I Am Just A Ghost
A poem for the people who are not sure who they are anymore.2 total reviews
Comment from Yusita
Wow, this was beautifully written and profound... the rhyming scheme was on point and the flow, in general, was quite good. This was a very enjoyable and thought-provoking read. I'm not sure if you're going for a consistent flow or not, but if you are, I did notice a few places where the flow became a little "interrupted". I have a small recommendation for one of them. For this line: [Do they remember how I used to laugh?] you could change "how I used to laugh" to "how I'd laugh". I find that it helps with the flow. However, flow isn't always important to everyone so if that is the case with you, please ignore my comment! hehe :) Either way, I loved this poem of yours.
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Wow, this was beautifully written and profound... the rhyming scheme was on point and the flow, in general, was quite good. This was a very enjoyable and thought-provoking read. I'm not sure if you're going for a consistent flow or not, but if you are, I did notice a few places where the flow became a little "interrupted". I have a small recommendation for one of them. For this line: [Do they remember how I used to laugh?] you could change "how I used to laugh" to "how I'd laugh". I find that it helps with the flow. However, flow isn't always important to everyone so if that is the case with you, please ignore my comment! hehe :) Either way, I loved this poem of yours.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Feeling invisible is what many elderly people feel and your poem has some truth in it as we go through life being ignored. One suggestion is to make your text a little bigger so that it is more easily read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Feeling invisible is what many elderly people feel and your poem has some truth in it as we go through life being ignored. One suggestion is to make your text a little bigger so that it is more easily read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Oh, yes! Great suggestion! Thank you, Dolly! : )
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Oh, yes! Great suggestion! Thank you, Dolly! : )