot with six slugs from a forty-four
No less, no more
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
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This is an excellent humorous naani poem for the contest
with the nice addition of the two rhyming couplets.
An excellent epitaph for the tombstones too.
one of favorites is:
Here lies Les Moore
shot with six slugs from a forty-four
No less, no more
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
Comment from royowen
The Bible refers to this body as being a tent, something to hold ot soul while it needs something to walk around in, once it loses its life we will walk in another realm, more permanent, well done, blessings Roy
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The Bible refers to this body as being a tent, something to hold ot soul while it needs something to walk around in, once it loses its life we will walk in another realm, more permanent, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a chilling post and it is frightening to think we are just a jumble of bones in the end, but I love the humour here for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
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This is a chilling post and it is frightening to think we are just a jumble of bones in the end, but I love the humour here for the contest, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
