Ten Minute Scripts For Two Actors
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Letters from the Front"A collection of short scripts
12 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The letters were well written and seemed as if they could really happen. I'm a little confused about this being an actual skit. The only dialogue was reading the letters. Maybe it's just me. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. The letters were well written and seemed as if they could really happen. I'm a little confused about this being an actual skit. The only dialogue was reading the letters. Maybe it's just me. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2024
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Very well done stage direction. This line will draw the members of the audience in, to sit closer to the edge of their seats: "Many weeks have now passed since the Armistice, and we still wait for news of your return." & "While the war has ended, one dark cloud tempers our joy here in Melbourne." and ironic summary. Well done. We'll be back for act 2
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Very well done stage direction. This line will draw the members of the audience in, to sit closer to the edge of their seats: "Many weeks have now passed since the Armistice, and we still wait for news of your return." & "While the war has ended, one dark cloud tempers our joy here in Melbourne." and ironic summary. Well done. We'll be back for act 2
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Liz! :)
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Good job
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent play but it is sad since it seems he passed away and she hasn't gotten the news yet. It is disturbing in view of the fact we've already gone though on pandemic lately and it could easily happen again. This Spanish flu sounds like it was worse that Covid. I think you did a great job formatting this.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent play but it is sad since it seems he passed away and she hasn't gotten the news yet. It is disturbing in view of the fact we've already gone though on pandemic lately and it could easily happen again. This Spanish flu sounds like it was worse that Covid. I think you did a great job formatting this.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Beth - I appreciate this feedback! You're right - he did pass away and she was writing into the void at the end without realising it. I actually wrote this play during the pandemic, so the inspiration for it is pretty clear. :)
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this. There is plenty of human interest, when Reg and Myrtle have to wait so long between letters. We sure take for granted our instantaneous communication today. Even though it was set in World War I, it reminded me just slightly of a World War II play I read several times years ago by John Patrick called "The Hasty Heart." I am not the best person to correct format. I have a tendency to follow a format I learned years ago that also conserves ink when I print a hard copy. But you can always find more information at a library.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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I liked reading this. There is plenty of human interest, when Reg and Myrtle have to wait so long between letters. We sure take for granted our instantaneous communication today. Even though it was set in World War I, it reminded me just slightly of a World War II play I read several times years ago by John Patrick called "The Hasty Heart." I am not the best person to correct format. I have a tendency to follow a format I learned years ago that also conserves ink when I print a hard copy. But you can always find more information at a library.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much. I tried to follow the formatting advice on the site. I haven't heard of The Hasty Heart - thanks for the tip. :)
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Sure thing. I ended up watching the 1949 movie of "The Hasty Heart" with Ronald Reagan in it after reading your script, on youtube. I know there is a scene where the married soldiers are reading letters from home. That must have been what your script reminded me of.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Navada,
I don't normally read screen plays, sometimes they can be painfully long. With what little knowledge I have, I would say that the scene was easy to picture. If this were part of a larger play, it would be a good chapter.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Hello Navada,
I don't normally read screen plays, sometimes they can be painfully long. With what little knowledge I have, I would say that the scene was easy to picture. If this were part of a larger play, it would be a good chapter.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I have a comedy screenplay I'm hoping to try for the first time, soon. I think you did an excellent job and it was a genius idea to use letters, I think. You created a natural dialog as each read, the letter contests shared the story and the screen play or play directions were clear also. I spent my life seeing plays and musicals on Broadway in NYC. I could see your story playing out on stage.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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I have a comedy screenplay I'm hoping to try for the first time, soon. I think you did an excellent job and it was a genius idea to use letters, I think. You created a natural dialog as each read, the letter contests shared the story and the screen play or play directions were clear also. I spent my life seeing plays and musicals on Broadway in NYC. I could see your story playing out on stage.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! I'd so love to visit Broadway. :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, this is amazing, and I like the eerie atmosphere that dominates the end:"How strange it would be if you survived the trenches, only to discover that the real frontline was right here in Melbourne all along." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Wow, this is amazing, and I like the eerie atmosphere that dominates the end:"How strange it would be if you survived the trenches, only to discover that the real frontline was right here in Melbourne all along." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I knew where this was going from the first scene, but nothing could have made it less powerful. I don't normally read scripts, but I'm glad I didn't miss yours. I only wish I had a six to reward it properly. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Wow, I knew where this was going from the first scene, but nothing could have made it less powerful. I don't normally read scripts, but I'm glad I didn't miss yours. I only wish I had a six to reward it properly. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for this lovely feedback! :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Such a sad story! But it is based in truth because it was a huge disaster when a flu came through and took more lives after a horrible war.
I can't offer much feedback on the format - I only know that your 'scene setting' allowed me to picture both sides of this work.
Thank you for sharing, and I wish you well in the contest,
~MP~
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Hi there,
Such a sad story! But it is based in truth because it was a huge disaster when a flu came through and took more lives after a horrible war.
I can't offer much feedback on the format - I only know that your 'scene setting' allowed me to picture both sides of this work.
Thank you for sharing, and I wish you well in the contest,
~MP~
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Nicki Nance
Your story put me in the front row. The characters were beautiful and authentic. History was a cleverly enbedded story. I wasn't clear on whether the characters read the letters they received out loud or were read in the writer's voice. Either way, it's lovely.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Your story put me in the front row. The characters were beautiful and authentic. History was a cleverly enbedded story. I wasn't clear on whether the characters read the letters they received out loud or were read in the writer's voice. Either way, it's lovely.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! My vision is that they would each read their own letters aloud. I started doing it the other way around, but soon realised that would become a problem at the end.