Aiming At Everything
A Poem5 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is worded pretty well however, my problem with it is that you have not used punctuation, so therefore, when it is read aloud, it just reads like one word right after the other. I think if you would go back and put in some punctuation, I might be able to give you a five star on this. Patricia
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This is worded pretty well however, my problem with it is that you have not used punctuation, so therefore, when it is read aloud, it just reads like one word right after the other. I think if you would go back and put in some punctuation, I might be able to give you a five star on this. Patricia
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Newton said an object in motion stays in motion so, seize the day, strike while the iron is hot, keep on keeping on! You seem to have faith in yourself and what you are doing so you are better off than some other people. This was fast paced interesting writing. It definitely felt like you were moving. I think your use of imagery was very effective, too.
Best wishes,
Alex
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Newton said an object in motion stays in motion so, seize the day, strike while the iron is hot, keep on keeping on! You seem to have faith in yourself and what you are doing so you are better off than some other people. This was fast paced interesting writing. It definitely felt like you were moving. I think your use of imagery was very effective, too.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from William Stephenson1
I found no grammatical errors. This is a talented poem that
brings together well known phrases which is remarkable considering
this to be a rhyme poem.
My only criticism is the structure of the poem and it's the difference between a six and a five.
Thank you for making me smile on this very early morniung.
-Bill Stephenson, PhD
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I found no grammatical errors. This is a talented poem that
brings together well known phrases which is remarkable considering
this to be a rhyme poem.
My only criticism is the structure of the poem and it's the difference between a six and a five.
Thank you for making me smile on this very early morniung.
-Bill Stephenson, PhD
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from T.A. Walk
I love this!! It flows so nicely :)
Feels like something that could be performed and rock a crowd.
No SPAG critique to offer.
Thank you for sharing your work!!
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I love this!! It flows so nicely :)
Feels like something that could be performed and rock a crowd.
No SPAG critique to offer.
Thank you for sharing your work!!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem full of great emotions and taking a stand for the right. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Thanks for the upbeat words. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written poem full of great emotions and taking a stand for the right. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Thanks for the upbeat words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
