Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

This is both a touching story of really tough journey
"with razor blade shade,
rusted screw bolders "

And a tribute to a true friend
"He defended me as if i were his kingdom"

Your descriptive lines really balanced the scary road you were forced to walk with a faithful companion by your side through it.

"So I can breath
The fresh Air"
Just wondered if you meant "breathe" here.

Thanks for sharing! Julie

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024

I did mean breathe! Thank you for pointing that out! I definitely needed that!

Comment from Jonadab Ezerie

Excellent

I Like the syllabic patterns and stresses in the poem vary, contributing to the emotive and expressive nature of the writing. Great job and an interesting piece of work.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024

Thank you so much love! I really appreciate it! I honestly didn't know that this piece even existed until I opened the book and found it!

Comment from Luke Nicholas1

Good

This reading kind of scared me and since that is such a true reflection of life. Full of healing full of fear for the uncertainly of knowing. And yet there was a feeling of coming home and finding the destination after a long journey. What scary things. Look out there among us that we seem never to understand but yet somehow we fully understand it. I enjoyed this reading very much

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024

I am so glad you enjoyed this piece. It was a magical find in one of my old journals. Thank you for identifying the reality of the scare and comfort wrapped all into one!

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a very heartfelt and powerful verse, conveying with skilful imagery the journey through darkness and discomfort to find oneself back in the light again. In order to get there, you needed help and guidance to give you strength to fight those demons of the past. The one thing I would suggest is a change of font style which I found difficult to read and it might well deter other reviewers who might be visually challenged. But this is an excellent and evocative verse so well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024

Thank you so much love. I honestly chose this style of font because it is relatively somewhat like my hand writing in my Journal but thinking of it now, I would like to develop more of a simplistic read for people that are impaired. So hopefully the next post I will find another font that is close to the style of handwriting! I appreciate your wonderful feedback lovie!

Comment from JanPerry

Excellent

Your notes helped me understand your meaning. I thought initially that it was made up rambling. An exploration into your unknown mind.
If there is a spark of truth in it, it would undoubtedly be that U were in hospital with someone who also was sick there.
His knighthood however, may have made U rely on him too much. Since U are a very strong person in yourself, U can pull yourself thru it anyway. But it's good he saved U with his encouragement.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024

I will give you a little history why this is the way it is. I was struggling with lupus and type one diabetes issues, due to my lupus (Ms. Loupy) rejecting my gullbladder because of sludge within it. It took many many hospital trips to finally have them admit me & take it out. My muscles could not function for 6 hours after waking. It was really hard to get any hospital to treat me properly in this area because they are 10 years behind in medical advancements. My new boyfriend had a chronic illness and took care of moving the rest of my belongings while I was admitted into the ICU. He then repeatedly stayed in the hospital with me because none of the nurses or doctors were listening to anything I said about my conditions & wouldn't focus on the actual problem at hand. I am just an enigma for hospital staff. They attempted to take my insulin from me because they said they don't carry that insulin and I wouldn't be allowed to take it to the floor. My boyfriend kept it in his pocket and gave it back to me after this doctor told him to take it home. My sugar kept bottoming out and due to the last time I was at this hospital & they could not provide anything gluten free - I brought an entire bag of golden delicious apples. So this doctor ordered for someone to order something from the kitchen for me without my specified diet. I then told my boyfriend to grab an apple out of my bag because they wouldn't have a sandwich I would be capable of eating without causing more issues. The doctor then put me down and started accusing me of being a drug addict and a liar & I respectfully dismissed her from my case and asked for a new doctor because she admitted me under a false diagnosis (blood sugar issues). Although my blood sugar was an issue, it was not the main cause. I ended up having the surgery to remove it but it had taken a few days before I was able to leave the hospital. I have PTSD from hospital visits. This boyfriend was the first concrete person I was with after I left my daughters father, my main abuser. It took a lot mentally/emotionally & physically. This wonderful man remained a massive support system until he passed away 3.5 years ago due to his condition. But he told me exactly about the person I am with now and how much I needed him in life. Magically, I had just met my husband before my ex passed.

reply by JanPerry on 19-Jan-2024

Wow this is a lot to take in for me considering it's just a writing site. I have a lady friend who was head of our library. She has two cancers going on. She has moved to three hospitals repeatedly for a year and is hanging on for dear life. Her husband is strong support and I text with her. I think she has had a lot to cope with too. Good luck in your future health too.