haiku (a small child)
A Haiku for the club challenge17 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi Kim. Great job on this Essence haiku. Like you, I thought she was holding a flower and I can see how that is the premise for your last line. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Hi Kim. Great job on this Essence haiku. Like you, I thought she was holding a flower and I can see how that is the premise for your last line. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Melissa, yes, a bit deceiving that picture, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Navada
There is something quite haunting about this image, featuring a little girl with big eyes who has a flower in her hair, but has no shoes. Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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There is something quite haunting about this image, featuring a little girl with big eyes who has a flower in her hair, but has no shoes. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Nice work! Great picture too! She looks like she's lost. That's a great haiku for the contest I find submission to your words are sublime short as they must be you still create an impact so that's me is a sign of a great writer! Last line of your poem is my favorite it does strike me a child having lost her parents standing there by yourself. I see no issues with grammar esthetic subject matter or sentence structure you've done amazing job best block in the contest I hope that you have an amazing day too!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Nice work! Great picture too! She looks like she's lost. That's a great haiku for the contest I find submission to your words are sublime short as they must be you still create an impact so that's me is a sign of a great writer! Last line of your poem is my favorite it does strike me a child having lost her parents standing there by yourself. I see no issues with grammar esthetic subject matter or sentence structure you've done amazing job best block in the contest I hope that you have an amazing day too!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, yes, my day is going well, your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from mermaids
The picture and your words bring forth emotions and feelings. Your last line is powerful "all roots severed". Your use of words creates a clear image with the mention of flower and roots. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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The picture and your words bring forth emotions and feelings. Your last line is powerful "all roots severed". Your use of words creates a clear image with the mention of flower and roots. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hello, Kahpot! Their photo here is haunting, and I can't stop looking at her. You may be right about the flower; your words beautifully carry that notion.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hello, Kahpot! Their photo here is haunting, and I can't stop looking at her. You may be right about the flower; your words beautifully carry that notion.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you, JohnC, yes, that allusive flower, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You did a good job with the poem, kahpot.
-It does look like a flower.
-You do a good job describing the
emotions of the "small child."
-The satori line is very good because
it can be read on different levels;
literally, the roots of the flower;
figuratively, her roots from her family.
-Very well done; have a great day.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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-You did a good job with the poem, kahpot.
-It does look like a flower.
-You do a good job describing the
emotions of the "small child."
-The satori line is very good because
it can be read on different levels;
literally, the roots of the flower;
figuratively, her roots from her family.
-Very well done; have a great day.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write here as your words have a double meaning and it is so sad for these orphaned children who grow up without the security of a home, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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A poignant write here as your words have a double meaning and it is so sad for these orphaned children who grow up without the security of a home, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
Very compelling image, and I thought she might be from a war-torn country and have lost her parents, ie all her heritage and stability. Well done. Very thoughtfully written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Very compelling image, and I thought she might be from a war-torn country and have lost her parents, ie all her heritage and stability. Well done. Very thoughtfully written.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
This is truly thought provoking kahpot. The flower representing the loss of innocence, and with war torn nations the loss of entire families, home and country is a devastation very difficult to comprehend.
Very well done.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This is truly thought provoking kahpot. The flower representing the loss of innocence, and with war torn nations the loss of entire families, home and country is a devastation very difficult to comprehend.
Very well done.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
This is a haunting photo and your poem captures the sadness with the last line. I thought she was holding a flower too! Nice response to the club challenge.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This is a haunting photo and your poem captures the sadness with the last line. I thought she was holding a flower too! Nice response to the club challenge.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
